[Andrew_Q_Gordon] Second Shot

[Ramon]

Okay, so given the underwhelming response, I will just wait at this point. Sorry Anyta, but as the lack of responses shows, there are not too many 'fans' who want to find out what happens next. Aside from you - who as my Beta reader/confident has already read the next few chapters - only Caedus, responded and he would prefer I finish the few scenes I have left to write first before I start posting.

 

So with that in mind, I shall finish what I was working through, then start again so as to avoid even the potential for a break.

 

Thanks to you both, always appreciate the feed back and support.

 

 

Andy

 

Wait, I just saw this today so I vote that you put it up too for the selfish reason that I really want to know what happens next! Also, Caedus said he that you should keep up the weekly posts so that's really three votes for you posting it.

[AnytaSunday]

lack of responses shows, there are not too many 'fans' who want to find out what happens next.

Keep in mind loads of readers don't have an account and don't some don't post messages. There are many in this crowd, I'm sure that are fans and who are itching to find out what happens next.

 

[Agaith]

Okay, so given the underwhelming response, I will just wait at this point. Sorry Anyta, but as the lack of responses shows, there are not too many 'fans' who want to find out what happens next. Aside from you - who as my Beta reader/confident has already read the next few chapters - only Caedus, responded and he would prefer I finish the few scenes I have left to write first before I start posting.

 

So with that in mind, I shall finish what I was working through, then start again so as to avoid even the potential for a break.

 

Thanks to you both, always appreciate the feed back and support.

 

 

Andy

 

 

I'm sorry for not getting to this sooner Andy but I havent checked this as much because I thought you were waiting for the new efic.

But now I'm here, I m saying you'd better bloody post it! Its been a long time since I read a new chapter of Second Shot. Please please please post

[lin]

Post it Andy. I ove this story.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Wait, I just saw this today so I vote that you put it up too for the selfish reason that I really want to know what happens next! Also, Caedus said he that you should keep up the weekly posts so that's really three votes for you posting it.

 

 

But now I'm here, I m saying you'd better bloody post it! Its been a long time since I read a new chapter of Second Shot. Please please please post

 

 

Post it Andy. I ove this story.

 

Just a quick clarification - the question wasn't will I post the rest or never post the rest, the question was should I start NOW with the expectation tehre might be a time where there is longer than usual break while I finish writing a chapter, OR should I wait until that is done so I can post on a regular schedule with out any extended breaks.

 

Either way I will finish posting, just trying to see if folk would rather wait a week or two while I finish this last pesky chapter OR start now and risk I don't get it done before I get to it.

 

Andy

[Benji]

Just a quick clarification - the question wasn't will I post the rest or never post the rest, the question was should I start NOW with the expectation tehre might be a time where there is longer than usual break while I finish writing a chapter, OR should I wait until that is done so I can post on a regular schedule with out any extended breaks.

 

Either way I will finish posting, just trying to see if folk would rather wait a week or two while I finish this last pesky chapter OR start now and risk I don't get it done before I get to it.

 

Andy

 

...............I can wait, whatever makes you most comfortable with is fine by me!

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Bowing to intense peer pressure - and the fact I am scared Agaith will kick my ass as he is far more advanced in Martial Arts than I am - I have posted Charter 17, the start of the second half. As I have noted in the announcement, I am not quite done with Chapters 22 & 23 but if I stick to one chapter a week, this will give me plenty of time [and motivation] to get them finished in a timely fashion.

 

To recap slightly - Jason got outed by his one time best friend Jordan and his mom, the mouth that gossiped. Jason's Dad, brother, best friends, and team all took it well, but his mother - Saint Barbara the Evangelist - was less than pleased. The second half will deal with the ramification of her displeasure and how it affects both Jason and his relationship with Peter. Sadly, money talks and St. Barbara has enough to make waves.

 

So with that in mind, I give you the second part - enjoy.

 

Andy

[Benji]

Bowing to intense peer pressure - and the fact I am scare Agaith will kick my ass as he is far more advance in Martial Arts than I am - I have posted Charter 17, the start of the second half. As I have noted in the announcement, I am not quite done with Chapters 22 & 23 but if I stick to one chapter a week, this will give me plenty of time [and motivation] to get them finished in a timely fashion.

