Ron

A fine uplifting story. You do this type of writing well, Valkyrie. It's not that I'm biased against going to dark places in writing, I'm not, and some of your stories go there, but when you write like this you shine.

WTF--hmm. And in other news, what a great next chapter for these guys. The pacing moves the story along well, and as mentioned already, the dialogue is pretty damn good, Tim.

Happy Birthday Elijah!

Happy Birthday!

The least Ben could have done was to let Shane change into dry clothes before he drove back to the restaurant and got more food, and not afterward. That would have been more chivalrous. Cute story, Valkyrie.

I like the Fae, Faeries, Elves and other-peoples. The kind you would find in Clive Barker's Weave-World and his movie Nightbreed (based on his novella Cabal) and Tad Williams' Memory, Sorrow and Thorn and Shadowmarch series. I like Tolkien's elves as well, but I liked them best when they were in their youth and making and doing great things, as in the Silmarillion--flawed to be sure, but much more interesting than what remained in Middle-Earth.

It's quite the racket they got going on, those Signature people!

Well . . . and wasn't this just a big fun mess. I'm glad I took the time to read it.

Happy Birthday MJ

Thank you. It's been a fine and low key day. Dinner out with friends at a local French bistro was both a delicious and fun time. I hope you all have as pleasant a day as I have had on your birthday. Big hug to you all!

I've been lazing in bed answering greetings after a late morning start. Now I am in need of a big mug of coffee. That's what you do, right, pamper yourself on your day? I've dinner out with friends tonight and that should be fun, otherwise my day is to myself, and whatever I feel like doing. Not bad for a Tuesday. Thanks a bunch to you all for the birthday greetings!

That was very nice imagery with the random bits forming a hand on the screen and with the sprinklers going off as tears. But, really, mobsters entering through the kitchen . . . How cliché.

I think, the rarity of the 'silencing' having been performed in the past, and that so few have been a part of one, gives us much information about its solemn nature and the importance that is put on the decision to perform one. That came across well. I believe, too, that without dwelling on the subject--and perhaps spending unnecessary effort--you've made clear that being captured and made to work for the government is no walk in the park for those captured . . . witness: the JJ twins. All in, this was a well developed chapter: The ship pauses on its journey; A sad, and arguably necessary event happens; The characters are affected; The story progresses. Very nice.

Everything seems to have gone higgledy piggledy.

When writing, what aspect of it do you find being the easiest for you? What is the hardest?

This is very inventive, Dark. It's . . . catchy!

You've offered a very convincing depiction of a school day morning, Wayne. I like it.

I was waiting to read your prompt but it took a long time to shuffle through the queue. Finally, I am able to read it. You show a great deal of imagination in your story and should be applauded for it. On the other hand, it lacks clarity. I get the gist of the story but it never really makes the connections that I believe you were striving for. Would another thousand words help? Perhaps, but sometimes more . . . is less. I suggest that in your future stories (there should be more from you) that part of the focus should be on making things clear to the reader--when you really want them to understand, that is. I find the prompts to be a good way to learn, a good chance to experiment with style, to practice, and an opportunity to entertain others at the same time. Good writing to you, Rook Lee.

This was a very enjoyable story, Topher. I enjoyed the characters, even Dickie--who was the real prat--and thought that you brought a real sense of life to them. The humor throughout the story was great fun.

This song immediately popped into my head when I read the title of the thread! Of course . . . I was out dancing to it in the clubs in my twenties then. Edit: Sept '93 actually! So, I take back my age . . . It was early thirties. Yeah, I didn't give that up until late.

I'd forgotten about Dickie and Serena. I was shocked all over again.

Happy Birthday Yettie!!!

The bar talk had me cracking up. The poor boy just seems so out of his element.

Because of forum interest in your writing I decided to check out your stories and I picked this one. At around four chapters in I realized that I'd read the story before, before I officially joined GA, and it made enough of an impression that bits and pieces began to come back to me. Enough so, Topher, that I have decided to read and enjoy this story again.

I loved those first two paragraphs. They really speak for the emotional bond that you've established for Marshal and Lee.