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Chapter 138 Papering Over the Cracks
pvtguy commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 138 Papering Over the Cracks
I certainly agree: Don's motivation is to protect his family. He has just allowed ignorance and prejudice overtake his reasoning. It would be nice to see if he has a change of heart if he realizes he's losing the family he thought he was protecting. -
Oh the intrigue you've created! Love it!
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This was a wonderful chapter. You've created wonderful characters - even those we dislike! They serve to bring into focus the issues that underlie the story and you have done it brilliantly. I am totally enjoying this story and your writing immensely.
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Chapter 138 Papering Over the Cracks
pvtguy commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 138 Papering Over the Cracks
I really intrigued now about what might be happening between Don and Sue. Sue seems to becoming a bit more assertive. And Nicola and Daniel are aligning with her. Robbie is slowly maturing emotionally, though I do believe he will always have that streak of defiance as part of his personality. Nathan's honesty was admirable. Now to see how this proceeds! Thanks for posting, Dodger! -
Mike Comes Out To Himself
pvtguy commented on Tallguyct's story chapter in Mike Comes Out To Himself
Wonderful job of showing how a late bloomer goes through the stages of questioning and discovery and acceptance. It might seem a little to easily done by Mike, but I'm sure it wasn't. -
Monday (Afternoon) - part 2
pvtguy commented on Drew Payne's story chapter in Monday (Afternoon) - part 2
Very informative chapter in giving Simon's background. The bus ride was the perfect setting for the narrative. Just wondering if the schools in Great Britain are still like those portrayed? -
Wonderful job of describing and exploring gay teen angst - especially of one as introverted as Simon. I'm sure you will delve more into his layers as the story develops.
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Wonderful chapter! I always find it amazing that in many stories, a huge amount of money just happens to turn up to sweeten life. I'm still waiting for that to happen to me! And I've been waiting a long time! Tony F
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I just want to visit Casita Davenport for a short while...I'd even offer to do the cleaning just to take in the atmosphere! Great chapter, Carlos!
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Your excellence is showing once again, Gary! I love your writing. At first, I thought it was a bit creepy - almost stalking - until Trent explained how he "knew" Arnie. And he did! What a beautiful story. I do hope they appear in future writings. Kudos!!!
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Fun Time in Shower and Sauna
pvtguy commented on Tallguyct's story chapter in Fun Time in Shower and Sauna
MIke is slowly awakening and becoming comfortable with his inclinations. Good read. -
There are those who believe in voodoo, karma, whatever. Coincidence? Perhaps. Can we affect others by our emotions of hatred, hurt, anger, etc? If we can improve someone with love, why not the negative? Short story but it certainly raises a very important life question! Great job, Drew. Tony
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You've started another fascinating story! Great characters which evoke strong sentiments. Engaging plot. Love it! Tony F
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Nan was special. I would suggest "Nana", "Nunnie", "Gran"... Tony F
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Only one question (for now): Blu tells Sage, "Nan can help you with that....I thought she was dead. Unless Sage communicates with spirits, I am confused... Tony F
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Is This the Man I Want to Be?
pvtguy commented on Tallguyct's story chapter in Is This the Man I Want to Be?
I especially like that this story is about a mature man rather than a young twink who falls in "love" within 5 minutes, etc. Great start. -
A very informative chapter that has set up a new challenge. Thanks Eric.
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Great way to start the day! I am really enjoying the focus on Cesar and Brett! I wish I could enjoy the vacation they are experiencing! I couldn't afford the tax on the room rental, lol!
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Nick might just happen to tell Lisa he ran into Ethan at the club and leave it at that...The burden would be then placed on Lisa to decide what to do with that information.
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This is a wonderful portrayal of a dual-life that is only 75% truthful. I do believe Seb will be (or may already be) hurt (if Alan has discovered Seb by this time). I hope to see a follow-up to this story...
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I want to visit Makarovia! Wouldn't want to live there in the winter for sure, but a wonderful place to visit!
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Might there be more to what Nalbo gets in the end? I'm sure that the financial settlement might not be the final blow. Great chapter, Carlos!
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I get the feeling of "calm before the storm"... I could live with many more volumes to follow in this series! This family is both real and idealistic! Would that all families had this amount of love, fun, support for each other, and the ability to work together through challenges! Great work!
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A story of two people who have lived very different lives - brought together by a shady situation - surprised by a baby on the doorstep - who actually knew each other seven ears prior - but fall in love under the craziest of circumstances! A good read!
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Short and sweet but a good ending to this story.
