GanymedeRex

Well, that was a quick progression. Damn that was hot too - on an emotional & sexual level. I'm a little disappointed that the sex did not escalate a little slower though I'm still very interested in maybe reading MORE. The story stands if you want to end it here, but please continue writing on this forum. You have something rare in how you write that I find really compelling. Maybe we think or feel in a similar way but the way you capture the character thought process and emotions really hits me.

Great stuff. I liked the word "adorkably"

Amazing chapter. This started out great as a story inside Damien's mind, then it added dialogue and events. The story was also really hot. I was honestly turned on and heartwarmed as well. I think you've got a future writing.

I'm impressed! This story is excellent so far. There is some awkward language more-so at the beginning which could be attributed to English not being a primary language but a well known secondary one, but you were native as anyone describing that penis! You did a great job capturing the feelings of the protagonists and provide an effective impression of a couple other characters with a minimum of description. The protagonist is clearly an anxious, sad & fragile child - one I can personally relate to. You conveyed his emotions extremely well. I really liked the part where he felt safe being held by Dennis. The way his emotions tracked events and interactions made a lot happen with efficient prose. Very well done! As a Polish American, I'm interested in those aspects of the story as well (family from Podkarpackie region) as well as post-communist countries after the end of the cold war.

A forum is a discussion. Authors desire feedback. I leave lots of positive feedback and have done so for this author. At least two of us finds something that rubs us the wrong way. It's not intending to disrespect, demean, or insult. It's an honest opinion. Those should be of value to an author as well. We are probably not the only two reacting in this manner as we read.

Thanks. We LIKE you.

@Anton_Cloche I personally like this author and have enjoyed several of his works. He's obviously talented. He has certain things which are pretty consistent: - Older teen / young adult male protagonist who usually buys & grows property, inherits property or travels (often by sea) - Lack of romance and sex. Gay identity is typically a mechanism to be discriminated against - Thin & over the top egregious villains who are put down, usually through legal means, and suffer/lose greatly due to their often unhinged and puzzling behavior - Lack of character growth & lack of intimate relationship development (sometimes) - Surprising inheritances often with a lack of intimate connection to the inheritance source Quokka's stories are like a kid building with a Lego set. Sometimes they are really great (Pioneer farm building). I wonder if Quokka is in the autistic realm, which might explain the narrow but severe interests. Where I lose interest starts with the repetition. Another older teen going sailing and doing all kinds of things to bring people onto his giant boats. The summer house that ascends/descends is truly bizarre and makes no sense to me. Why bother? Why does this remote cousin give him so much? I'd like to see him try something different. How about a teen who helps coach baseball, or being a pioneer on a moon or asteroid, or an Australian in WWII or something. Quokka has a lot of talent and interesting ideas, I just think its how they are aimed and i think Anton's advice is good. For those of you who view things differently, I hope you enjoy his works and I'm not trying to put the guy down, I'm sharing how I react. That's all.

AND..... this story just turned into a clone of the last two or three stories by same author... Signing off.

A 16 year-old with a private airplane cabin. He totally should have jacked off!

It's the BEST COURSE EVER, no other course comes close. The other courses are terrible, but this one is the GREATEST. Having fun with this one. I stopped reading Quokka stories for the last few as they seemed repetitive. This one is fresh. My favorite was the one he did of the two brother settlers coming to Australia and starting a farm from scratch.

I used to watch Monarch of the Glen on BBC America - it was an enjoyable show with a catchy introduction. Animated plaid if I recall.

What a great hook for a first Chapter. Well done!

The part about the police brutality & rioting now seems surprisingly germane...

I think I tried reading this story when chapters first came out but did not proceed due to numerous problems with grammar and editing; none of which are detectable now. What a remarkable improvement.

Thanks. I've really enjoyed this story and what preceded it. Lots of adventure and a little to make you think.

Nice musings. Russians use a small number of names, typically the same 12 are most common and because of that, they have lots of nicknames associated with each one. Sascha is the most common nickname for Alex. So I guess that makes them even more of a pair....

such an exciting battle!

Great job doing this whole thing in one chapter. It was riveting. I'm glad for the positive resolution - too many in his situation were just destroyed.

I agree. It was an appropriate ending - it was still quick but it at least resolved things. The characterization of Jake was as excellent as it was disturbing.

Enjoyed the ending. It was a great ride and introduced me to things i would not otherwise have read about.

I enjoyed the story except for Nohr. He was a cipher - wish he would have been flushed out as a character. Loved the happy multigenerational epilogue.

People like Corey seem to be perennially attracted to jerks. They like being controlled. It's really sad. In my experience only a minority of people in relationships like this learn from the experience and change course. It's not like there weren't a thousand warning signs along the way. Most people would have shut the door on Sebastian's face permanently many times over. It's like people who answer Nigerian prince emails - the reply is a form of screening.

From kissing a third time and then... straight to anal. Not the most romantic progression. I'd like to know more about Simon and what he is hiding in his past and regarding Andrew.

This chapter ends on a gorgeous note. The story could end there, but apparently there is more.

This was a powerful story. I've mixed feelings about the ending. On one hand, it was abrupt and a lot of dramatic attention could have been milked from this story as well as a powerful climactic episode. On the other, this abrupt ending and distant, clinical revelation to Corey was also an interesting way to go. Corey has not only to account for his relationship with a killer, but his failure to report it would make him feel complicit and leave him with numerous complex feelings. I greatly appreciated such a well written, dramatic and gritty story here on GA.