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If someone is against the judgment done by Hilda, then, rather than dismissing her as a "cow", someone better than others, etc. (all of which might well aptly describe her, but are nonetheless judgmental), then judging her only serves to make one equal to her rather than offering her the opportunity to confront her limited vision. This is a Christian church: it should be marked by whom it includes rather than whom it excludes. Otherwise, it is not truly striving to do as the teacher did in both words and deeds. This is a wonderful and thought provoking story as evidenced through all the wonderful comments. Thanks for offering this for our enjoyment!
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Simply lovely!
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Same goes for a good dad.
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I am so glad you showed both the "ugly American" and the beautiful Americans. It is true that there are idiots who have money to travel and spread their stupidity. Glad to see she will reap the benefits of her foul mouth! I continue to love this story!!!
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I love the idealistic yet realistic country of Rothenia! Would that it actually existed!! In this entire series, the power of love to bring out the best in people is a constant theme. This story shows that while no society is perfect - each has its flaws, politics, as well as triumphs - when a society yields to the core values based on the essential goodness of people united by love of country and its peoples, there exists a power which is felt by all who experience it. Mike Arram has constructed a series of stories which not only entertain, but emphasize the power of love. Thank you!
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It's like eating a good meal - one always wants just a little more of a good thing and is reluctant to say "enough". Your writing is that good!
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As much as I would have liked to hear the final results, I actually like the kick in the gut you finished with! No, I'm not a masochist nor into pain - but another few words would have made a tidy little ending. You certainly did a fine job with this format. Now on to longer chapters once again! Tony
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Very nice pre-Thanksgiving gift. Felt as though I was in the wings watching this performance. Great job, Carlos. Tony
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I thoroughly enjoy your writing. What I was referring to is the change of fonts/sizes - formatting. That could possibly be in the way it is uploaded to the website - no reference to your style, etc. As a retired teacher, I can't help but make "corrections" in order that the final product is a reflection of the excellent work put into it.
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As always, the story continues to provide humor, serious reflection, and good reading. The only constructive criticism I would make is that the editing and publishing of the manuscript needs major attention: the errors detract from the excellence of the story.
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Wonderful lyrics. Again, Carlos, you've written a chapter that allowed me to be a front-row member of the audience. Very well done!! Tony
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As mentioned before, I have admired your sticking to your self-imposed format. Likewise, I do agree with the time period in which the postings took place. I don't think I could have handled a once-per-week posting - it wouldn't have held the same suspense. As to a sneak peek...I will wait to be surprised with the next submission. A sneak peek would only serve to frustrate me that time was not passing more quickly, and at my age, each day is relished!
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The tension is building for the finale. One can feel Chipper's emotions and the support offered by Adam. I know the story is coming to an end (I always get a bit sad when a good story approaches the end as I become involved and feel a vicarious connection to the characters and plot), but also look forward to your next excellent work, Carlos!
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A very well written story which accurately depicts the trial of adolescence, the joy of first love, the passions of youth, while at the same time the intrigue of the reclamation of the throne of a young king. Mike Arram has continued the saga of Rothenia while at the same time sharing the story of Henry Atwood. From the first chapter, the reader is taken on a journey that is full of romance, yet tempered by reality. A great read!!
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A much needed chapter: a bit of relief before the stress of the finals. This truly is a learning experience for Chipper in learning how to deal with the pressure of fame. Come on Tuesday!
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A wonderfully warm story that contains a wonderfully warm family, fascinating characters - both youth and adult, and very intriguing situations. It is a rewarding read.
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I love the assumption of Chipper that Bliss wanted more of the relationship than just being "buddies". Great way of settling that "problem". As usual, your descriptive writing certainly allowed me to easily visualize Chipper performing the song and dance. Yes, I do like longer chapters normally, but I certainly admire your adherence to your imposed 1000 word limit. You have certainly mastered the ability to focus a lot in these few words. Another great chapter! Tony F
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It is so great that Eric and Peter don't hold their positions or rank as proof of superiority to others: rather, they use their privilege to benefit and befriend others. Their love is palpable. I can do with a few more volumes of their adventures...
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I do hope Jo gets involved soon. Don definitely will blow a gasket when he hears from the pastor. It is time for a break for Robbie!
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A Pygmalion character transforms through each chapter, giving us insight into how unconditional love can bring out the best of a person in the long run, providing the person can respond to that love.
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At long last, the moment has finally arrived! This was the culmination of a lot of work! Now, another chapter in their journey begins. You have done a marvelous job writing this story R. Eric. Long may it continue!
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Even in a thousand words, you captured the dreaded wait for the announcement of who was moving on. That's the part of the shows like this that drives me crazy! It does, however, create the dramatic effect it was designed for. Interesting ending: wonder if Bliss is going to seek Ethan's advice too?
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Good setup for what is to come. At least Chipper has good people assisting him.
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This is a wonderful story which captures the grit of a working class young man and the socially clueless aristocratic mate who, through their running away, found maturity, resilience, trust and love. Additionally, there is the coincidental story of a man who finds the son he didn't even know he had but stepped up, with the aid of his partner, to give the child a home. And what a child he is! This is a great read as a stand-alone story or within the series.
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I wanted to read the whole story prior to commenting. I agree - it ended well, but way too soon. Great story with wonderful characters. I certainly hope you write a sequel to this and let us know what happens to these characters after a few years have passed for them (but not for us!).
