GanymedeRex

Hmm. I thought Langley was being introduced as a friend or a potential love interest - I guess not. I also don't really see much relationship with the Uncle except as an adventure partner vehicle - there isn't too much to characterize as interactions between them. The main character doesn't really seem like someone I'd like to be in contact with - he acts like a bit of an automaton. I know two more chapters are posted as of my reading this one, but I'd like to see more interpersonal dynamics (friendship or relationship) in this otherwise interesting story world.

Wow. This was so totally hot. I was in a doctors waiting room reading this. Amazing. I really liked the correct use of Japanese terms. Thanks

Great to see progress. Interesting

It must be tough to be away from your mum. Too bad for his father who isn't mentioned. I kind of feel like the story has stalled. I mean he just goes on more hiking adventures and there don't seem to be other developments, yet.

Going nice. What happened to Nisin?

It's been an interesting story and I'm eager to see the direction it takes. I'm doubtful the authorities would fine tourists for theft based on somebody's word, even an army officers, without some sort of judicial proceeding and showing up as a witness. I really don't understand what was wrong about the partiers and why the authorities would be intervening with them. It just doesn't make sense. I can see the part about not wanting the nephew there, maybe they were doing drugs, but don't see why he'd contact law enforcement.

you should get your antidepressants reassessed. It could take several different things before something works. You've had enough time on whatever you are on to work or not and it is still rougher for you than it should be by now.

keep working it

Okay then - that was intense. I liked it. Now I wonder where this is going. That's good storytelling. Have someone proofread before posting, especially spelling.

That's an interesting turn. Sherlock has gone out on a limb.. I wonder how Max/Watson will respond.

hang in there!

I sure didn't see that coming.

I really like the old man. He's so clever!

Its tough to see a strong cultural divergence in the UK. It's like multiple separate societies are forming. This tale exemplifies that.

That's okay because it's really interesting.

the story has been fascinating - watching the farm and homestead grow has been a lot of fun! Great job. Any gay stuff coming down the pike????

This has been so awesome - your story has made me feel so many different things. I'll be a little sad when it's over.

I try to comment somewhere in the story. If the story is very poorly written or truly awful, I won't comment. I think where someone puts out 5 chapters and there are hundreds of view and no comments, that's what is going on. That's because I want to be nice to the person who put forth a good effort who doesn't have the skills, in all likelihood to succeed. Now, if there is something to work with, I might include a constructive comment. Most of the time, I leave positive comments regarding aspects of the story I really enjoyed.

This story is off to a nice start. It held my interest and I want to see where it is going. The protagonist's introduction is effective - you employ details in the thought monologue which fill in things about him as a person - I especially liked the physical details. Advice: - The night to next morning transition is confusing. Put in a spacer or a line of dashes to indicate a discontinuity - Some paragraphs are too long for readability, especially in the very beginning. This improves over the chapter. Consider breaking some long paragraphs up. - Do more editing, there are some misspellings, but otherwise it flows grammatically quite well. Good effort. I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

I see lots of these stories with ostentatious wealth - I guess its a common fantasy for people. I see Nick being attracted to the things, but not much about the people -the foster parents are warm and like show tunes - Noah is very affectionate and wants a brother. I'm not sure yet why they are drawn to each other. I guess I'll read on and see.

Im so glad this story has resumed. It has been awhile and a started over from the beginning. It's so delightful and exciting - I'm wondering where this will go.

or better yet, Mikonos!

@ColumbusGuy - You are thinking about Denisovan man - they were really small and their DNA is represented in east Asian populations & Australian aborigines, I believe. About 4-5% DNA from Neanderthals in western races out of Africa. I'd really like to meet a Neanderthal one day. The sexual triad was a cool concept.

Great mention of the space elevator terminal in Ecuador. Such a site was prominent in David Gerrold's "The Far Side of the Sky" Trilogy. This series featured teen boys, especially a gay youth couple, and a conscious super intelligent computer inside a robotic monkey toy. It features a civilizational collapse and an interstellar voyage. Highly recommended. David wrote the 'trouble with tribbles' episode of the original Star Trek. Oh, yes, I'm having fun with this story, @ColumbusGuy, don't know how I missed this story for so long after enjoying your other work.

Pretty good science fiction wise. Overpopulation is unlikely given future global population trends (available in 2015); everything else is pretty good. I really like the Neanderthals and using lava tubes as habitats. Sky hooks was cool too and you kept the light speed limit for communications. This should be interesting. I do worry that there is a trade off between lower longevity/higher fertility and high longevity/low fertility civilizations. I worry the latter will have little youth and lack vibrancy. Here you engineer people through nanobots to maintain young bodies; that's interesting but I still think 500 year old people (there are few in the story, I know) probably will think old. Oh well, time to read on. This should be exciting...