Nothing beats a good cliffhanger. The beginning of this chapter seemed a little disjointed. I'm not sure if it was because you picked up in a different spot than from where the last chapter ended and then went back to that, or what. Tom and Tink??? Could be fun....
Great job once again Gary. I'm not going to whine this week about wanting more. Nor am I going to speculate on what might possibly happen next. I want to take a few moments to say "Thank you!" You are an amazing writer who takes the time to help others improve their skills. You always give advice when asked for it and you listen to your readers when they point something out to you. Keep up the good work, my friend.
Lots and lots of love,
Jay
That's the one I was referring to. I was having to come up with creative ways to get to the New Stories list. lol
I agree! It makes finding updates so much easier.
The concept, so far, is good. However, you desperately need an editor. There were quite a few grammatical errors. If you like, I could maybe help you out. Let me know.
Why didn't Robbie address the flirting issue with Nathan when he had the chance after Daniel got all butt-hurt and went to bed? Nathan didn't need to do that to Robbie, it was mean and petty.
This series gives me the warm fuzzies all over. We all know warm fuzzies are better than cold pricklies. But I think warm pricklies are the best. hehehe
I want that little shit Brett to get busted with Billy's pain pills so Billy will finally see his loving boyfriend is a lying manipulative p.o.s. This chapter almost made me cry about Dustin. The line "You broke my heart." from their fight keeps playing over and over in my head.
Hey Gary,
I had to put off rereading this for a couple of weeks....I started a new job and I have to wake up at 5:45 every morning and don't get home until after 6:30 at night. Poor Chet. He needs to hurry up and get pulled over and get that ticket. hehehe
The rush of the fresh human blood in his system made so that he couldn't wait...not even to stretch. He used the most convenient source of lubrication he could think of.