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As much as I am enjoying this story, it is complex and convoluted, and my brain was having a hard time keeping some characters straight and deciding who is "good" and who is "bad." I have just finished rereading chapters one through seven. Between the re-read and the reveals in chapter seven, I feel like understand and enjoy it even more. I look forward to reading the rest of the story and doing a better job of "getting it." Thanks for sharing this terrific story!
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Veikko is an ass, but also a very complicated person. I am anxious to learn more details about his backstory. I don't like him much, but he may be in the lead for most interesting character. No, wait. They are all pretty interesting. Thanks.
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More interesting characters in this chapter! I really like Dom! Is it fair to have a favorite already? The twins are quite a pair! Can you tell us how to pronounce their names? Is it long i or long e, or some blend? I am looking forward to more. Thanks.
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Yeah, that's no fair. A nice and long, interesting chapter and then a major cliffhanger?! I know it seems to be that kind of story, but please, not every chapter. This story is great! I can't wait to see what's next! Thanks.
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Still lovin' these guys and this story! Thanks.
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And let's not forget to put the first nurse in the punishment group.
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What an absolutely evil place to end this chapter. 😡 Luckily for you your writing about Josh's downward spiral, Kevin's regret, and Maris' worry and then anger were all amazing! 👏👏👏 To me you absolutely captured all their feelings perfectly. For that you are forgiven this horrible cliffhanger. I love Josh. What a great character! Thanks for sharing him, and make his life get better. 😊
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I am not certain how you will work it all out, but I am still rooting for Diego! I am usually a sucker for the big guy with a soft heart, and Diego is really starting to fill the bill! I wasn't so sure in the beginning. I hope he can get his children sorted, especially Julian, and make a relationship with Sean work. I am really enjoying this story! Thanks.
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After reading chapters one and two back to back, I like Drew. My jury is still out on the twins and Ben. I am curious to see how things develops. Great start! You've piqued my curiosity! Thanks.
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Sorry, I put the wrong name. I meant Zack.
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So now we will have to wait to see who is the better boxer, Kaleo or Kyle. 😄 I am glad you decided to revisit Adam and Kaleo! I am anxious to see what happens next! Thanks.
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Adam and Kaleo are both men on a quest. Adam to put his life in order; Kaleo to repair his health. Their paths cross on a ship heading to the island of Poa. What happens on the island involve friendship, love, a local myth, and some "magic." This rather short, sweet (in the best way) story was enjoyable! The ending was open to interpretation by the reader. Good characters, dialogue, and plot made this worth reading! I really enjoyed it! I recommend it.
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I am so glad I decided to read this story first! I don't know if "A Second Chance" is a stand alone story, but I am certain reading this will make it more enjoyable! You created two special characters. I liked how their paths crossed as they were both on their own quest. I loved the myth/magic part of the story. It enhanced without overwhelming the story or being overdone. Nicely done! Thank you.
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The second story of these characters is starting and caught my eye. After checking your story list, I am pretty sure I did not read this first story. So here I am. I enjoyed chapter one. I agree with Canuk about the idea of two men on similar journeys who are about to cross paths. I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
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I reread Blueberry Muffin before I read this, and it helped refresh my memory. I got a bit teary eyed as I read this. It is well written. I assume this is autobiographical. I hope writing and sharing helps, and I wish I could give you a big hug. Thanks for sharing this touching story.
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The sex was hot, and thanks for that! But even more are these characters you have created. With each chapter I care about them more! Thanks for creating them and sharing with us!
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I think the time for a flow chart or family tree to keep all the relations straight is long overdue! 😄 You are certainly keeping my gray cells working overtime to keep everyone sorted! There was a lot revealed in this chapter. Thanks!
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What a loaded chapter! So much happened! Maybe it is a good thing that Diego was injured. He has had time to think, and is mending fences. So it's prediction time. Lance will learn to wrestle, and he and Diego will become this super tag team. Diego will get custody of Julian and Gloria will help him with his kids. I think Jillian deserves her mother, and will stay with her. I am still sorting the rest. I am not certain what happens with Rachel, Sean, and Oliver. I think it would be cool if Sean and Diego ended up being a couple, but that would hurt a lot of people. If you keep writing, I promise to keep reading. Thanks. I love this story!
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It is so much fun to see Brady and Ember get all hot and bothered! I hope there won't be any more roadblocks to their relationship moving forward. I am curious to know if Novy and AJ are just good buddies or if there is a romance starting. And little Ember is adorable! Thanks for more good story!
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This was very complete and satisfying for being quite short. I was especially impressed with how you made the dad and daughter so well fleshed-out (is there a better term?) again for not using many words. Thanks.
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I just read chapters one and two, and I really liked Alex! The supporting cast members are all interesting. There seems to be several possibilities for how this story will move forward. I hope Uncle Charlie and the "zombie man" are part of it. Good start. Thanks.
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Other commenters have already voiced my thoughts: well written, hot sex, great surprise ending! Thanks for sharing this very clever story!
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You forgot the message about not letting Josh get hurt. 😕 Of course it wouldn't be a gay romance without some miscommunication. 😉 I look forward to more! Thanks.
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It was great to meet Dizzy's mom! Things are progressing nicely for the boys. Thank you.
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You have me intrigued. I agree with Karl 1960, it was a hard first chapter. To me it was hard because of the way Topher's mom treated him and the way his dad seemed to condone it. It seems like there will be conflicts between Topher's Catholic upbringing and his feelings for Kevin. I like Topher and look forward to more of his story.
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