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Outstanding chapter! Loy and Rick were the latest couple to face the master, the level of evil used to try and trap them was horrifying. All of those innocent animals sacrificed is appalling. The master lost again and I truly enjoyed Lane’s choice of song announcing that the team had arrived to stop the attack on Loy and Rick and that he’d lost again. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😢❤️
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Excellent chapter! The twins were telling their mother that they and Holly had been offered adoption and she told them that she knew and was very happy for them. Ryan’s birthday request is something every teenage boy wants on his 16th birthday. The new and improved haunted house is well underway. Lots of birthdays in the next few weeks. Danny’s treatment of the twins having trouble with their homework and wanting someone else do it for them, was handled perfectly and then after the chapter was read, he advised them that they would need to complete their homework earlier especially if they were having problems or they would not get to have a chapter read to them that night. Brandon advised them all not to test them because the boys would lose. Danny & Brandon and Dion & Trey learned from the best on how to raise boys. Josh was and is a genius on dealing with boys and teenagers. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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The Transformation of Eddie Hamilton
flesco commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in The Transformation of Eddie Hamilton
Outstanding chapter! The visit to the lake house for spring break was beneficial for all four boys. They had the opportunity to explore and enjoy their new relationships and experiment with each other. Eddie’s conversation with his father, then the conversation with Donald was touching in that he’s thinking more about someone else rather than himself. Unfortunately most District Attorney officials don’t take the opinions of the victims into consideration about charges and sentencing. The only hope Donald has is Eddie’s victim impact statement to the court. Judges are the only ones who have the limited ability to decide on sentences that don’t have minimum sentencing guidelines. I’m not certain whether Eddie will be successful in trying to have the charges lessened.Donald does have mitigating circumstances which might be very helpful in getting his charges reduced. He’s living his life as a Christian and is taking forgiveness seriously. Yes, Donald needs to be punished, but does he deserve a life sentence for being an abused teenager driven to violence by his father? Clearly probation is not appropriate, there must be prison time to show that he committed a very serious crime, however he should be provided with counseling and rehabilitation services to hopefully change the course of his life. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️ -
Outstanding chapter! The entire rescue team has finally arrived and as they are preparing the plan, John goes into the stronghold on his own because his patience ran out. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The ordeal for Bryan and Lane ended successfully, Lane sacrificing himself to save Bryan was heartbreaking. Thankfully the Archangel Uriel was unable to take Lane’s soul to heaven due to the fact that his soul wasn’t complete. The Archangels admitted that they were their grandparents. The master is in trouble with the dark one. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The final awakening ceremony along with the confrontation between Michael and Ken was powerful and enlightening. The slip by Michael that they are family wasn’t picked up by anyone yet. The trees being seedlings of the tree of life are providing security and safety for the couples. Taliesin’s trap for Bryan and Lane will hopefully backfire and he’ll suffer the righteous wrath of Lane. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
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Amazing chapter! Simply Amazing the team has graduated to the next level and has begun to fight the difficult war against the evil enemy. The Nephilim were wary at first by the power that Brad and Ken wield, but were impressed when Brad offered to let them merge with them to see they were no threat. The rescue of Kevin and Bill, the chance encounter with Greg, the discovery of runes on various buildings that influence depression and sadness in people, and the battle between the enemy responding to the destruction of these runes, led to one of the enemies leadership being cleaned of every trace of evil has sent a very powerful message. You made me cry with the chance that Greg got to say goodbye to his beloved pet Ely. The character development and continuous twists and turns in the story line is amazing. Thank you for another chapter in an amazing story! 😃❤️
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Amazing chapter! Yonatan and Matan were taken on a wild ride of familial history, financial seizures, property, artwork holdings, patents and foundations that have been dormant for more than 75 years. The amounts given were overwhelming to both. They went to the Synagogue in Vienna without announcing their plans in advance, but were met with gunfire in an assassination attempt outside and along the route back to the airport. The traitors are part of a very small group and they will be uncovered by Mr Green and suffer accordingly. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The trip to visit Holly allowed Danny and Brandon to meet and understand who Dawn is and to make certain that Holly’s safe and well cared for while attending college. The Johnstown Flood Museum and the Johnstown Inclined Plane sound like amazing places to visit full of historical and engineering educational technology. Ryan’s separation from Holly and Noah should allow the overwhelming crush to subside and he’ll find another to focus his attentions on. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter and your decision on CHNG Book 4. 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Welcome back! I’m hoping that Dorian misses you and yours and does minimal damage. The rescue has begun and the team is ready to proceed in Russia. John is taking George’s kidnapping hard and is frustrated by the pace the rescue is progressing. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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A really interesting story with dynamic characters and many twists and turns. You’ll be entertained and intrigued at the same time!