 

To recap slightly - Jason got outed by his one time best friend Jordan and his mom, the mouth that gossiped. Jason's Dad, brother, best friends, and team all took it well, but his mother - Saint Barbara the Evangelist - was less than pleased. The second half will deal with the ramification of her displeasure and how it affects both Jason and his relationship with Peter. Sadly, money talks and St. Barbara has enough to make waves.

 

So with that in mind, I give you the second part - enjoy.

 

Andy

 

...........Excellent chapter!! Resolves the father son moment, I'm sure his mother had a lot to do with Jason not coming out to the grandparents. Imagine her surprise when they totally accept him and his lover. Of all the growing up to do here, it seems Jason's mother is the one that needs to catch up. Me thinks that Jason's grandparents will insist to see Peter, and invite Jason's parents to the dinner. Wow, a real knock down dinner!!

[Ramon]

...........Excellent chapter!! Resolves the father son moment, I'm sure his mother had a lot to do with Jason not coming out to the grandparents. Imagine her surprise when they totally accept him and his lover. Of all the growing up to do here, it seems Jason's mother is the one that needs to catch up. Me thinks that Jason's grandparents will insist to see Peter, and invite Jason's parents to the dinner. Wow, a real knock down dinner!!

 

I thought of the same thing after reading it. Somehow Jason being gay will reach his grandparents, if it hasn't already, and they will be accepting. Then there will be a showdown between the grandparents and the mother. :2hands: I'm not really sure how the no bring Peter around Dean condition is going to be followed. Dean would probably want to get to know Peter so he'll probably try to break than one.

 

Also, not that I am violent or anything, but I would really like to see Peter in action. Just a few Tae Kwon Do moves on Myers or Jordan please.

 

Anyway, awesome chapter! Thanks for caving in to the pressure!

[Andrew Q Gordon]

...........Excellent chapter!! Resolves the father son moment, I'm sure his mother had a lot to do with Jason not coming out to the grandparents. Imagine her surprise when they totally accept him and his lover. Of all the growing up to do here, it seems Jason's mother is the one that needs to catch up. Me thinks that Jason's grandparents will insist to see Peter, and invite Jason's parents to the dinner. Wow, a real knock down dinner!!

 

 

I thought of the same thing after reading it. Somehow Jason being gay will reach his grandparents, if it hasn't already, and they will be accepting. Then there will be a showdown between the grandparents and the mother. :2hands: I'm not really sure how the no bring Peter around Dean condition is going to be followed. Dean would probably want to get to know Peter so he'll probably try to break than one.

 

Benji, I see you have a convert to the 'let the grandparents ride to the rescue' club. I ain't saying nothing one way or the other, BUT if they don't I hope no one is disappointed if the grandparents do not save the day, just as I hope no one is disappointed if they do.

 

Good thing I have THAT part written or else I might be easily swayed by fan pressures.

 

 

Also, not that I am violent or anything, but I would really like to see Peter in action. Just a few Tae Kwon Do moves on Myers or Jordan please.

 

Not promising Peter will be giving anyone a beat down, but his training will have a bit more of a role in this half. I am not planning a Batman/Dark Knight type fight scene, but there will be more dealing with Peter's skills coming up. In fact it is somewhat prominent in what happens to them. Think Peter gets mad at Jason, someone gets their ass beat, hospitalization, police officers, arrests, jail - sorry no prison rape scene - that sort of thingy. That way when what really happens, you will be surprised LOL.

 

Anyway, awesome chapter! Thanks for caving in to the pressure!

 

That's what all good independent minded authors do, they succumb to fan pressure and turn out commercial drivel.

 

Thanks for reading and especially for commenting. Hope this post cleared up nothing.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter 18 is up. A bit different from the other chapters, more about Jason and his family and his brother - which of course is part of his family right???

 

Not really sure how to take what is happening. Clearly folks are reading, as I am not padding the read count - now maybe someone else is, but since I am not paying anyone, that is a very unlikely scenario. But for as many people as have read it, there are very few comments - which is also normal I know.

