Recent Review... Honest Thoughts And Comments

[Myr]

This was a recent review for Parliament of Dreams

Honest thoughts and comments please

 

From: Bobo()

 

Myr,

 

I have to say that I am not impressed. I think you have a lot of talent with

comedy (some scenes were absolutely hysterical), but I feel that you compromised

characterization for violence and pornography. I take issue with the fact that

almost every character in the fic is gay, and moreover they are all fairly one

dimensional. All they do is beat each other up and have sex. Is there even a

scene where a stretcher or a bed is not involved? Where's the plot? Where's

the angst? Where's the feeling?

 

Further, in your fic, Draco is stripped of his traditional egocentric Malfoy

identity and becomes a watered down version of Harry (which even you know is not

accurate). It would have been a better fic if he ended up with Harry even

though he maintained his traditional Draco Malfoy characterization that J.K.

Rowling attributed to him.

 

Anyway, I am sure you will delete this review, but I wanted to share with you my

honest thoughts because people who vomit back mindless praise are not helping

you make your story better. You have a lot of potential, and if you focused

more on characterization and plot you would probably grow as an author.

 

Good luck with the rest of the story.