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Outstanding chapter! The family is suffering the effects of empty nest syndrome, the fact that they still have young kids will make it easier. Danny and Brandon are feeling it the most, but I’m sure that Josh will be able to offer advice on how to deal with the loss. I have really enjoyed every chapter in every book to date and emphatically encourage you to continue with CHNG4. Thanks Bill! I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The enemy is playing dirty and I know that the team will rescue Bill and give the enemy a significant battle that will ultimately leave them reeling. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The team keeps going on deeper and deeper, there’s going to be a major battle soon. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! I’m really enjoying this story and I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The story just keeps getting better! I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The security company providing guards to protect the group fleecing the poor and desperate is unfortunate. Ken and Brad weren’t happy about what was going on, but managed to do their job without incident. The bank robbery provided an opportunity for Brad to distract them while Ken knocked them out, without any injuries to the hostages and robbers. Brad’s awakening to how powerful and deserving of Ken’s love was profound and will enable him to become a true leader of the mind team and guide them when necessary to help protect them from the pain and indecision he suffered from for so long. I really enjoyed the look back at their beginning. The enemy is constantly watching and the next attack could come at any time. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! ❤️😃
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Amazing chapter! The family gathering for Pat and Tiffany’s wedding was wonderful. The surprise tribute for Josh was amazing, the stroll down memory lane brought tears to my eyes over the memories that I’ve created in my mind about who these characters are and the caring family examples that we so desperately need in the “real” world. I only wish that the CPS and family court system could learn from the examples you’ve shared with all of your loyal and dedicated readers. Thank you Bill for allowing me a place that I can escape from my daily life. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! ❤️😃
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Excellent chapter! The scenes in the mall were disturbing, yet satisfying as Brad unleashed true justice on Doug the abuser of Drew and his mother. The true nature of the Doc is slowly being revealed and I am really looking forward to learning more about the future of the team and the normals. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! It’s sad that Owen’s visit has finally come to an end. When Becky arrived early to pick up Revin, she caught them skinny dipping in the pool, which embarrassed everyone and made Revin angry. She was quite amused by the discovery. Taking Holly to pick out a dress for the wedding as well as finding suits for Revin, Hayden and Hunter. The puppies being able to control their bladders through the night means that they can start going upstairs with the younger boys. Thank you Bill for another great chapter! I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The history of persecution, intolerance and hatred is very sad. The atrocities committed against people who are or are suspected of being Jewish is horrible and boggles the mind. The constant changes to the young men’s schedule and meeting after meeting with people who won’t or can’t answer their questions. The level of secrecy and security measures are equal to a head of state. Whatever plans have been made for our young friends is looking bleak and difficult. Mr Cohen’s comment about trust, when you clearly are taking orders from someone unknown about their future lives and safety is disconcerting. The meeting with the Chief Rabbi didn’t bring any clarity at all and his insistence that they give up their previous lives and experiences is intolerable. What position, job or duty would require the levels of duplicity and deception being utilized? I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
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Excellent chapter! This was a very intense read, the team went all out to save Ken and Brad’s lives at a great risk to their own lives. The Order stepped in and repaired the damage that Brad wasn’t able to repair, due to one of their own getting involved with the enemy and causing the damage. Obviously there’s a great deal that the team is unaware of and even more battles to come. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Ken has begun the fight for Brad’s life alongside of the rest of the team, to put an end to the monster killing him. He’s made the best decision and they’re in for the fight of their lives. I’m really enjoying this story and I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The A.D.A. brought an insulting plea offer, thankfully Eddie and the Reverend refused to accept the offer. Quite frequently the victim and their families are not consulted about plea agreements until after the D.A. and defense attorneys reach an agreement. Generally much less prison time and a much lower charge which supposedly saves taxpayers money on the costs of the trial, not to mention the D.A.’s conviction percentage remains higher. Spring Break has officially begun and the four boys are off to a hot and horny start. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! A fairly calm period for the Currie family. Ian left for Harvard, the puppies are able to get through the night without wetting the pads in their crate. They’re also old enough to not need to eat as often now. The tree house won’t be completed until after college let’s out for the summer. Joshie and Benny and their fathers had a lengthy discussion and are waiting until after Joshie’s 13th birthday to begin having anal sex. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