 

So no more begging, cajoling, prodding. Nope I am shifting gears - I m gonna threaten everyone with violence:

 

Comment or else -

 

:2hands::ranger::sword::axeman::battleaxe::fire::mace:

 

 

And if that fails, there is always the 'nuclear option!"

 

 

:nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke:

[Benji]

Chapter 18 is up. A bit different from the other chapters, more about Jason and his family and his brother - which of course is part of his family right???

 

Not really sure how to take what is happening. Clearly folks are reading, as I am not padding the read count - now maybe someone else is, but since I am not paying anyone, that is a very unlikely scenario. But for as many people as have read it, there are very few comments - which is also normal I know.

 

So no more begging, cajoling, prodding. Nope I am shifting gears - I m gonna threaten everyone with violence:

 

Comment or else -

 

:2hands::ranger::sword::axeman::battleaxe::fire::mace:

 

 

And if that fails, there is always the 'nuclear option!"

 

 

 

 

:nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke::nuke:

 

 

......No nukes please! ..............The encounter with Ethan and Jason was interesting, a test to their relationships? The true colors of Jason's grandparents are coming through here, awarding Ethan a years tuition at school. It would appear that they are (grandparents) not out of the loop of the news of the community as evidenced by their generosity. I think they already know of Jason's sexuality also, grandparents are not naive to begin with, and sometimes they are blunt. So making Jason choke on a bit of food does not sound far fetched when bluntly asked by them at the dinner table. Great chapter!!! Look forward to more!!

[AnytaSunday]

I don't want to be nuked either.

 

I love it. It's sooooooooooo

 

(look forward to more too, hehehe)

[Andrew Q Gordon]

......No nukes please! ..............The encounter with Ethan and Jason was interesting, a test to their relationships? The true colors of Jason's grandparents are coming through here, awarding Ethan a years tuition at school. It would appear that they are (grandparents) not out of the loop of the news of the community as evidenced by their generosity. I think they already know of Jason's sexuality also, grandparents are not naive to begin with, and sometimes they are blunt. So making Jason choke on a bit of food does not sound far fetched when bluntly asked by them at the dinner table. Great chapter!!! Look forward to more!!

 

Benji, Benji, Benji, I can't say it enough but they are not going to be Jason's white knights. Even if they knew - and I will not concede that - Jason doesn't know they know. They are far too proper to bring it up if he doesn't. But as for their taking care of Ethan, given their knowledge of the death of his father and how that messed up Aaron for a bit, it not a stretch for them to find out what was going on to make sure he was okay. That knowledge is what would prompt an inquiry. Why reason would they have to at this point to poke around their grandson's personal life? So, while it might be common knowledge or at least mentioned in Barbara's social circles, in my world, Ray and Flora are not privy - yet to this information.

[Caedus]

Chapter 18 was a good read. Jason had his first real test in his relationship, and while he did well in this case (as well as you can expect), doesnt mean it won't be the last one. Is Jason going to be able to see Peter a lot this summer given the conditions he agreed too? Long distance with the added bonus of insecurities cause a lot of strain in relationships so there will likely be more issues in the future.

 

I like the Henry's a lot. Sure they maybe uber-wealthy, but they seem to still maintain a "Noblesse Oblige" standard that a lot of wealthy seem to forsake. Even if they never find out about Jason's sexuality it would still be pretty cool to learn about their side of the family. They seem like genuinely good people.

 

Ethan and Aaron show a lot of promise as new characters. While I'm not convinced that the sexual tension is gone between Ethan and Jason, their potential friendship will be nice to read up on given their backgrounds. Aaron is a bit of a mystery for me. He may or may not be still messed up, but he seems like a good brother to Ethan, someone who while motivated and determined on the surface, has a lot more going on underneath, which makes his development as a character so much more interesting. He could end up being friendly or a problem for Jason.

 

What happens with Darryl and co. in future chapters, do they make appearances? I'm really interested in reading about your plans for Jason and Peter. You make no guarantees so it'll be fun to find out how you plan to end this story. This may come out wrong, but Jason is still new to everything, this is his first serious relationship so mistakes should be expected, like a trial run. A best this will challenge them, and at worst they won't last the summer together. But maybe I'm being a bit cynical lol.

