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um.. the um.... sex.

hey Q-man lemme see what can I say about this story.. I liked it. Parts of it were funny, but parts of it made me go huh? too. I'm not quite sure why he had to let Trev down like he did at the end... I like the fact that it's going to lead into a larger work and I understand how that works. Lord knows I've used anthologies to do that plenty in the past... good luck on the longer story. anyway... keep writing... it just gets better with practice (and you only have 15 weeks until all hell breaks loose in your life).

Ah the passage of time. Well I wanted it to seem a little sketchy to Kismet with the ship's travel and all. Otherwise it's exactly the same amount of time as is covered in Holy Day, to the day. I think at this point everyone wants to know what happened to Puck. I have a list -- Dramatis Personae I think it's called.

You think you know someone: You live with a guy for four years only to find out they aren’t exactly human. Your fiancé meant to wed your best friend. You meet an alien and fall in love. Yeah, you think you know someone…

hey I liked what the story might have been... sighs... not sure how you're gonna take this... ok... this feels not quite there for me -- biggest suggestion: get help -- an editor who is used to short stories, a beta who reads a lot of short stories (or maybe writes them) and can really recognise one. Even if you are writing in the same universe (and with the same characters) the story has to have it's own beginning, middle, and end. Even if you leave that end wide open for more stories or set up the next one that's following... it must end. I'm not seeing the end. Now other than that... I liked this. I would like to read more about these characters in this universe. Also, if this is part of a series of stories (which I think it is at least in the same universe as another of yours) then it's polite to tell the reader and to tell them if prior reading is required/helpful/useful and where that reading might be found. Thank you for sharing, and happy writing.

You wrote a very enjoyable story here Sara. I very much enjoyed it and I think others will too. Nicely written.

SSSHHHHHH! I was sooooo flying under the radar on that! Thanks Cia. pouts. Well now you are just going to have to crack that whip and deal with me being a whiny bitch while I write it... three months and ticking.

well... I wasn't confused. Nor was I overly impressed. This style of writing is not my favorite, we'll just leave it at that. Personally I would have liked a little more closure.

Well, that was different. I wonder what they are eating... the deer?

I think there is more bubble wrap in the future... I love the way you've paired two totally different personalities the way it happenes in real life so very often... makes me wonder about your S.O.... herm.

hrmph and you keep telling me you aren't good enough. try again sucker.

I tried to be a bit more gentle in this story than I was in Holy Day, and having a much smaller cast helped. I'm not quite sure what you mean by the mumbled voices echoing... if you would care to discuss that in the forum I would like to hear what you have to say. Soon on the next one. The offering was supposed to make you giggle. Actually there were a couple places... I hope you got a decent laugh out of a few of them. Fate/Luck/Chance... can you say sub-theme? Go back and read Monday. I dunno if they will all get back together. I guess you will just have to read and find out.

well, if things go the way I want them to you won't have such a long wait. The next one might be out in July/August to make Legends stay on track. glad you enjoyed it

You're welcome Jian. He was a bit confused, but he didn't let that bother him much... and well... let's just say he don't lay down and take much... except from Taloric.

heh I'm honestly not trying to confuse people! I like Kismet too, it's funny how they each have thier own personalities develop as I write them but when I start they are pretty much blank slates. I can't wait to see Puck's personality after all he's been through. Rix is a sexy beast. Then again I think all the boys are. Gads I hope the theads are coming together... I think I'm going to climax soon!

well duh... two male fashion models in the same show... who woulda NOT guessed? or at least assumed... I liked it.

heh I'm still not sold that it fits THIS theme... however, it's here now so it's done. nicely written and yes, I agree with Nephy, your stories are getting better. Good Job.

snickers. It had to be Lu... and only Lu... that was a very fun story to read, kudos.

Can you say DENSE? sheesh. Anyway, this was a fun little romp. Good job Jian.

awwww good job Cia. I know you still think I don't read your stories.. but bleh. I do. There I admitted it. Happy? This one was nearly made me cry you evil wench.

naked and covered in bug? Not my idea of a good time, But if you kije it,,,, enjoy!

I don't know. What does matter? Mostly people seem self centered and egotistical, is that what we as a species have become? Or is that what we always were?

I didn't want to spoil the stories for anyone if I could help it... by keeping some of them seperate it will help with later stories, you will see... the only other way I could have done it was to put "in this story" "in this story" which I could have just put in the prologues of each story

You're welcome. I figured with more coming out that this might be needed, and the one for "Legands" is promising to have quite a few characters too...

LOL a gallery? well let me know if I missed anyone!