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Awesome adventures that the young guys are having, Yirgy may not have prevented the arrival of bad guys but I am picking that the completion of their nefarious task will be curtailed. Very well done and thank you for sharing this tale, I still eagerly await the posting of each new chapter.
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Pesky foreigners in their midst, beware. Thank you for this thoroughly enchanting chapter. Nice to see Jarra getting a well deserved break as well as showing us clearly what Mirri is doing for his job. I am very curious about what encounters you have planned for Jarra at this conference, all very exciting really.
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I am pleased that you are back in action again and I hope that all is now well in your world. As always your chapters are lively and engaging. You're brewing something, at least a double something as I read it, something with Sid and I envisage an encounter at the Bar the details are all yours but that is my take. Very well done, expectedly. Thank you for sharing your story.
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Very well done! Nicely tidied up at the end with everyone still around to pick up and carry on at a later date. As usual this story was engaging and enticing, with realistic interactions between people that make this a more believable scenario. I look forward to reading your future gifts.
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Chapter 2 - One, two, three
Dathi commented on dianjin's story chapter in Chapter 2 - One, two, three
Engaging and soundly structured, very well done. I am now eagerly awaiting your next posting of this tale. In my opinion you have presented the beginning of an exciting and entertaining story. Thank you very much for sharing you story. -
Well done, I am enjoying this tale, thank you for sharing your story. My only issue (and there is absolutely nothing that you can do about my impatience) is that the chapters are too short and there is too long a space between postings. Do not change what you are doing because I know that good things come to those who wait.
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Very well done, the mix of "tech" and personal interaction is appropriate and I can conceive how easy it would be to forget and solely concentrate on one to the detriment the other. Mirri's enthusiasm is always infectious and the perfect foil to Jarra, the calm studious one. I am always eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next instalment of this tale (dare I say Epic). Thank you very much for sharing.
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Being a Harry Potter fan I was a touch sceptical to start. Very well done, certainly a different perspective but that is not a negative point. I think you have nailed it extremely well. I am looking forward to seeing how you drive this little gem on in the future. Thank you for sharing this tale.
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Very good, very tight and extremely fast paced, it hit the required marks and makes me look about for some more. Thank you for sharing this little snippet.
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Thank you for sharing this chapter, the liveliness of the characters when set against the seriousness of the overriding situation is delightful. You make us sit up and think about just what "AI" is likely to change in our world and how we may behave when it becomes fact rather than fiction. I am definitely eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next chapter.
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Confidential conversations II
Dathi commented on Timothy M.'s story chapter in Confidential conversations II
Marathon read session, nicely constructed tale and believable characters, very well done. I enjoyed reading your tale and am looking forward to reading the ensuing chapters as this delightful tale unfolds. Thank you very much for sharing you tale. -
Awesomely emotionally charged chapter, very well written and exciting content. Thank you very much for sharing your story.
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I'm readying the tar and feathers but will hold off just a little, there could still be a sneaky way out. I like this story and the direction that you are taking it, very well done, thank you.
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Luddites and religious zealots are to be shunned and excommunicated. Perhaps Yirgy needs to learn that the velvet glove can contain an iron fist! Certainly time to update the facility self-defence perimeter and capabilities. I am really enjoying this tale that you are writing and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for sharing this work with us. This certainly is "Boys own adventure" stuff and it certainly keeps my imagination fired up. Very well done.
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I hope that you are typing very quickly! Awesome chapter (and I hate cliffhangers) nice flow and good consolidation for the story to progress. It is heartening to see real life morals and values have not been forgotten and being displayed in a comfortable setting such as you have. Very well done (as usual) thank you very much for sharing you story, keep up the good dwork.
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Good ground setting chapter, the options going forward are very open which bodes well for an intriguing tale. I am eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next edition. Very well done and thank you for sharing you story.
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Good going so far, I have read both chapters tonight, a very good solid start that leaves you with many options to move your tale forward with. Thank you very much for sharing you story, very well done.
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Is he or isn't he, the bit of fun was he really the spy or just an innocent bit of hanky panky. At least our man wasn't in the exploding shop, couldn't imagine it being much fun truth to tell. Engaging and developing nicely I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter, even though that means Tuesday's for those of us in advanced parts of the planet Thank you very much for sharing this tale, very well done.
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What an awesome way to start off, hooked and I still don't know anything about the general layout of the world. So open a platform to build and expand upon and a firm "no non-sense" start makes the anticipation awaiting the next chapter increase greatly. Thank you very much for sharing this tale with us.
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Well done, a bit rough on Jim though. However it was nice to see the Commander under arrest. The threat from Argos is still looming and I am very curious as to how you plan to deal with it. I imagine that Kyle will somehow manage to use the "Furballs" linked mind to enable the towers entity to provide protection. Thank you for sharing you tale.
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Chapter 23 The Wild Card Effect
Dathi commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 23 The Wild Card Effect
Well done plastering over the solid foundation of a friendship grown in to a relationship that squares away the niggles from the past and allows both men to grow closer and more strongly together. Good communication is always the key and not ending the day with hard words or feelings unresolved. Very good job, thank you for sharing. -
A good chapter, levelling the playing field is a good plan. Just need to get "Bubba" up to speed and all will be great. I wonder what input Syd is going to have and what malignancy you have levelled at him to contend with, which means that you have entangled the lakeside team in a rehabilitative role somehow. Very well done and thank you for sharing.
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You have started out well, I have not read the "Percy Jackson" series so I am viewing with clean eyes. I am intrigued and am awaiting the next instalments to see how this tale develops. Thank you for sharing your tale.
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Chapter 22 Making Your Own Odds
Dathi commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 22 Making Your Own Odds
Another scintillating chapter, thank you. I am eagerly awaiting the arrival of the next instalment in this wonderful story.
