Ron

Loved it. I sort-of, kind-of, guffawed myself.

"Living in Surreality" by shadowgod is a good recommendation for a start. The story is complete at 28 chapters. I'll send you a PM with some other suggestions later if you like.

This is a fine story by RCMills. It is well worth reading and I gave it honest praise in my review of this well written story. Do yourself a favor and add Premium Access to your membership if you can. You won't be disappointed.

9 authors to 4 doesn't make for good odds, Sasha. But one good outcome is that the readers win-- A fair ending in my book.

Dave, you really are writing one of the most sophisticated stories I have ever had the pleasure to read on GA. Don't be surprised when awards season rolls around next year on GA! Never say never, Dave, as to communicating across light-years. Remember the space between the transports--Able might figure out a way to use them to communicate . . . If not in this book--perhaps in Book II.

Hello Bergster. It's always nice to meet a new member.

There's a thread in the Writer's Corner forum entitled 'Getting stuck - or bored with typing.' Folks offer suggestions to prevent/deal with just this kind of a thing. Who knows, something in there might sing out to you.

That was quite a delightful short story, Sasha.

Dang, you turned Roy into a Saint, Cole. Made my last comment make me seem like a pisser. Lordy! I suppose that means I have to read the whole damn story now.

Roy! Oh no, not Roy, Cole. He was whiny. He had no self-esteem. What are going to do to poor Chad, Cole? Hasn't he suffered enough? Unless . . . Roy has grown a pair since we last heard about him. Please say you've given him a backbone. Please?

As I've said previously, I think you have fine story telling instincts and you know how to unravel a tale to the enjoyment of many readers. You've done well with this story. I leave you with this thought--instead of relying on the comments of your readers in order to polish your story for a rewrite--why not attempt to enlist a few members in acting as betas for new writing and/or editing. This can be done either through the forums Editors Corner - Writing Support Request or perhaps eliciting the services of some of your enthusiastic readers. Either way, you would likely avoid the greater need for a rewrite.

Hello Mollyhousemouse and welcome to membership.

Hello Zook. Welcome to GA!

#349 is a good one. What to do, what to do--and how to do it?!!

Hello Paexie. Lots of people lurk before they join, but GA's kind of irresistible. Welcome!

Hello Jacobnc, and welcome to GA. Glad to have you with us.

The rehashing of events from Damien's perspective was jarring and unnecessary. The story wasn't moved along and no real information was added that we couldn't already surmise. Cannd makes a valuable point: Kayden has saved Damien's life once already and has provided information of Roman's activities, and we have been led to believe he has become important to Damien--especially so in this chapter. Why then is Damien behaving so selfishly in waiting so long to check on Kayden? Notwithstanding the confusion of the moment, this behavior rings false if we are truly meant to believe that Damien loves Kayden.

Hello to you, BlkIrish23. Welcome to GA!

Happy Birthday Adam!

Hello Kendall and welcome to GA as a member.

A member status posed this question recently: Does serial posting hurt a story? I took serial to mean those stories in which a chapter a week or very two weeks of time are being posted. My opinion is that it does--hurt the story, that is. No matter how good the story telling, something is lost. I'm very glad to say that the frequency of the posting of this story is a breath of fresh air. Also, there is much to be gained by the reader and very little, if anything, of note seems to be lost to the author. This author has faithful readers who comment frequently and has gained considerable approval ratings. The frequent posting has not hurt and I dare say that it would not hurt other authors either. But . . . All would be moot if the author did not have the skill to tell their story. Clearly, craftingmom has the skill, and aren't we the lucky ones for it.

This is yet another hit out of the ballpark for dkstories! A definite reward for the price of admission. Batter - Batter - Swing! For the cost of a dog and a beer at the game you can enjoy a month of Premium Access.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY JO ANN Many, Many Happy Returns!

What was that! Unfortunately, it resembles a desperate attempt that the malls in my old stomping grounds back in Ohio might produce. What were once thriving shopping centers have have fallen on hard times . . . along with the shoppers--and again, unfortunately.

Happy Birthday Bill.