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This was a very enjoyable first chapter! I remember these characters mostly by name, so it is almost like a new story for me. I was wondering if you had pictures of demons to create these characters or pulled their appearance from your imagination? I wish I wasn't so rusty at drawing (it's been a loooonng time). It would be fun to see pictures. Are demons always hunky? Thanks for sharing.
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I don't care to try to guess how things will work going forward. I know I really like the banter between April and Jett! And the sex has been pretty hot so far, even if they haven't progressed to intercourse yet. I enjoy finding out where things are going as I read the newest chapter. The way you write their dialogue is really good! And I like the descriptions of the characters you include. Thanks. I am certainly enjoying this story!
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I like these characters! It seems like Rick will be good for Aidan, and not just as a model. And maybe Adian will be good for Rick. It will be interesting to see how their relationship grows. Thanks.
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This was a good chapter for Troy and Grant. Troy has work and a place to park his van. Grant has someone to repair his fence and he gets to meet the Troy from the found journal. Even without knowing the extent of Troy's hardships, physical and emotional, Grant is wanting to somehow help him. It sounds like Troy is going to be stubborn if Grant tries, and Grant is going to have to be tricky to help Troy like he wants to. Good writing and dialogue. Thanks.
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I am rooting for Andrew and hoping Aubrey will be cooperative. At this point things look promising. I do worry that Tom and Kat will try to pull something to upset the apple cart. I am enjoying this story. Thanks.
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I like your characters! I haven't read many stories with transgender characters, so that will add an extra dimension for me. Oh to be young again and in college and looking for love. Or not. I am curious to find out about their families and how they get along. This is an interesting beginning, and I'll be sticking around to get answers to a few questions I have. Thanks.
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I am surprised to hear that you don't like to write dialogue. I think it is one of the main things that draws me to your stories. My first, and probably favorite, story is "Don't Shout." Cole is probably my favorite of all your characters, but there are several others that crowd him for that distinction. Anyway the dialogue in that story is amazing. It sounds to natural and real. And not just Cole's dialogue, but all the characters. I'd just like to say keep up the good work. And if you ever need a boost about your dialogue, just let me know.
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I confess your "Best Circle of Hell" stories have not been my favorites. I have to say my opinion has changed. I really enjoyed this story! Maybe I read more carefully, or maybe I am just in a different place in my life. You have always been terrific at character development and dialogue! That is evident here. I am not crazy about the torture equals love part of Zai and Tobias, but I understand it better this time. Maybe some of it is your rewrite. Anyway I enjoyed this story and look forward to reading the next one. Thank you.
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I'm not doing belly laughs, but I find myself frequently chuckling over these characters. Since this seems to be a soap within a soap, I don't take any of "the sadness and heartache" too seriously. I am enjoying this story a lot! Thanks.
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Well you were right. This is a pretty sad chapter. I am pleased my theory about T being Troy turned out to be correct. I am also pleased that Troy and Grant are going to meet. My hope is that Grant will be the guardian angel Troy needs. I am excited to have another story written by you to look forward to! Thanks.
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I am enjoying this story and your two main characters. I can tell this is going to be hard to read. I feel bad for Troy and the struggles he is having. Any chance that the "T" from the journal is Troy? I am anxious for Troy and Grant to meet, which I assume they will. Thanks for sharing this story.
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As others have stated, I feel like I have read this before. I have enjoyed several of your other stories, so I know I will enjoy this one! Thanks for putting it back on GA.
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This was a terrific chapter in so many ways, but it sounded like the end. I was glad to read your response to another comment that this is not the end. This is such a great story! I know it will end, but I am glad it's not yet. Thanks.
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Chapter 2 Only Poor People Are Crazy
JeffreyL commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 2 Only Poor People Are Crazy
Thanks for your efforts to determine the time line of the story. As much as I am enjoying it, I wasn't up for trying to solve the problem. 👍 -
More good moments for Simon make me happy. Now you need to keep building the friendships and introduce some romance. Just what you need, bossy readers. 😉 Thanks for sharing this story. The more I read, the more I like it.
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Back again for another reading. I liked it as much as the first time. Thanks.
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I was excited by Andrew and Aubrey meeting at the bar and going to Andrew's place! The sex was hot! Aubrey having a come to Jesus moment afterward and running off was not. I am hopeful they will end up together. I agreed with Danner's comments, so I imagine more roadblocks are coming. Thanks for these two intriguing characters.
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I have had a bit of a time keeping characters and events straight. In spite of that, this story just keeps getting better! And this was a great chapter! Mom is a real firebrand, and I love it! Thanks.
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You need to read Chris191070's review. It will tell you what you need to know. And I agree with everything he wrote. Of course, in my opinion, the fact that Carlos wrote it is all you really need to recommend this story. I wanted to add that I know next to nothing about football, but that did not lessen my enjoyment of this story. As with other stories written by Carlos, the background is interesting and integral to the plot but does not take over. I highly recommend this story!
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Another story with interesting characters and amazingly realistic dialogue! Even the no show by CJ and Oz did not lessen the pleasure of reading this story. 😆 You have the storyteller gene in your DNA. In fact you may have two. I spent an enjoyable morning reading this in one gulp. As with so many of your characters I really like Riley and Phil! I was pleased to read we may run into them again. I look forward to it. Thanks for sharing.
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Wow! The conversation with Dr. Chorney was amazing! Great writing my friend! It reminded me of counseling I received after my wife died. I was never certain if the cunselor was just reacting to what I said, or if she had a plan. I know she really helped me clarify my feelings and put things in perspective. I am now caught up and really getting in to this story! Thanks.
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Another chapter closer to being caught up. I really enjoyed Chase's introspection in this chapter. I also liked the conversation with his sister. Your characters' conversations, both outloud and in their head, is really well written. My jury is still out about Chase and Hank, but you have certainly piqued my curiosity! Thanks.
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Hey Gary! I am joining the party a little late, and so I am catching up. Chapter one is a doozie! You have created two very interesting characters, but after one chapter I didn't care much for either of them. I really appreciated all the comments. They helped me sort my feelings and explained more about these characters. I have enjoyed other stories you've written, so I plan to stick around and see how things progress for Chase and Hank. If one of the goals is to make people think and discuss, you have already succeeded tremendously! Thanks.
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This is a very enjoyable story! I had fun reading about Brian's worries and excitement about the new boy in the neighborhood. Looks like things may turn out well for the pair of them. Thanks.
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And now things really start to unravel for Jack! I am a bit surprised he hasn't already tried to run. I can't decide if he trusts Mary or not. Maybe because he is not certain yet. I am also anxious to get the backstory on Jack's "dad." Thanks.
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