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  1. Happy Birthday Steve! You Wildone, you!
  2. I found this to be interesting: http://writinghappiness.com/take-the-confusion-out-of-blog-writing-create-a-reader-profile/
  3. Ron

    Chapter 33

    There was an awful lot of information to take in but it sounded meaningful. I felt like my ship had sank and I was treading water while reading it though--and without a life vest. For a person who is not keen on war stories it was difficult to get through but I'm hoping I take enough away so as to not be out of the loop for the next chapter.
  4. Happy Birthday Celethiel.
  5. Congratulations on a fine achievement, Myr. I am appreciative of what you have accomplished with GA. Thanks!
  6. Happy Birthday Totally!!!
  7. Ron

    Prompt 354

    Does that mean Rudy doesn't have to take the Prozac?
  8. Ron

    Prompt 340

    I think your prompt got lost, Andy. The usual commentator group is late, including me--I just found the story. Only Valkyrie was on the spot prompt. That was quite a full stop ending to this Halloween treat. The mean old man setup was great and I liked the backstory for those mentioned early on in the story. Nice!
  9. HAPPY BIRTHDAY DAVE! NOW LET'S PARTY
  10. Ron

    Memory Loss

    You can get a concussion, Sasha, without hitting your head. http://www.webmd.com/brain/tc/traumatic-brain-injury-concussion-overview Please take care of yourself.
  11. Ron

    Avalon 2005

    I think the prompts offer a good chance to let one's fingers run away, to take a chance on different styles, and to practice all of those wonderful things that writing can do. That had nice imaginative twist to it, Carlos. I liked it.
  12. Ron

    Chapter 14 (3.4)

    I'm not a big fan of serialized flash fiction normally. I read them, but I don't particularly like the format. I feel differently about this story, Julie. You're capturing a tone with these chapters that strikes a very nice balance of the mundane and humor, masculinity and affection, and with a little fun discipline thrown in for spice. I find it an excellent combination.
  13. Sounds like you were in need of a great new chapter in life and have begun it already. Good for you. Happy Birthday. Many happy returns!
  14. Gifted at sports, he left the others to eat dust. Shit, did I have to pick today to tell them?! Jamie guessed at which one topped; that's who he wanted.
  15. Two Frisbees in air at all times—tension is rising.
  16. No one else? Fine! This story has a dark side (no relation to the Sith) to it but there is much to relieve that aspect, too. I find the story to be more firmly placed among the fantasy genre than that of Sci-Fi, and Renee points out some very good qualities of the story: Damon and Kai love each other very much and that comes across without fail; family plays a big role, and to good effect. Like Renee, I think, this is a good read. And, it has the benefit of being a lead-in to Andrew's newest work - The Chosen. For those who enjoy Andrew Todd's writing, and specifically The Chosen, it's a must read. Anyone who enjoys fantasy, with a hint of Sci-Fi, will appreciate Empath's Kiss.
  17. Although Wayne's story intro for Body and Soul scares me a little, I'm going to dive right in at the top and work my way down. Big applause to Renee and those others who had a hand in bringing us this fall's anthology.
  18. Happy Birthday Conner!
  19. Hello, Dave. Welcome to GA.
  20. I've just finished reading Social Skills by Sara Alva from last weeks Premium Tuesday feature, and for the second time. It took me a few chapters to remember that I had already read the story. It's a good, decent read; better than some. Sure, you can't read these stories any other way on site except to purchase Premium Access . . . but perhaps it's best to look at that available writing as icing, on what is arguably, already a very nice cake . . . and Premium Access helps provide the support, or if you must . . . that nice cake stand to hold it all up. The Experiment by Cia is a darn good read full of love, compassion, drama, and military excess; not necessarily in that order. If Premium Access fits into your budget, you'll find yourself with a nice finger-swipe of frosting with this one.
  21. Ron

    Chapter 12

    It remains interesting!
  22. You've captured the passage of time and the depth of the loss well--even that of the mother hanging on to her grief. Great use of props: The hospital environment, the medical equipment, the crutches. All used to good effect to create atmosphere and add to the purpose of the visit. My Saturday may be a sadder, and a more contemplative one, but that means you've written well, Mann.
  23. Ron

    Prompt 353

    Unless Evan was a total flight risk throughout the ten years of the relationship, I imagine he must not have been happy with it to have trotted off like that. Jody clearly saw himself, and the relationship, as being abandoned--perhaps even saw himself as a victim. I think, you have captured Jody's self indulgent, self destructive behavior well. Providing him with a good friend, and a chance to escape feeling sorry for himself, was a relief for me.
  24. 1. Just how big was that glass of beer? 2. I would have chosen to leave if a barkeep gave me that ultimatum. 3. Screw--not literally--the guy who answered 'Yes' after tossing the beer. Whatever the question was. 4. It still ended up being entertaining.
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    Tanka No. 1

    One of the greatest transitions from cold to heat and humidity that I've ever experienced, was when traveling from Ohio in February, to Miami and Florida during a heat spell. When the sliding glass doors from the airport slid open, I felt like I walked into a wall of moisture. It was stunning. I don't wish a lack of a/c on anyone living down south. Thanks for reading, and the compliment, Percy.
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