[GhostRyder] KOMBAT KIDS VIOLENCE

[GhostRyder15]

I'm worried about the level of violence in my story. I hate to think that what i'm writting is too violent for my readers. However, I think that it is sometimes necessary to show the lengths people will go to to degrade other peoples or to reach their goal.

 

Please take a minute and let me know how you feel about the level of violence in my stories. I have listed four options, please pick the one you think is most appropriate.

 

Thank you, GhostRyder15 :2hands:

[JamesSavik]

GR-

 

As a guy who was outed at 13 and grew up gay and out in small town Mississippi during the 70s, I have to ask: what violence?

 

Well, I know there's some but it's not nearly what some of us have seen in real life and the kids in your story have each other to help them get through.

 

Violence is one of those inconvenient facts of life that won't simply go away by ignoring it. Just learn Akido and break violence's arm.

 

Thanks for your story. Looking forward to your next chapter,

 

-JS

[Myr]

As I said privately, it is "just right" for the most part. There are two specific spots where I feel, personally, that it is too graphic. And one of those is the upcoming chapter and the response of the few of us who read it no doubt prompted this poll.

[RTJ]

I think its a nicely done piece of work, the violence factor adds depth to the plot. Just right.

[jimboylan]

There are two specific spots where I feel, personally, that it is too graphic.  And one of those is the upcoming chapter

I do agree that a proposed chapter 49 with graphic gore is just going too far FOR THIS STORY. It would change the tone of the series. So far, you have a story that won't need much editing to become (in my opinion) a print book suitable for adults and mature teens in understanding bookstores and communities.

 

I can enjoy a gory, graphic, gay story, but think that it should be a new and different seies than the teen-aged KK.

[deadly4u]

Definitely Just Right

 

Of course you know this already ghostie

 

Im a bit crazy... but i cant get enough violence but when it comes to getting the plot jus right... This story has JUS THE RIGHT amount. I do like variety however

 

Anyways, im glad to be the sub-editor for this story. I take great pleasure in being a reader to the story. I also take great pride in hosting ghostryder15 on his website. Kombat Kids has changed my life.

 

Keep up the awesum work! I cant wait till future works (i wont give away any spoilers to anyone )

 

Dave,

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SHV Book Publishing

GhostRyder's Stories Administrator/Publisher

[JustynC]

I think it's more than Just Right !! It's perfect-o It is a very well written story . In fact I've copied the chapters onto paper and have them in a folder heh heh I do that with all my fav stories . Speaking of violence I'd like to see Daddy Prince get his homophobic butt strung & hung .. That umm bas*** really needs it

[Guest jsand713]

On average I think it is just right. HOwever, there have been moments.....

 

But I don't htink that they have been too often.

 

John

[The Story Lover]

The level of violence in this story seems to be on the right keel. The vilonce is anecessary and integral part of the story.The violence is not there just for the sake of being violent. As slong as the violence has a point or serves to enhance a portion of the story i have no problem with it. The moral and messages througout the story as well as the support given to the characters make this an excellent story.

 

TSL

[Guest Juice174]

I totally agree with Story Lover above. All the violence you have written into the story serves a point. It is realistic to the situation being played out. I have just read chapter 49 with Japs nightmare, and yes, while this can be called violent I believe it is just right. It shows how mental trauma, or post traumatic stress in Japs case I think, can effect people. If you try to reduce the violence you will be trivialising the events your characters have had to live through and the events that your readers have had to go through. In my opinion it will make the story weak and petty.

 

All chapters of Kombat Kids have been excellent so far, including 49, with no un-necessary violence at all in my opinion. Other than the abduction and rescue of Jacky and Japs nightmare I say there is no real violence at all. And those two scenes were written extremely well and were as I said above necessary to the story.

 

Well done Ghost Ryder on an excellent story and keep up the good work. I can't wait for the next chapters to be posted.

 

Juice.