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  1. JeffreyL
    Both are lovely! Thanks for sharing.
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    From one older person to another: Amen! And well stated!
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    Like other commenters I liked the message of your poem. Even more so I liked your use of the warrior metaphor to give your message. Well done! Thanks.
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    Unchained

    JeffreyL commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Unchained

    Great proposal! You did a wonderful job capturing Grant's emotional roller coaster! And thank you John for speaking up and letting Troy know how foolish he was being! I bet the whole bunch had a fun weekend. I think Brian was correct. It is nice to be friends the owners' son! Thanks.
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    I read your poem "Piano Bar" today and commented how I enjoyed it. You responded by telling me it related to a story you wrote, "Our Bar" and suggested I might want to read it. Well, here I am, and I am embarrassed to say I have already read it and enjoyed it! But I can say I enjoyed it as much the second time, and I liked how it related to your poem. I said it was a safe bet if you wrote it I would enjoy it! And I was right! Thanks so much for the poem and the story.
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    Thanks! If you wrote it it's a safe bet I will enjoy it!
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    This had a nice feel. I enjoyed your word choices and descriptions. Is it a little autobiographical? Thanks.
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    I haven't ever seen an owl upclose except in a zoo. I totally understood how you felt about the experience! Your words did such a great job of conveying your feelings! Thanks.
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    Chapter 3 Raincheck

    JeffreyL commented on Myr's story chapter in Chapter 3 Raincheck

    With this selection you are three for three for very entertaining reading! Thanks.
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    Under World

    JeffreyL commented on Myr's story chapter in Under World

    This was a gripping selection! You packed a lot of emotion and information into a small amount of words! As someone else said it is too bad there are no plans to continue it.
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    Jupiter Run

    JeffreyL commented on Myr's story chapter in Jupiter Run

    Great hook! I am ready for more! Thanks.
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    Come and Go

    JeffreyL commented on imperfect _pisces's story chapter in Come and Go

    This was a nice introduction to Finn. I still have questions about what led him to skip school, but I am certain we will learn more. Next is connecting him with Tristan. More good writing. Thanks.
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    A Breathless Story

    JeffreyL commented on keslian's story chapter in A Breathless Story

    I enjoyed this story! Your characters were well- rounded and interesting. I do wish your young rider had been given a name. You did a great job describing the race and giving your readers a feel for it without droning on or too many details. I look forward to reading your next story. Thanks.
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    Two steps forward and one step back. That is the tango Hank and Chase are dancing. Maybe it is better if they become friends again and find romance and happiness with someone else. And thanks for touching base with Dawson! I enjoyed that conversation!
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    I really enjoyed the Dawson and Brent interlude! It was great that they got back together! Maybe it's a foreshadowing of Hank and Chase? I loved the hotel in the Yukon! It could almost be another character, and would be the perfect backdrop for a story about Dawson and Brent. Hint. Hint. Now back to Chase. I am glad he reconnected with his friends. What they say about Hank's attitude doesn't quite jive with what Chase sees. Maybe he will follow his own advice and make a real push to get Hank back. Still loving this story! Thanks.
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    This story just keeps getting better and better! Jett's dad is a wonderful addition to the story! I'm certain it is not funny to the other characters, but the way he bullies Jett, April, and Carina makes me laugh! I am anxious to hear what April's dad has to say. And will April win over Jett's dad? More good stuff to come. Thanks.
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    Tristan has piqued my curiosity in only one chapter. I can't wait to meet more of your characters and see how this story develops. Thanks.
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    Chains of Love

    JeffreyL commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Chains of Love

    This was a great chapter among many great chapters! I am excited for the possibility that is Rhett and Beth, and for the winery tour coming up. I hope Troy remembers Beth's words when Grant proposes. Thanks.
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    Chapter 2

    JeffreyL commented on Yeoldebard's story chapter in Chapter 2

    You have created an interesting group of characters. It may take me a bit to keep the characters sorted. Jason and Devyn are great! I hope they become brothers in every sense of the word. It already seems like they are beginning to support each other. Thanks.
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    Chapter 10

    JeffreyL commented on Geron Kees's story chapter in Chapter 10

    Bingeing is over. The story is done. It was a real treat to read! Great characters and a terrific plot! I was not very surprised to find out that Mark was the ghost, but it was interesting to find out how it came about. I quickly came to care about the boys, and Grandpa was wonderful! I bet it was great fun creating such an enjoyable character! I even liked Dad who had a fairly small role in the overall story. The only down side to being finished is not having an excuse to avoid my chores. Thanks for a most enjoyable reading experience!
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    Chapter 4

    JeffreyL commented on Geron Kees's story chapter in Chapter 4

    My binge is starting out well. Read two chapters, then do a job. I am enjoying this even more than I thought I would! Grandpa and David are a great combination and very likeable characters! Dialogue is always an important part of a story for me. Yours sounds natural and very believable. Thanks.
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    Chapter 21

    JeffreyL commented on Westarcher's story chapter in Chapter 21

    Your comment about Alex going on all the missions reminds me of Star Trek. I assume in real life military the number one in command would send people out on missions based on their abilities. Number one would stay on base and oversee operations. Yet, Captain Kirk and Spock, who drove the show, were on every mission. I guess the same is here. Alex is the main character, drives the story, and is in on all the action. It is still a great story!
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    Final Epilogue

    JeffreyL commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Final Epilogue

    I know it is how this story started, but I was annoyed by the short chapters. Thank goodness the wonderful characters and plot more than made up for it! I think sometime in the near future I will binge this entire story. It will be even more enjoyable when not chopped up! Thanks again for sharing this terrific story!
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    I feel blessed to have a wonderful group of friends. Mostly people I have worked with and their spouses. This group of friends continually warm my heart with their care and support of each other. After "meeting" Grant's parents, it was a pleasant surprise to meet Beth, and get a little more insight into John's family. You do such a great job with your dialogue! I can feel the friendship and love as they interact. Thank you.
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    Small World

    JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Small World

    Thanks Tim. Your poem nicely reflects what most of us feel. I am happy to be in my home. I think of the other places where I could be. I have been outside. Once to shop with my mask in place. Once for a dog walk with my neighbor, working to keep our social distancing. I especially enjoyed the last section about the earth healing. I have wondered the same thing. The people in my home are well. Knock on wood. I hope you and Michael are staying safe and healthy.
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