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Good dreams and bad nightmares
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Good dreams and bad nightmares
What was one of your funniest chapters turned certainly somber.I alluded to how something like this could happen in a previous chapter comment but I was hoping it wouldn't.Knowing the mentality of NFL players I see Jay wanting to return at some point in the season and I could just imagine Loe's reaction to that. After Loe said"“It’s not. I just wanted you to have a taste of my every day DMs" .As if we doubted it Loe Knows who Kbois is. BTW the line early in the chapter“Yes,” I agree sarcastically, with an exaggerated head shake and a glare. “Your idea was soooo hilarious.”. I though you accidentally put your last conversation with Kbois in the chapter- 132 comments
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didn't see what?🤔
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The last chapter was 17 and this one said 19 I take it that was the problem.
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" Milo...what's not to love and admire...where can I get me one (perhaps 2 or 3) of those??? I think Milo in the end, will be a wild card in Alec's journey for the better!" I was thinking the same thing.I'll go one better how about Gracie? It has been speculated by other readers if Gracie is Finn's and the possible circumstances has been mentioned.If it turns out Gracie is Finn's daughter I could see her saying something like this to Alec "I know when Daddy is happy and when he saw you he was happy" Of course this is one of my guesses so I'm probably 100% off just thought I'd throw it out there
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"No one will want to deal with me the way I am." One thing Alec is not considering and that is Finn sure wants to try and Finn knows how Alec is better than anyone except maybe River.Milo also knows enough about Alec to not give him a chance to turn down the invite is this Milo giving a push? I guess Alec didn't have the appointment with the therapist yet so will he have to cancel that to go over there. BTW my name is Ken how did you find out about River and I?...Hah I wish. And I'm not as hot as this Ken apparently is
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I kept waiting for Cindy to somehow be knocking at the door or something to F it up but it turned out awesome. Henry is my new favorite character in this story
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That's it ???? For you that's holding back
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You know something we should all be INSULTED!!!!....but the shoe fits (shrug) ( sorry @kboismaybe I should have used a different expression not involving feet)
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Boy Parker's dad has a lot of balls addressing the crowd like that interesting he seemed to have won the crowd over after he told the reporter to"F--k off".The way the TV news portrayed the event seemed to reflect how the reaction comments to Parkers video went.It is like they want to protect the status quo in Somerset rather then presenting a balanced view of. what happened.I wonder if the news they were watching was a Fox affiliate. I hinted in the last chapter comment that maybe Parker might transfer schools and some of the dialog in this chapter suggests that there will be problems at the school.If Parker did have to transfer would that hurt his scholarships?Or could his name being associated with the incident could hurt his scholarship opportunities? I sure hope not.I guess we'll find out when he returns to school🤞
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Jay can deny it if he wants but you don't leave early unless there's some jealousy.If something like this keeps happening every time they are separated I wonder if this would change Jay approach about marriage. I speculated last chapter if Jay had mentioned to his family to ask Loren about his family.Judging by Taylor's comment “I wish we would've known. We could’ve done more.” Jay didn't. It's lucky then that some innocent question to Loren from somebody from Jay's family didn't happen while Loren visted🤞
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If you were included would they ever get the pictures back?
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Mr. Gylarcan has been doing this for 200 yers don't you think its time for some new blood? They'll be times Rafe will need somebody to have his back the sooner he realizes that the better
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I'm so glad Alec dialed the number. Agree with everything @scrubber6620 wrote I think Alec back then underestimated just how much Finn was into him hell Finn had to dress in a different locker room for his games because of Alec the fact that they never had sex should tell Alec how much he meant to Finn most people would have just tried to get in his pants and then eventually see you later. All the valid obstacles that existed back then the parents, hating the school and students etc. don't exist anymore.He doesn't really have to go back home it has been mentioned he could do his work remotely if he stayed he could still take some in person business trips to Washington State if he has to.The big risk is this doesn't work and both Finn and Alec would be in a for a big hurt but to me it's preferable then leaving and the for the rest of your life asking yourself "What If?" " I should have done this or that" at least this way you know.Alec JUST DO IT !!!!
