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There's a thread in the Writer's Corner forum entitled 'Getting stuck - or bored with typing.' Folks offer suggestions to prevent/deal with just this kind of a thing. Who knows, something in there might sing out to you.

That was quite a delightful short story, Sasha.

Dang, you turned Roy into a Saint, Cole. Made my last comment make me seem like a pisser. Lordy! I suppose that means I have to read the whole damn story now.

Roy! Oh no, not Roy, Cole. He was whiny. He had no self-esteem. What are going to do to poor Chad, Cole? Hasn't he suffered enough? Unless . . . Roy has grown a pair since we last heard about him. Please say you've given him a backbone. Please?

As I've said previously, I think you have fine story telling instincts and you know how to unravel a tale to the enjoyment of many readers. You've done well with this story. I leave you with this thought--instead of relying on the comments of your readers in order to polish your story for a rewrite--why not attempt to enlist a few members in acting as betas for new writing and/or editing. This can be done either through the forums Editors Corner - Writing Support Request or perhaps eliciting the services of some of your enthusiastic readers. Either way, you would likely avoid the greater need for a rewrite.

Hello Mollyhousemouse and welcome to membership.

Hello Zook. Welcome to GA!

#349 is a good one. What to do, what to do--and how to do it?!!

Hello Paexie. Lots of people lurk before they join, but GA's kind of irresistible. Welcome!

Hello Jacobnc, and welcome to GA. Glad to have you with us.

The rehashing of events from Damien's perspective was jarring and unnecessary. The story wasn't moved along and no real information was added that we couldn't already surmise. Cannd makes a valuable point: Kayden has saved Damien's life once already and has provided information of Roman's activities, and we have been led to believe he has become important to Damien--especially so in this chapter. Why then is Damien behaving so selfishly in waiting so long to check on Kayden? Notwithstanding the confusion of the moment, this behavior rings false if we are truly meant to believe that Damien loves Kayden.

Hello to you, BlkIrish23. Welcome to GA!

Happy Birthday Adam!

Hello Kendall and welcome to GA as a member.

A member status posed this question recently: Does serial posting hurt a story? I took serial to mean those stories in which a chapter a week or very two weeks of time are being posted. My opinion is that it does--hurt the story, that is. No matter how good the story telling, something is lost. I'm very glad to say that the frequency of the posting of this story is a breath of fresh air. Also, there is much to be gained by the reader and very little, if anything, of note seems to be lost to the author. This author has faithful readers who comment frequently and has gained considerable approval ratings. The frequent posting has not hurt and I dare say that it would not hurt other authors either. But . . . All would be moot if the author did not have the skill to tell their story. Clearly, craftingmom has the skill, and aren't we the lucky ones for it.

This is yet another hit out of the ballpark for dkstories! A definite reward for the price of admission. Batter - Batter - Swing! For the cost of a dog and a beer at the game you can enjoy a month of Premium Access.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY JO ANN Many, Many Happy Returns!

What was that! Unfortunately, it resembles a desperate attempt that the malls in my old stomping grounds back in Ohio might produce. What were once thriving shopping centers have have fallen on hard times . . . along with the shoppers--and again, unfortunately.

Happy Birthday Bill.

I'm really not sure how you plan to wrap this up in another nine or ten chapters. The story is interesting and compelling enough to get some mileage out of it--some long chapter mileage :Pthat is. You've got us, so why let us go so soon!

You have an interesting story in the works, Craftingmom. One thing that stands out as incongruous is the behavior of the lower class of people - the slave master, the slave handler at the manor house. These people are shown as being differential one moment and in the next they are speaking their minds freely to their betters. It should be consistently one or the other and I'm sure you recognize which way that should lean. You lose the necessary tone otherwise. You have a promising story and I look forward to reading and finding out where you take it.

In my opinion—the context of the kiss does matter. It would be very hard to view this kiss as meaning anything beyond how it was meant to be viewed. The kiss itself was not on the lips—but on the corner of the mouth—which removes any sexual overtone. It is an emotional display of affection. In this case, for a dying friend—  In a silent film—  In which exaggerated emotional expression is de rigueur. To see this as somehow more than it is meant to portray . . . Is a bit of a stretch. As Gary Couzens writes in his review of the movie: "It is not hard to read . . . as a coded tragic gay love story, and you can do the same with Wings, though how much this is intended, and how much 1927's audience would have picked up on it, is open to conjecture." I think—those that want to find something . . . will. But they very well may not be correct in their interpretation.

Happy Birthday Cia!

Wish you the best of luck toward finding a good job, Stephanie.

So, hi back at you. Welcome to GA, Basketballboy03.