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I feel bad for the guys and their struggle to be a couple. I would guess in the real world it happens as you describe. With any couple, friends are a bit of a challenge. I really enjoyed most of my wife's friends. She did not like most of mine. Needless to say, over time I lost touch with most. Adding Grant to their group of friends has been a bit if a challenge, although they seem to like him, and he seems to like them, mostly. I'm anxious to see what Brian has to say to Grant. Thanks.
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In spite of the major bomb drop in this chapter, I see a ray of light seeking a way through the cracks in the aftermath. That gives me hope that Earl can do some damage control so the Foundation won't lose all its support. I have grown quite fond of Andrew and Aubrey. Maybe you could arrange an HEA for them? Great chapter! Thanks.
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These first two chapters are an interesting opening to this story. I am a little confused, but it is early days. I am interested enough to come back for more. Thanks.
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I was unclear about Alfie. As I read the section about his suicide (attempt?) I had the impression he died. Yet other readers called it an attempt implying that he didn't die. What is correct? Thanks. Oh, and good chapter! I didn't realize Kat was the puppet master behind everything, but I am not surprised. Thanks again.
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Grant has taken a big step forward! Hooray! This was another great chapter! Thanks.
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Chris's Valentine's Day - 817
JeffreyL commented on comicfan's story chapter in Chris's Valentine's Day - 817
I suppose having a fling with the doorman is not a good idea. Or Chris could have just grabbed the ebony god and drug him into the apartment. You didn't give us much of a clue about A, but Chris has perked up. That is a good sign. Thanks. -
You did a great job with this prompt! I always marvel when an author gets you attached to their characters in so few words! I agree with Headstall. More story would be nice. Well done. Thanks.
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The teardrop in the reaction to the chapter was for the end of the chapter. For the rest I would have given a heart. Not being a lawyer, the Google School of Law was perfect for me! After Frank was a total douche, I was glad for the way the guys treated Margaret. If I remember correctly, she becomes an important part of the family later. I am enjoying this story as much this second time around! Thanks.
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This has been a fun story so far! I am really enjoying these characters! Thanks.
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The character from Stephen King's novel "Misery." She kidnaps and tortures her favorite author.
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Oh that Prime! Thanks for helping a sense reader!
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This is my second or third time reading this story, and I enjoyed it as much this time as before! The whole Carthera world appeals to my love of fantasy and shifters! The plot here is a nice blend of mystery, adventure, romance, and family. Oh, and some juicy sex! You have created interesting characters that feel real. I have gotten attached to several. Even the secondary characters feel real and are not just caricatures. Dialogue is always an important part of a story for me. Yours sounds real, never stilted or artificial. Thank you for sharing this well written and engaging story.
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What a fun chapter! Your excellent dialogue made it an enjoyable afternoon and dinner! Even better was the somewhat drunken camaraderie after dinner! 🥴😏😴☺☺🥴 It must be about time for another roadblock/misunderstanding. Let's get them over and move on to HEA. Thanks.
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I read this poem and really liked it. It speaks to me of people who have passed, and how we remember them. The last paragraph was especially powerful. Sadly our brain and our heart can't always agree. Thanks Tim.
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Nothing like building up the tension a bunch! Not just for the characters, but also your poor readers! Have you no mercy? Or are you in the background dry washing your hands and chuckling?!! Thanks.
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This story just keeps getting better and better! I have chores to do, but I keep saying just one more chapter. And so I read on. Thanks.
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This was a great chapter, and a most romantic mating! Thanks.
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I was editing my saved list and I had bookmarked this story. I couldn't remember why (senior moment), so I decided to read a bit. Here I am just finishing chapter three. I know I have read chapters one and two, and chapter three felt very familiar. I am no closer to solving my mystery, but I am really enjoying this story! The whole Carthera world is fascinating! Plus you have created a couple of great characters! Thanks.
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I really enjoyed this chapter! You can really feel the tension between them thanks to your writing! Good descriptions plus great dialogue makes for a pretty erotic ending to this chapter! Thanks.
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The word convoluted comes to mind when I can stop laughing! I think the suggestion for Trout to keep it in his pants is a good idea. At least until he can figure things out. I look forward to seeing how much more twisted things can get! Thanks.
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Oh my! Three pages of comments, and many of them are long! Your writing has struck more than a few nerves! I am not taking sides or hypothesizing about motives, outcomes, or intent. I am just enjoying reading each chapter as it is posted. I like the characters and their dialogue. Your writing is first rate! Thanks.
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He was an ass at the Congress of Alphas, but he was also an interesting character. I am excited to read his backstory! I know with your writing it will be an interesting and enjoyable read! Thanks.
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Good old Rog is a piece of work. Will he be the monkey wrench in the machinery? And I am wondering if Amanda will turn out to be less than a bargain. This story is fun! I can't wait to see what happens next! Thanks.
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This is a new story for me. I'm not certain how I missed it, but it was very enjoyable! It included all your trademarks: intriguing and likeable characters, great dialogue, an interesting story line, and great sex! Thanks.
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It is great to see Troy turning things around. I wonder how things will go at Thanksgiving. This story continues to be a pleasure to read! Thanks.
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