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Totally agree with your assessment of Howard Crane but I must say Caroline pleasantly surprised me
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Do you like the show better now that Parker is the new team leader
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Here's an excerpt from this chapter "When they arrived, the sandy parking lot of Ironward was filled to the brim with other aircrafts and strange-looking automobiles, and a large throng of people was already heading into the monolith. Though, despite the jam-packed lot, Toby was able to spot an empty lot, which they later found out was designated for them. “And we’re back,” the Irons relaxed back in his seat. “And with a lot more company, too.” “Take a good look, guys,” Beau pointed out the window. “Stare them down if you have to. These are the people you’ll be surrounded by for the next nine years." In another chapter they said ten years I'm not sure if Beau has already counted one year down and that's why he said the next nine years
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I though 4 years at high school was daunting but 10 years at that place? Rafe at a moments notice is always on the defensive and that's probably good at Ironwood but I see Andre as being a moderating influence on Rafe
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I think you're right about that.I also think Jay without going into detail asked his family NOT to ask any questions or make any references to Loren's family(or lack of)
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Meeting the family went great despite Loren's misgivings.Should Loren keep the conversation about what his brothers said to himself probably yes but it might be good for Jay to be made aware of this some way but how? I like your variation on the Folgers coffee slogan“The best part of waking up...”“Is bein’ in Loe’s butt?”Very catchy but how do you get it pass the censors🤔 A very minor editing oversight “You have a thicc ass, too.” Is @kbois who takes credit for all the good edits responsible for that one also?Oh wait what am I thinking that was obviously @Mawgrim responsibility BTW shouldn't you have asked me first before you used all my DM's?...Uh I mean....never mind
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Played like a blitz on third down
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Played like a blitz on third down
I was going to mention this possibility on Thursday but I'll throw it out there now in case this gets answered in some way in the next chapter.I just thought of this that women that Sven seen with Lars is it possible that its a younger sister Loren has never met?I know its crazy nutty that they would have another kid after abandoning Loren but the parents ARE crazy nutty(and evil).As I'm typing this I'm starting to think no I would guess that would have been brought up in court. But that doesn't leave out that it's a possible half sister from one of the parents fooling around and that was also kept secret from Lars.OK thanks for indulging me I might bring this up again depending -
I agree with the previous readers comments about Keith not telling Amy but Bradd will speak to Patrickso now Bradd will be single until Keith does God know what' Officially I don't think this will happen less then a 25% chance of this but I'll throw it out there anyway.Earl seems to be really into Bradd yep I mean in that way .The nuttier part of this is I'm thinking did Earl and Keith cross the line? It would explain why Earl is walking all over Keith
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Played like a blitz on third down
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Played like a blitz on third down
As great as this chapter was if that original paragraph was allowed to stand all of us readers would have scratched our collective heads and thought to ourselves something critical seems to be missing but we can't put our finger on it.But "whew" kbois solved that with great editing. As far as Skrewball being kbois go-to? How about a variation on an old saying "It takes one to like one" or something like that.- 96 comments
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Played like a blitz on third down
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Played like a blitz on third down
Just don't make the Packers as bad as you made the Rams and you'll be okay- 96 comments
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Played like a blitz on third down
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Played like a blitz on third down
If she has that in her possession NOTHING will make her part with that- 96 comments
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Played like a blitz on third down
weinerdog commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Played like a blitz on third down
Too many obvious comments to be made about Aido peeing on Loren so I'll refrain. Jay think that they are going to throw away the license plate number.If he's right it sounds like Lars has to make the move not Loren.I think they share Sven's concern that Lars is up to no good but I guess would be if this and the backstory became public Loren would get a tremendous amount of public support.The parents probably lied to Lars about happen with Loren and didn't get the truth until they tried to get custody of Loren again.I bet Lars has no idea how to approach Loren after all this time and not seem like he wants something you can say he's a victim in this also. Somehow saying Jay leads the league in hugs instead of sacks totally changes the meaning of that.BTW you didn't say who they beat to get to the Super Bowl or who they played in the Super Bowl .Avoiding your brother's wrath? So they just happen to be playing in Denver on Christmas where Aido Potato is .WHAT a coincidence.Its like a higher power is at work here.....The Author- 96 comments
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