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ROFL, Talked himself out of a good time. I'm not sure that Simon is aware of this good time he's managed to side step. LOL How does Billy know about Golden Showers I wonder.

Wow, another two. That was an unforeseen development. haha. Superb story Stellar. You've pulled off a really awesome work of fiction and I think won a lot of fans along the way. This is the kind of story that people would pay to read. I'm glad that the spin offs are happening, there is so much more to this story, and you've bated the hook, we're all waiting for the next instalment. I know this was a labour of love for you and you worked so hard to gain perfection. You should be proud, you excelled yourself and brought us all a read that gave each of us a real sensation of adventure. That is the mark of a great writer and someone that lived their work as much as wrote it. I salute you sir, this was awesome.

The worst part of that was killing off Carlos. I had grown to love him as a character, had wanted so much for him, a chance to be happy and loved. I kinda thought he deserved it. So seeing him die was not easy to say the least. So they arrive home at earth. I must admit I never expected that. I'm not even sure I ever expected that they'd survive leaving the planet. I do kind of wonder what happens to aqumi now that they are not near any nodes. I suppose with Shay having one within him, he carries this energy source inside him. I also kind of worry that the link to earth has been opened, does that mean the arbiters can pursue him? Has Shay brought Sharpes Virus back to earth inadvertently? It has been one hell of a roller coaster ride I have to say. Such amazing characters and so much emotion and tension throughout the story. Superb is a true reflection of your ability to entertain. So much fascination and enjoyment was tied up with this story, I'm grateful that I had chance to read it, and you chose to share. Good job.

Oh I was disappointed that Tigresse didn't get her cummupence. Still, I guess that arrogance has been cut down a peg or two now. And Hartley finally dispatched and in such a fitting way to meet his end. I was going to say despatched to meet his maker, but there is only one place for such a loathsome and despicable life from to be despatched, and it is not a place where he'd be met by any welcoming committee. So Shay has absorbed the node? I'm not sure I got that bit completely. I guess he is the master of the system so if he chooses to take bodily control, he can. I wonder what that does to him in terms of his power though?

You almost grabbed his nuts!!!!!! Of course that counts boyo! Haha God I never got that lucky with any of the guys I fancied at that age. I loved the way he described the music video's. I am so going to use that as a quote or something some day!

ROFL Mr Winky!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ah gosh. Too funny. And then that bit about Sam coming back with the Gym Teacher. Love good humour in a story. Now I thought he'd had a chat with Brandon once before, so confused me a bit when he was able to go talk to him for the first time. And second swing at Simon. Is that wise???

LOL Too cute. Taking that first step is no easy process Billy boy. I love how he berates himself in his Diary. It's cute. So he's got three boys he drools over and he's worried about being a slut? Wow. That makes me feel like a real bad example of teenage horniness then. I fancied so many boys at school, if i'd had the balls to do anything about it, I'd have had more sex than anyone could keep up with.

Hahaha, so true to life. We build up this whole big picture in our mind of how something will turn out, and find out things always take their own course when the time comes. Awww, Billy got to learn this yet ey? Back at the deep thinking, wondering how others think about him. It is true though, it is not really something we consider too carefully. I mean we are always caught up in a world of worry of how people think about us, and if they like us, but we never really stop to think what the reality might be. Are they as nervous or cautious or wired as we are ourselves. If we could put all that unsure speculation aside, would we maybe all get on just a little better? Interesting to stop and think about the stuff Billy himself is wondering.

Ha, he is such a mischievous little ike! a deep thinker it must be said, but a proper horny teen at that too. I wonder how he'll feel when he comes to the realisation that even when we really don't want to be selfish, we are. Life has much to teach the kid, and the lesson of hurt and pain is going to be one of them me finks.

Pretty Boy. Never really stopped to think that much in depth about what it means to think of someone as pretty. Interesting consideration he uses when he's setting out what is cute, what is hot, and of course what is pretty. He is really mature for his age our Billy. I mean, he wants sex, but is sensible enough to want it with someone special. I can remember at that age I just wanted sex. Didn't really think of it being speical or nowt. It just had to be with someone hot.

I always loved the way Billy would think things through in his diary in such a mature way. I mean that first entry bit where he wonders about why Gay becomes the fixation and if it really does change anything about himself. And then in the second entry where he points out that school is the one place in life where your mates are all grouped under one roof. I love the way I can relate to the things you've got Billy thinking about. I can put myself in his shoes and remember a time I've had those thoughts myself. Maybe I had them a whole load later in life, when I'd grown up a whole lot, but still, it is as if at times I'm seeing Billy's life through my own experiences.

