Nephylim

WOW YAY Hi. If you're writing is anything like as good as Frosty's is I can't wait to read it Welcome to the mad world of GA Ditto Hi darling. Welcome to GA. I hope you'll have lots of fun. Don't be put off by the fact that I am utterly evil. I don't bite unless you ask me to

Ignoring the japanese bits.., you looking pretty fine boy Nice hip action Pretty pretty eyes but why do you look so sad? Gngh Considerig how much I like your hugs I think I had better keep my mouth shut in case you get too scared to give me any more

I'm not a huge fan of spelling and grammar checks... maybe it's because they really hate my writing but my pages are usually full of squiggly green lines. I think that Pai-Kun was actually being helpful. Who wants to post a story and have no one read it just because no one pointed out the flaws beforehand? I am always profoundly grateful when someone criticises something I've written. If all you get are people saying how much they like what you've written how are you ever going to improve. Of course there has to be balance. If people are constantly pointing out mistakes then you will just get demoralised. Just be aware that someone who is pointing out errors is your friend not your enemy We all make mistakes and I am forever recommending that people get an editor. The simple fact is that we never truly read what we have written. I have read over chapters of mine three or four times only to have editors point out stupid mistakes. For me it's mostly tense slips and typos, other people have different slips. Someone I used to write for used to put money in a jar every time I spotted a mistake between its and it's. He never learned and he must have had a lot of money in that jar in the end. The point I am making is that no one writes perfectly, especially when they are first starting. It is no shame for someone to point out that your story needs polish. I would heartily suggest that you get an editor to help you with your story before you post. I will be looking out for the first chapter. Your snippet really doesn't give much of the story away but I like the syle so far.

Well, people have threads for individual stories so maybe you can discuss your stories generally here. What kind of story is it? Horror? Fantasy? Romance? Are there evil ninjas? How about vampires Give us a taste of what we're missing until we get to read. Oh and Welcome to GA. Hope you have fun.

Haha, I totally read that wrong at first and thought you said that you're not out to your girlfriend. I was wondering how that worked. I am totally completely and utterly... here I am take me or leave me... well... with most things, some of the more totally freaky things I only talk about to people I trust but apart from that I don't hide anything. Just about everyone in my life knows I'm bi and no one says a word... they'd get a tongue lashing if they did. My daughter and her girlfriend live with me and they are completely open too. My daughter came out to me when she was 13 and to everyone else when she was 14, so I think it's a family thing

She is deliciously evil isn't she And she hasn't fired her last shot yet. Thank you for reading and reviewing sweetheart. this one is quite an emotional rollercoaster so get out your vodka

Mayyybeeee Although sometimes the worst punishment is just not getting what you so badly want

Jason is such a good guy. I'm not sure that Peter deserves it. I can't say honestly that he would have a right to complain if jason did sleep with Ethan. Personally? I think I would have... what the hell... I KNOW I would have. But hey... i'm not a good girl

I don't think Peter was honest about anything. I think Peter needs help. He has huge control issues and they're killing him. His feelings for Jason are something he can't control and so he's suppressing them. The think about the champagne was very telling and so is Peter's complete inability to say what he feel.. because he doesn't feel. He's locked it all inside. He's been shutting down for a while and if someone doesn't do something soon he's going to be in really serious trouble

That was interesting. Even more control issues and now there's a lack of trust creeping in as well and Ethan is right, Peter isn't treating Jason very well. There is something serious going on in that boy;'s head and if he doesn't let it out it's going to rip them apart.

Well. I can't say that was a surprise. Peter's need to 'posess' Jason and Jason's reaction. The fact that Peter has refused to bottom since the accident speaks reams for his need to stay in control. And now he's feeling vulnerable again because of the issue of the money and so more of a need to control . This is going to go really badly until they talk. And they both need to realise and acknowledge what's going on. Keeping quiet or being defensive is the sure way to end this relationship and that would be tragic.

It was bound to happen wasn't it. There's a whole thread right through the story that's been leading to this. Neither of them have dealt with it very well to now and he whole will thing has just brought it to a head. I have faith in the boys that they will resolve it

Now wasn't that an interesting chapter? Changed wills, Peter being introduced to the world of the super rich and being reminded of it by Uncle Ray, no sleeping together despite the change in Jason's head (What??!! Only saying ) The descriptions were heavenly. I can see the house the kitchen, the dining room Apart from the fact that you made me hungry I really enjoyed that

Oh that was so sweet, but not too sweet. The arguement at the beginning stopped the tooth rot. I loved the choosing a tree bit. I know it is naughty to mentione typos in review but as you have so few I feel justified in laughing my socks off at Peter being 'stoned faced'. I didnt know he was a stoner man :) Back to the serious stuff. I very much like the way you introducd the family. It can sometimes be a little overwhelming when lots of people are introduced at the same time but that was sweet.

Oh Sophy is evil, there is no doubt about that...and she doesn't give up easily, you can bet on it.

I’ve spent about an hour with Ben; crying, talking, getting to know each other again. But now he’s started to get very sleepy and I’m getting worried about Silver. “But I don’t want you to go.” “I have to go so I can come back. The doctor said that you can come home with me tomorrow so I will come and get you before lunch. I’ll bring you some clothes and if you want to we’ll go out for pizza, the three of us.” “What’s he like River. Will I like him? Will he like me?” We have careful

Thank you for starting this thread. If you hadn't I would never have read those wonderful stories. I would love to say that I will write a story for this competition but there is no way I could squeeze it in right now. Good luck to everyone who does write.

You have the same form of dyslexia as me :) Worth looking for. Chase is a cutie... although he keeps trying to hide it Oh Sam, what a way to start my day and my weekend. You're as beautiful as ever. Who wouldn't love what they see in your eyes. :wub:

Good Grief, That was a huge surprise . I kind of got the feeling when Blake was taling to Haze about that stuff that Haze wasn't twigging that he was talking about himself. So Haze is crazy too. Nice. Can't wait to see what they get up to being crazy together.

Oh yeah Doesn't look airbrushed either. Me too. That chest is something else. You should have seen it under a tutu. Mind you the sparkly one looked better on Westie and the pink one on Paya. For some reason I managed to avoid wearing one at all. It might be because I lockd myself in the ladies at the critical time. I would post the piccies but I have been forced to promise not to. They blackmailed me by threatening to post the picture of the gogo dangcer and the chocolate. Oh no.. less Gods that was funny Look... its ovious that you two are desperate to shag each other so just get it over with for goodness sake or you're going to bore us all to death. Get a room, have a good night, come back smiling. What you do with the jizz is up to you

Well... I can guarantee that it won't be what you're expecting :)Thanks for the reviews. I'mreally glad you like the story

I wish I knew how to put those cute picture things in. I'll have to take lessons from Tiger Just imagine a really big and really pretty one. HAPPY BIRTHDAY DARLING :wub: GIVE THAT SEXY MAN OF YOURS A HUGE HUG FROM ME AND A GET HIM TO GIVE YOU ONE BACK FROM ME AND WHILE YOU'RE AT IT KEEP HUGGING :wub:

I'm noticing that in each chapter the amount of time Cooper spends with Kyle is increasing and time spent with other guys reduces. I have a feeling that things are changing but i'm totally intrigued about where it's going

I really like Kyle. I'm glad he's sticking around and Cooper is starting to think along different lines. Poor David being kept on ice for a possible reboud f**k I hope Cooper is taking precautions. Don't want him getting a nasty STD from all these horny college guys

Ooooh that would be SOOOOO fantastic.