Thomas Haworth
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You left me wanting more. Good work!
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It seems to me that the Queen needs to see how her children treat people they see as "beneath" them. Of *course* they treat her well -- just not anyone else. I don't think she is yet willing to see their faults. She could make a big difference in her childrens' attitudes, but she needs to see reality.
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Contrary to what the prince thinks, Aidan has now become even more dangerous to him. Everyone else thinks they have something to lose; that is why they defer to the prince. Aidan no longer has much to lose.
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Another possibility I see is that Havar triggered the demon threat, given his comments about demons and humans.
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Is there a REAL doctor in this clinic?
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Must the complainer be in Denmark?
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To me the most interesting thing about the start is the continuing presence of Michael. How often will he show up?
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I am enjoying this story greatly! 🧐
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I think Levi is, indeed, behind the poisoning. I think his purpose is to take over as alpha and run the pack as a dictator for the benefit of his family, as in the Good Old Days.
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Knowing what will happen at the convention later on, I think we should watch Levi -- I expect him to try to poison Dorian when Dorian becomes Alpha.
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Call me suspicious, but what does Gustav know about the situation? Recall that he is a member of Stratos, the elite security. Would he go into a situation without knowing all the ins and outs of it? Is he all that he seems? Who exactly is he working for?
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Can Alpha Easton have his father removed from the pride? Just wondering.
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Enjoy is not the word I would use, but I want to see more of this story. In the character of Chase you have shown clinical depression very well indeed.
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This is an interesting story on an issue few have thought about. I want to compliment the author on the use of pronouns. Unfortunately, the English language as currently used makes it difficult to talk about genders other than male and female. Over time, I expect that the singular 'they' will become part of the language. Note that the German formal second-person pronoun 'Sie' is actually the third person plural pronoun. I expect the process to take several years, but I am confident that languages can adapt to the needs of the speakers.
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I think it also possible that the grandfather is in cahoots with Ezra -- it would explain how Ezra knew about the court case.
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Hmm. Am I the only reader who suspects that someone in the council is in contact with a different off-worlder?
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Nicely written -- The immediacy of the fear makes for a gripping beginning. I look forward to more.
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Wow. This is quite a chapter in their lives. I don't usually comment about writing, as usually, if I notice the writing, I am not engaged in the story enough to keep my interest. In this chapter, I did not notice anything other than the story and the character interactions. That said, I can look back and say some things about this story that may interest you as an author. I found the characters' interactions to be natural and believable: I did not notice anything jarring or anything that pulled me out of the story. Good work!
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I would guess the insider is Dax. Who trained him at the palace?
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Sadly, this sort of abuse is life for an inordinately large number of people. Brady needs to think about one parallel: Brady not talking to Ember is analogous to Linda not telling Brady. Both were a mistake.
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The Investigation Begins
Thomas Haworth commented on R. Eric's story chapter in The Investigation Begins
The question I have is, is Sylvia in on the abduction? She seems awfully anxious to destroy any evidence that is there. -
The Importance of Discipline
Thomas Haworth commented on Dodger's story chapter in The Importance of Discipline
Ouch! I find it dismaying how hard our protagonist is working at being obtuse. He is clearly a man of his time. Given the time period, I expect things to get worse before they get better. This is, however, a very engaging story, and I look forward to more.- 46 comments
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