So I came across the Billy Chase Chronicles in the story updates list today. I guess you must have updated a chapter in the new book, and I was like OMG, I haven't checked out any Billy Chase in donkeys years. So I started picking through trying to find my last comment or review so I could figure where I was up to, but surprisingly I can't seem to find any! I thought I'd reviewed before, but obviously not, so here I am, back at the start and decided to make my way through again. I'll get reviewing as this cute ikle tale deserves, and let ya know what I'm thinking. Love the bit where you list the fantastic benefits of wanking off once a day or more. Too cute.

Not sure I got the sense of why anyone would act that way, or where the humour lay. If anything it's a little way out there.

Sad tale to tell. Loss of ones so young is as you say so very hard to understand. Life can be so unfair in that way. I'm just glad that the boys had consolation parents and their own had planned well enough to have the back up plan worked out. Great story Bill. Thanks

I adore the way you work humour into your writing Andy. I enjoy getting a chuckle and a great feeling from your stories. Heart warming and cute, and a wonderful use of the theme and loved the Scottish feel to it all. Makes me wonder if we'll ever get to see any more of Angus in future stories.

Really interesting little story. I wanted so much more from it, it is presented with a feel of something bigger. There is a real story in there waiting to explode. The quick switch from scene to scene was a little distracting, I know the first time it happened when Elliot met Max I was quite confused, but again I think that is more because my mind was still imagining possibilities from the first passage of the story when I started reading the next bit. I loved the fact the underdog got the better deal. I wanted to see Elliot happy, he clearly wasn't, nor was respected I felt, so it panned out for the best for him I guess. Nice entry.

Reading this made me feel warm and fuzzy inside like a hot chocolate on a chilly day. Awesome story, so simple, yet so meaningful, and so damn true to life. It is exactly what we do, leaving things to grow and fester instead of dealing with them head on. Oh I am so guilty of this at times. wonderful writing, and great use of the antho theme. Well Done.

Inspiring. You captured the period and issues of the day perfectly. I mean it is something that gay people have had to wrestle and deal with throughout history, maybe not in quite the same way in medieval times, but still, it is something that has always interested me, and something I've explored in writing a period piece myself from a similar time period. Unlike you, I hit a stumbling block when it came to broaching how men of that time would seriously even broach the idea, let along explore it, so it was really nice to read something like this and see how someone else worked it through. Really great read, and thank you.

Oh That ripped the heart right out from under me. So often we don't get to see the world of pain that a suicide victim lives each and every day. Just a simple glimpse is all we can ever hope to see, much as here, yet it is a tiny glimpse that hurts all the same. So much is made of the selfishness of suicide. Personally I've often tried to imagine what it must feeling like to walk in those shoes. How brave must you be to be able to do something so final? How much hurt and pain do you carry before too much becomes enough to bring it to an end? Powerful and sad buddy, and really well written.

Too little to say. Really only one word I can use.... Touching. Thank you, that was a truly awesome read.

Cute little story, and loved how the younger brother stepped in to sort out the older brother's love life. That was really sweet, and some crafty engineering. I did almost want to know what all he'd managed to pull off in the one day though, it zipped through that bit a little too quick. Great entry all the same. A fun read, and super duper ending.

Ok. Few little niggles in grammar and stuff that could be sorted to flow a little better, but the important bit is that you nailed the plot development angle of building a picture around the central character. We have more of a picture of who he is, how he thinks and where he hurts. You will at some point need to pad the character out some more. I understand that as he is largely based on who you are, you view him through your own eyes, but you need to step back somewhere and see your story through the readers eyes too. They have questions and stuff they want to know, so getting an idea of how you are going to show the reader more of this character will help you to fill in the blanks in future chapters. I'd also suggest concentrating on dialogue. Conversations are dynamic and complex styles of communication and getting a natural flow is really important to a story. If it is too short or too quick it loses its impact and a reader does not build a relationship with the character. It is always good to go back and focus on a passage of dialogue as a writer and think, is that how I'd say it if it were me having this conversation? Is this a conversation I'd take part in? That is generally a good place to start to gauge if something feels right as a discussion between your characters. Good going so far. Be good to see where you take this.

Just enough of a hook to sink in and bait the reader. In many ways that is a really great ploy, as it is short, sharp and a reader is almost forced to read chapter two, where you can strike and make sure you've really hooked the reader well and truly to your story. That does mean though, that you must make the next chapter a really good one, and I'm lucky enough to be joining the story just as chapter two is ready for me to go and read. So I shall do this and let you know what if you've hooked me or not.

Rock solid and loyal he was a pillar of the GA community and heaven is a better place for his arrival. May the wind always be beneath your wings and the sun shine brightly on your face. Sleep well Trebs.

Oh how very X Rated young lady! Titalising us with tantalising erotica. How perfect could a chapter be.