Escaping the Pain

The story was amazing, as it brought an abrupt, but soothing closure to the novel - and I really liked it.A couple of things I would have really liked to find explained more in detail in the story, like how the evidence was impounded for so long and they couldn't determine the cause of the crash for such a long period of time. I also wanted to finally find out just how Dane was positioned to call Tap "just in time" if he was coerced into being in the driver's seat, parked in neutral, over a hill... I would understand how blunt force trauma to the head would block memories, so it's not a significant oversight by any means. However, it would have been nice to be able to get a fuller picture of what happened.Like Andy, I don't see Charlie as Eickel's grandson, the fact that the character was introduced not as someone Eichels brought in, but someone that social services brought in for in-home care. The apartment gunfight was unexpected to say the least. Well, the build-up of tension kind of hinted to someone getting shot, but the mystery of Charlie being also a bodyguard and someone conveniently misses the fact that Dane and Tap were returning home early, not scoping out the apartment beforehand, and other very important traits that any bodyguard or security officer would have done as a basic duty were overlooked. Even if Charlie was only applying to be in the academy, which would explain the blatant oversight, you'd think that Charlie would be a bit more focused on his grandfather's strict assignment of protecting the couple.Cia, you realize you can start a saga just with novel right? You still have Dane's grandmother who can dish out senile evil You have the wonders of college, the changing of interpersonal relationships as more adult independence becomes a part of Neri, Dave, Dane, and Tap's lives, along with changing family dynamics of the Leerans. You've got yourself a gold mine. If you feel like writing another one - go for it, you know you've got yourself quite a few fans who won't stop badgering you for more chappys. :PThanks Cia!

yeah i sort of printed them when i was in a vacation with no net! lol. yeah i try to avoid short stories and stories that are still in process im not that patient cause they make me want more and sometimes there are too many questions left unanswered its just too much for me lol so i settle for long stories and completed ones.

Great story, thank you!

Engaging characters, believable backstory, great 'first meeting' scene and wonderful 'coming together' scene.

I did think some of the foreshadowing was a big heavy in places, but otherwise well-writen and a very enjoyable story.

Thank you!