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    Wayne Gray
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Wayne's Poems - 2. Lust

I see you there.
I don't pretend this is more,
and that gives me strength.

You step near me.
Your eyes, question, but I'm sure.
How this ends I know.

This isn't love.
It doesn't mean that it's wrong.
Touch begets goosebumps.

You sigh, I smile.
I don't pretend this is more.
Tonight, we shall lust.

I don't know where it came from, but it wanted out.
Weird, strange, and unknown for me to do anything that doesn't rhyme. I... like it. Yes, I'm surprised.
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Mikiesboy
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poems do not need and often should not rhyme ...   :D  i like this

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Wayne Gray
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9 minutes ago, tinytoes said:

I'm surprised, too. A good surprise. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks.  Not too deep.  But, hey, neither is Lust.  🙂

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Just now, Mikiesboy said:

poems do not need and often should not rhyme ...   :D  i like this

Thanks, tim.  I know they don't have to rhyme, it's just hard for me to DO it.  I need a structure of some sort, so I focused on syllable count and went from there.

Weird for me.  But, I do like it.

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Just now, chris191070 said:

Awesome 😎 

Heh.  Thanks, Chris.  😋

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22 minutes ago, Wayne Gray said:

Thanks, tim.  I know they don't have to rhyme, it's just hard for me to DO it.  I need a structure of some sort, so I focused on syllable count and went from there.

Weird for me.  But, I do like it.

perhaps just the beginning...

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MacGreg
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The power of this poem is in its succinctness. Brief phrases that mirror the briefness (and excitement) of the encounter. Excellent, form or no form.

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5 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

The power of this poem is in its succinctness. Brief phrases that mirror the briefness (and excitement) of the encounter. Excellent, form or no form.

Thank you, Mac.  I wanted it to feel a bit clipped, rushed, without a lot of time spent thinking.  I’m still surprised to like it.

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It's a good poem. Although you stayed away from rhyme, the structure of each stanza is precise. This precision lends a rigid backbone to a poem that is about free-flowing notions and emotions -- and I like that :) I think it really works here 

 

 

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1 minute ago, AC Benus said:

It's a good poem. Although you stayed away from rhyme, the structure of each stanza is precise. This precision lends a rigid backbone to a poem that is about free-flowing notions and emotions -- and I like that :) I think it really works here 

 

 

Wow.  Well, thank you, AC.  I appreciate your comment.  It means a lot coming from you.  🙂

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5 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

This poem works for me. I can feel the anticipation and electricity. 

Thanks, Parker.  As I said, it's not deep, but that was purposeful.  I wanted it to feel blunt, unambiguous, and inevitable.  🙂

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FanLit

Just as lust doesn’t need any more of a definition, neither does the rhythm of this poem, or any other that you write.

When your verse or verses resonate in the beat of your heart or the wave of a thought....there is your rhyme (and reason).

Nicely done.  :hug:

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2 minutes ago, FanLit said:

Just as lust doesn’t need any more of a definition, neither does the rhythm of this poem, or any other that you write.

When your verse or verses resonate in the beat of your heart or the wave of a thought....there is your rhyme (and reason).

Nicely done.  :hug:

Thanks, Fanlit.  "Poetry" to me was something very specific growing up.  It had to rhyme.  Such is the way I was taught.

So it has taken until... well, now, for me to move beyond that.

I appreciate your thoughts.  Thank you, again.

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Thorn Wilde

I think it's a great poem. There's a lot of feeling there. And it does have structure, even if it doesn't rhyme. It's good.

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On 4/14/2019 at 4:11 PM, Thorn Wilde said:

I think it's a great poem. There's a lot of feeling there. And it does have structure, even if it doesn't rhyme. It's good.

I don't know how I missed your comment.
Thanks, Thorn.  You already know how I struggle with a lack of rhyme in poetry, so this was a weird little triumph.  🙂

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Joie J.

I like how you narrate emotions through actions.  "Touch begets goosebumps" and "You sigh, I smile" are to absolutely amazing lines. Loved it.  

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