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Finally, there is a chance for an adult relationship - not a leftover teen infatuation.
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I am sure that there are regulations from the Health Department that are being glossed over for the sake of this wonderful story. The heart of this story is the sharing of one's talents to better others while providing a service which is benefiting the local community. Great job once again!
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I see Otara Markets have been closed as of 20/9/20. Sounds like what we call Farmers' Market here - though it's much more than that.
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It is great to see the business growing. I do hope they find some down time to rest, relax, explore...
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Small cars might get better mileage, but there is nothing like the ride of a Cadillac!
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Good to know...it also would have been good to have had this as part of the story but glad you let us know. I was wondering where all the money was coming from too! I do love the fact that Jim is providing employment as well as shelter to these kids as well as teaching them a skill which will take them beyond the food truck. As far as Paul's distance learning - many school districts offer online programs for students in various situations. The Pandemic is showing how it can be done, but online education has been around a long time.
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That type of negative self image is so hard to change. Rick has learned to loathe himself and interprets every situation as a confirmation of his low self-worth. Nice setup though for an upward curve for his life. Great chapter!.
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I don't know if it was/is your intention, but as a retired school counselor (I did that for 36 years in addition to 11 years as a classroom teacher), I must say rather forcefully: college is not for everyone nor is it the making of a "better" person! We all need people who are talented in other fields too!!! I am impressed with Jim's analytical skill, his use of resources, his dedication and determination, and his ability to dream and make it a reality! Thank you for addressing this as you tell a compelling story!
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Short and sweet and a bit too saccharine for my taste, buy enjoyable nonetheless. "Love" happens a bit to easily but it had to in this short space. Serious like, yes - love, no -- love needs much more than the first night together as teenagers to really happen. It's a commitment that neither is truly capable of making at this early stage. For heaven's sake, they don't even truly know each other yet! I am looking for the next long story - you spoiled me with the last one!
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Understood and the mark of a good story that pulls you into the plot so well that you can't wait for the next posting.
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Chapter 15 - Changing Tides
pvtguy commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Chapter 15 - Changing Tides
I know there are more pressing matters for you than updating us, but know that we are all concerned (as evidenced in the remarks) and send all the positive vibes we can for you, your family and all those displaced by the fires. -
I am feeling this as slow water drop torture! I would love to see more postings so that we can get on with the story! Good job, though!
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By far, this story touched me more deeply than others, even though they were excellent in their own right. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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Life does go on, for sure. I can see this story coming to an end but with enough possibilities for a second volume featuring Ron and Toby. Great job!!
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The Barnstable Chronicles: Charlie Danner Finds His Way
pvtguy reviewed FlyOnTheWall's story in Fiction
Charlie Danner is definitely one special young man. In this volume, we follow him him from a shy teen to a fully confident young man who, through his naturally warm and welcoming personality, finds the love of his life, marriage and, through a tragic scenario, a very special son! This story continues the excellent writing of Geoff Chassen. It pulls in the reader as though right there in every scene! -
Wise move from Jeff where Ron is concerned: a scholarship that pays for Ron's education separately from Toby keeps him in control of his own life. Great chapter.
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Unfortunately, so true.
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This was a very powerful chapter. You certainly succeeded in touching very strong emotions in me as well as provide intellectual stimulation! Wonderful job!!
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I need an uncle Jeff!!
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I have the feeling that Jeff will make sure Ron goes to college. What an opportunity he is giving to both boys.
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Rick's self-perception has developed from many years of his interpreting what others might think, and probably reinforced by what he might have been told by those close to him (family). May he find someone who can help him see himself through a different lens! I, too, want his number - his price is just right!
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I'm a bit late in starting this series, but this volume has kept me reading at every spare minute and hour! So well written, so engaging, romance, drama, humor, and palpable love emanate from the well crafted story.
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And so begins, legally, a new chapter in Toby's lives Having worked as a school counselor for 36 years, I can relate to gathering homework assignments for students who had missed school for a variety of reasons. Good chapter!!
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Chapter 143 Unfinished Business
pvtguy commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 143 Unfinished Business
Robbie is definitely maturing and becoming more considerate. The confidence he is gaining will need to be there to face the challenges ahead with Don. Great chapter, Dodger! -
What is left out here is that the court sets parental payment after a review of the income in the family. As this focuses on Jeff and Toby, I'm sure the details of the court system are streamlined so as to maintain the focus without adding extraneous drama at this point...or at least, that is what I deduce. The actual process of becoming a guardian is much more complicated (or could be) if there are objections by the parents. It would involve Children and Family Services (or whatever that is called where Jeff lives). I do have to agree - as much as I loved Alan and the boys, I really like this one even more!
