GanymedeRex
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Nah, I think Squirrel gets Billy just about right for a 15 year old melting down. He's really good at understanding the outward behaviors and what is going on inside, I think. I lack that insight because I never thought or acted like that as a teen, much...
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Of course his Dad physically abuses him. It wouldn't be a gay teen story without it
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I don't blame Dustin's mother for what she did. He deserved it except maybe that one comment.
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This was a beautiful story. I think Billy's reaction was common for a child and you portrayed his reaction expertly.
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I like how this story addresses the wounds that many kids carry. The characterization of Brett is particularly detailed and believable.
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I liked Billy's dad. He handled it perfectly.
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Black Summer - A Day at the Park
GanymedeRex commented on jkwsquirrel's story chapter in Black Summer - A Day at the Park
I like the quality of the writing and the scene that you set. I'm going to spend some of my coronavirus time enjoying this series. -
4 chapters without any character development at all. Pulling the eject lever now..... Grand vision is interesting but would like to have had a character to relate with along the way.
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I'm looking forward to the Baltimore visit. You mentioned August living in a town near Baltimore. If you haven't already chosen, I recommend Frederick (45 min west of Baltimore). It has a cool downtown with lots of 18th & 19th century buildings. There is also a military biological laboratory. Camp David is just north along with Site "R", a 'secret' underground backup of the Pentagon. Baltimore itself is a cool place for a story as well.
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About time. Looking forward to more.
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He may have given something away in an obvious manner by now. I've noticed that the editing for this story has gotten very solid. The writing is at a professional level.
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Excellent story. It's been enjoyable on many levels, not just as a romance. I like how the supernatural elements are essential to the story.
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okay. That's a dramatic moment to stop a chapter on...
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"the class being full" doesn't sound right if this story is in the USA. Although there are private schools, most people attend public and you almost always go to the school assigned to your area. It if is full, tough, they make room for you. I'm enjoying the story so far and like how it is moving forward so quickly.
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Yay. This story is such a happy one...
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Interesting so sad to see where he is. Everyone gets a public trial in America, even if it is just to plead guilty. Their crimes are part of the legal record, though they will seal the name of a minor.
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Something like this would be super-duper improbable in a Virginia community like the one described in this story. Oh well, we need dramatic things to happen to move the plot forward so I guess I understand. I guess these guys are going to be in for a woopin'.
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Wow. This is an interesting development! I'm so curious. I noticed the writing is very clear and the dialogue flows naturally. It's hard to make a story intriguing like this.
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Interesting. Could there be parallels between hiding as a gay going back 2 1/2 centuries as well as hiding vampirism?
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Your storywriting art is very good! Spelling, not so much. Have someone proof for you. The most common errors are typically corrects spellings but for the wrong words. Example: Chocked (thrown) instead of Choked (strangulated). Gonner (misspelled) instead of Goner. To/Too misuse. 2/3 of these examples won't show on spell check. I've noticed these over the last 5 chapters. As you get used to recognizing them, they should go away. The grammar is very good and your writing flows nicely.
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Frustrating. That's what it is like dealing with an abused person. They are conditioned to think a certain way. Quite realistic - 2 steps forward, 1 step back.
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Chapter 28 - Out of the lake
GanymedeRex commented on albertnothlit's story chapter in Chapter 28 - Out of the lake
A nice continuation to a dark story, which is lightening quite a bit! Definitely can relate to the struggles of being depressed and finding victories & dignity in small accomplishments like getting dressed properly and making it to the gym. -
Chapter 27 - The pressure in my chest
GanymedeRex commented on albertnothlit's story chapter in Chapter 27 - The pressure in my chest
Got a DM from Albert today! He sounded to be in quite good spirits! -
(Full Story) - Revised
GanymedeRex commented on D.K. Daniels's story chapter in (Full Story) - Revised
Nice story. Ive been in this exact position with my oldest son. He tells me I have no idea what its like to be a gay teenager. Hahahahaaha! It made me feel warm to read it. Thanks for writing it.
