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Drew's Poetry Prompts - 5. Poetry Prompt 2 Again

 
Haiku 3
 
Death took the rabbit
As the snow began to build
A white burial.
 
 
Haiku 4
 
Escaping the cold,
The spider weaves a new home
Tucked in the window.
 
I would like to thank Doc, tim, and AC for the wonderful help and insights they offered in Live-Poets Society.
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I don't know anything about Haikus beyond them being a form of poetry, but I like both of these. The poems evoke clear imagery Drew. Well done!

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AC Benus

Very nice, Drew. I liked them both, especially as a had a long-leg spider climbing up the curtain behind my monitor just an hour ago....

 

Thanks for posting these!

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Mikiesboy

Drew, both are wonderful!
AC's prompts are working for all of us. These Haiku of yours seem to answer the prompt and the 'rules' beautifully.
tim

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Aditus

They're both really good, something we can observe every winter. To the last one I silently added 'until Zombie squished it.'

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Emi GS

They are really Nice, My Love. They look simple, but I know You did put good efforts on them...

 

I like them... :)

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J.HunterDunn

Both are very good, Drew. I especially like the first one, having seen it develop on the forum. The molding and kneading that we normally not get to see, were learning steps for me as well. My compliments for the result.

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Parker Owens

Lovely poems, both, Drew. I am no poet or historian, but I love the images these evoke. I am especially drawn to the second of these two, as I encounter winter spiders in my home constantly.

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 02:24 PM, Reader1810 said:

I don't know anything about Haikus beyond them being a form of poetry, but I like both of these. The poems evoke clear imagery Drew. Well done!

Thanks Reader! :hug: I always love hearing from you :)

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 02:47 PM, AC Benus said:

Very nice, Drew. I liked them both, especially as a had a long-leg spider climbing up the curtain behind my monitor just an hour ago....

 

Thanks for posting these!

As an arachnophobe, it was hard for me not to freak out about the spider. But, in all honesty, I think I'm getting better as I start learning more about them. Although I doubt I'll ever hold one.

 

Sorry for rambling :) Thank you so much for your kind words AC! :hug:

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 04:24 PM, Lisa said:

Awww, the poor bunny, buried in the snow. So sad.

 

Great Haikus, Drew. :)

Thanks Lisa! :) I was at the college taking care of things for the new semester, and when I left it started snowing. Well, as I went home, I saw a roadkill :( I realized soon enough that rabbit would be buried underneath the snow.

 

Again, thank you Lisa! :hug:

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 04:56 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Drew, both are wonderful!

AC's prompts are working for all of us. These Haiku of yours seem to answer the prompt and the 'rules' beautifully.

tim

Aw! Thanks tim! :hug: Haikus are quickly becoming my favorite form :D

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 06:59 PM, aditus said:

They're both really good, something we can observe every winter. To the last one I silently added 'until Zombie squished it.'

Thanks Adi :) As for Zombie, I an totally see that, hehe.

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 09:31 PM, Emi GS said:

They are really Nice, My Love. They look simple, but I know You did put good efforts on them...

 

I like them... :)

Thanks Emi!!! It did take me awhile to think how I want to write them :)

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/09/2016 11:21 PM, J.HunterDunn said:

Both are very good, Drew. I especially like the first one, having seen it develop on the forum. The molding and kneading that we normally not get to see, were learning steps for me as well. My compliments for the result.

Thanks Peter! :) I agree, I found it an interesting and fun experience to get feedback on the first haiku.

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Drew Espinosa
On 01/10/2016 01:33 AM, Parker Owens said:

Lovely poems, both, Drew. I am no poet or historian, but I love the images these evoke. I am especially drawn to the second of these two, as I encounter winter spiders in my home constantly.

Thanks Parker! :hug: I know what you mean, spiders seem to make their way indoors when winter arrives.

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Aviana

The first one has a meloncholy tone. I like the imagery of the snow building a burial...

The 2nd one has a clear picture of spider weaving his net hiding in the window from the cold!! 

Both were wonderful haikus!!

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Drew Espinosa
7 hours ago, Aviana said:

The first one has a meloncholy tone. I like the imagery of the snow building a burial...

The 2nd one has a clear picture of spider weaving his net hiding in the window from the cold!! 

Both were wonderful haikus!!

Thank you Aviana!

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