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Grief and moving on after the death of a parent (or anyone close, for that matter) is portrayed so accurately and sensitively in this chapter! Levi is being thrust into a big unknown but starting to realize he is surrounded by people who do care for him!
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While a "slow burn" in the relationship, nonetheless, it is progressing and deepening beautifully. No child has an obligation to produce grandchildren; should that occur, wonderful, but never an obligation! After all, only monarchs hold such obligation rules!
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Since I live close to DisneyWorld, I would have loved to have met with them, lol! They are in a different financial league than I, but they seem to be very warm and open to all people! Love this story!
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Would that the sheriff might get a noise complaint and show up at his house! Would he approve? And all this sneakiness of the kids - I would have gone ballistic on my own son if he had done this - and he knew it! I always demanded honesty from him and I got it - not that I always liked what I heard, but it came from his lips and not from others'. Anyway, Colt and Noah need to confront what they did for their own benefit and ditch Noah's plans for George!
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Michelle is very perceptive and very loving of Colt. I hope she does pressure him into spilling what he knows and she can make an appropriate decision on how to stop George! It is my hope that Colt's conscience is more powerful than his "loyalty" to Noah.
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I understand Noah's desire to murder George, but let's hope Vincent can help him change that view. We're dealing with two young teenagers whose brains haven't fully formed yet. They don't need to spend the rest of their lives in prison for an immature decision. They need to let an adult know what's going on!
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Siblings often argue and fight, but don't let anyone else fight with them and they become protective. Perhaps Rylee actually could be supportive of her brother! We'll see!! Colt does need to talk with his mother.
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Though they may be friends, if the Sheriff is truly a law enforcer, he would know how to separate personal feelings from duty I should hope!
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I agree with @Gary L: this chapter was very full of descriptions and insights! It was a wonderful exposition of the growth of Neil, the developing relationship between Alex and Neil, and a trip through the town! Wonderful writing, as usual!
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And why couldn't Amy have been the initiator of the fire? She may not have set it personally (or maybe she did!), but she's angry enough at Colt to react inappropriately. Yes, it could be George or Brett - but would this be too easy and "logical"?
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Teen drama is better than the "soap operas" on tv! Now we'll see how much of a "friend" she will be to Noah and Colt. Or will it be the three witches stirring up a brew of nastiness?
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I can't see Amy giving up easily. There was speculation from others that thought she might become an ally, but I don't see her acting as a beard at all. Guess we'll just have to wait and see! And if Colt does claim Noah publicly, what will The Principal say?
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I love the building anxiety and drama! Colt discovering himself even when getting serviced by Amy. Noah is a mystery slowly unwrapping.
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Noah's in "quarantine" ... probably healing from a beating. Will Colt be able to help? Such a group of "friends"! I don't trust any of them, including Amy at the moment. I,too, wonder if she's trying to make Brett jealous, or if she's really allowing her real self to be shown around Colt.
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Small town and old boys' network has to be exposed! I hope it happens! Victims of abuse feel totally powerless and only do what is necessary to survive until all hope is lost. Let's hope it doesn't come to this!
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Even with all the Charlie drama, Neil and Alex have weathered the storm and, I believe, come out stronger as evidenced by the rigorous activity at the end!
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You've created some really disgusting people: The Principal, The Sheriff and his son, Rylee... And I think I have met versions of them throughout my life!
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As a retired school counselor, I am surprised that Colt has been out of school for a semester for being expelled. Most school districts have alternative schools, including online programs, so that students have the opportunity not to fall behind. But this is your story and this will have another purpose: meeting and becoming close with Noah! I'm looking forward to the rest of the story.
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I know there are those who reject anything to do with religion, seeing it as only the fire and brimstone rigid type. Yet, there is another lens if viewed through the teachings of Jesus in Matthew 25. A certain politician in Texas uses this as the basis for his actions and it does provide a much more positive view of the purpose of human life. That said, Luke exemplifies very well the type of life advocated in that passage of the bible: he reaches out to Matt, Levi and Julie in this time of need with compassion and selflessness. Again, very powerful writing!
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Powerfully written with both clarity and strong emotions. The issues have been elucidated quite well.
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Neil is growing slowly and confidently into a real partner. The shell continues to crack! Love it! Alex also is stretching beyond his comfort zone.
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What a train of thought story! I did find it amusing!
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Reconciliation over a naked bum
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Reconciliation over a naked bum
Neil has led a rather narrow life, perhaps by belief of his mother's expectations, or simply so introvertish that he had difficulty breaking through his imposed barriers until Alex proved a safe way to do so. He's making progress of coming out of his shell, but how far is yet to be seen. He made great strides forward in this chapter. -
Time-wise,it does appear to be before Matt takes over the store, though I'm open to another explanation. Matt's parents both were disrespectful in how they have behaved toward Matt. Great start in the drama department, but also enough intrigue to keep us reading!
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Work is good for the soul?
pvtguy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Work is good for the soul?
I do agree that the behavior, especially of Neil, is childish, but not unexpected in that he has always lived at home and has not experienced life beyond work and home. He's still a teenager emotionally. Alex is sensitive enough that he doesn't want to hurt Neil. I would disagree that going to Gar's might have alerted him to anything more than the two were good friends. Neal is projecting his own fears and insecurities on everyone else! I am enjoying this story - especially the music references!
