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I think you did well in describing Jason's torn feelings, the fear of being outed with the outcomes he thoughts are inevitable AND the desire to get closer with Peter. I liked this chapter again. The pacing was perfect and few of the moments were just super cute. The mouthwash thingy and all. Yup.

This was my favorite chapter of the three first ones. I feel I got closer to both Peter and Jason now. Before there were too many characters to follow and remember (I am bad like that, I warm up to the side characters slowly). There was lots and lots of sexual and psychological tension in this chapter. I enjoyed this much There were few points in the text that could have needed rephrasing or tightening. But only few. I will pm them to you if you feel like you want them. As said I liked this chapter a lot, I feel it took until here to get the story really starting.

Ok, I do appreciate that you post this in small pieces, just that I hate waiting for the rest. You will get much reads and revs but you are killing me Everyone seems to be very very family orientated when it comes to the Hannovers. Even Bobby is very protective of Amberly's brother. I like that. With Bobby's perspective it is fun to get the scientific look on things. How do you cut the chapters?

Yes, I am wondering too why Puck didn't have the shots. How long will Rescue day be? How many minis are we looking out for? You do seem to go from one extreme to another **rolls eyes** . Just saying.

I liked the ending too I like a touch of realism every now and then, life doesn't always offer happy endings. Thanx Frosty for a good read!

Bobby is interesting. glad to see he gets more attention, finally. What happens to him soon will be curious to see.

You can come and pitch about the job as much as needed when you start. It is just a job! Your real life is somewhere else! I think that you are aware of that subconsciously when you allow the bohemian side of you go wild at home. Love you Nephy.

SEXY - BEAUTIFUL.

I don't have any need or want for my own biological kids. I can and likely will live without them. On the other hand I wouldn't object till grave if my hypothetical partner would want them. I could foster parent maybe teenagers, give stability and love to them.

Hahaha. Good one

More contact between Peter and Jason... Mystery pasta, **giggle** I think the ending was so hot in building tension and expectations. And who doesn't like men with motorbikes? I liked this chapter, it was tighter than the first one, lesser characters in it probably helped me to get in the flow. Aside from random scenes with many people I prefer tops 2-4 people in one scene so I can focus and make a clear image of it. The first chappy represented the parents and Jordan and coach. Maybe too soon was the dinner with the parents there since I didn't feel connected to them yet. Uhm... Sorry this was supposed to be c2 review That said, I really liked this chapter! Poor Jason. I hope he gets over his dilemma of losing his parents money soon and faces the real world of consequences. Now he is worried about losing the financial support more than he is losing the love from his mother and father. At least that was how it came out. The fear of being kicked out of the soccer team was totally 100% believable! That is reality. Ok, fear of losing the money is too, but I don't think Jason is that cold. Anyways, he certainly has some great amount of personal growth to do and that is what this story is basicly about, right? :D ps. I keep getting images of young David Beckham as Jason and Shemar Moore as Darryl.

That was dark and serious. Like really... I want my poet to be happy! It was beautiful.

When the cat is away The mice run astray Twins, minions and *puppy eyes of doom* Rules go down in the chat room! With Lughbert's return it's time to pay :king:

I think in my first read I got to the eleventh chapter... To be honest, I couldn't get in to the game description at the first read or the second read. For me it was too much. Yet I did appreciate the build up for making a point of just how important role the sports play at the boys life. Other than that, really good introduction to the characters.

Something about the start reminded me of Harry Potter! I can't believe I have jumped over this story. I absolutely loved the twist in it. I loved the lightness in it too! And poor Sissy, you made her so technically skilled, that I was blinking at first... way to go girl! Then it turns out ha, she was a boy. I thought when he ordered the new 'real boy android' exteriors Cinder had gotten faulty ones since you didn't describe them more. I liked the androids too. My favorite thing in this story was the gender confusion. You made the original fairy tale modern and dressed both the Prince Charming and Cinderella in totally different dresses. I giggled at the outfit Teddy had to wear in the Ball. Anything that studies the borders of gender is so interesting, and you didn't do this with too much seriousness, it fit well this particular story. Really enjoyable work. I wish you would write MORE of these light toned stories too since you obviously have skills to do them.

No other comments but *sigh*. That was beautiful.

Hello Nop! Welcome to the bunch! If you need any assistance just holla me Whatcha been reading?

Awww. Such an emotional chapter. Thank you for the music too. I listened them at the side while reading.

Good for you hun. **rubs Neph's back**

I'm giddy happy for you guys. both.

Sweet Angie... Will she be enough in the end that you painted in the prologue? What exactly does she know about Andy's and Matt's relationship? Is she that intuitive? How accepting can she be...? Looots of questions.

Small significant things happening in this chapter. Andy starting to come more and more aware of his hidden sexuality. Sigh. I'm curious what happens in Matt's end. And I'm starting to be scared to continue reading since the prologue set out not a happy lane to Matt. Many big questions lead this story forward, a 'must read on' story.

Horny bugger. Is he developing hots for this Cole-guy too? **rolls eyes** I'm enjoying the balance you keep with the intensity of teenage hormones and deeper connection between Matt and Andy.

Wow! That was intense! Raw and masculine. Things left unspoken but still message moving between the boys... I like.

Awww... Sorry to hear that. At least you'll wake up if something is out of the ordinary is happening during your sleep. My ex was like that. I chose to sleep downstairs willingly just to avoid fights about keeping him awake. Even if I was in the next room, he could get pissed about me turning pages of a book. Grr... Sorry... I bet he couldn't help it. I'm a sound sleeper. A bomb could explode next to me and I wouldn't wake up. Only things that startle me awake are alarm clock and cell phone and someone shaking me. Or a cat vomiting. For some reason I always wake up for that sound. I don't wake up when I sleep walk or talk. Apparently I do both. I get sleep easily. Every time we go road tripping with a car or travel by train etc. I fall asleep in minutes if someone isn't keeping me company.