 

Anyways I'm glad your posting, but this is worth the wait.

 

PS: I liked how you handled Jason's parents in Chapter 17. Royce's situation is understandable, even they may be painful for Jason. When someone has those type of expectations for so long to abruptly have them destroyed, theirs likely to be some dissapointment, even some sadness. Jason did nothing wrong other than be true to himself, but these things aren't easy and they take time.

 

Mrs. Tellerman is not going to change, and that really sucks for Jason because he seems to need a lot of love and apporoval from someone who love is merely conditional. He'll have to learn to accept his mom's rejection over time, which is something we all fear when you come out to a parent. She's past hatred to the point of indifference so I doubt she would go out of her way to cause Jason problems if he doesn't embarass her, though she may shift Jason's inheritance to Dean and disown him.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter 18 was a good read. Jason had his first real test in his relationship, and while he did well in this case (as well as you can expect), doesnt mean it won't be the last one. Is Jason going to be able to see Peter a lot this summer given the conditions he agreed too? Long distance with the added bonus of insecurities cause a lot of strain in relationships so there will likely be more issues in the future.

 

I like the Henry's a lot. Sure they maybe uber-wealthy, but they seem to still maintain a "Noblesse Oblige" standard that a lot of wealthy seem to forsake. Even if they never find out about Jason's sexuality it would still be pretty cool to learn about their side of the family. They seem like genuinely good people.

 

Ethan and Aaron show a lot of promise as new characters. While I'm not convinced that the sexual tension is gone between Ethan and Jason, their potential friendship will be nice to read up on given their backgrounds. Aaron is a bit of a mystery for me. He may or may not be still messed up, but he seems like a good brother to Ethan, someone who while motivated and determined on the surface, has a lot more going on underneath, which makes his development as a character so much more interesting. He could end up being friendly or a problem for Jason.

 

What happens with Darryl and co. in future chapters, do they make appearances? I'm really interested in reading about your plans for Jason and Peter. You make no guarantees so it'll be fun to find out how you plan to end this story. This may come out wrong, but Jason is still new to everything, this is his first serious relationship so mistakes should be expected, like a trial run. A best this will challenge them, and at worst they won't last the summer together. But maybe I'm being a bit cynical lol.

 

Anyways I'm glad your posting, but this is worth the wait.

 

PS: I liked how you handled Jason's parents in Chapter 17. Royce's situation is understandable, even they may be painful for Jason. When someone has those type of expectations for so long to abruptly have them destroyed, theirs likely to be some dissapointment, even some sadness. Jason did nothing wrong other than be true to himself, but these things aren't easy and they take time.

 

Mrs. Tellerman is not going to change, and that really sucks for Jason because he seems to need a lot of love and apporoval from someone who love is merely conditional. He'll have to learn to accept his mom's rejection over time, which is something we all fear when you come out to a parent. She's past hatred to the point of indifference so I doubt she would go out of her way to cause Jason problems if he doesn't embarass her, though she may shift Jason's inheritance to Dean and disown him.

 

UFFF!!!!

 

WOW! That was longer than the chapter - JK.

 

Most everyone to date who has been introduce as a character with more than a paragraph or three will be returning in the future chapters. Darryl & Co will have a major part in what comes next. Ethan has a smaller role but he and Jason will remain good friends, though . . . er nuff said on that.

 

There is a bit more on the Henry's but they would be a tale all in themselves and I am not sure I have the imagination or the knowledge to fill in the gaps with their lives.

 

Dad is in a bind and that will be come more evident in a few chapters. Wife or Kid, whose side do you take? Mom, well sometimes with someone like that it takes a life altering event to bring you around - hmm, could there be such an event on the horizon for her and her son? Would it change her perspective on things?? IDK, stay tuned Bat fans, this ride ain't over by a long shot

 

Oh and a big thank you and back snap for writing all you did, I love this kind of stuff.

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter 19 is up.

 

This one and the last chapter were two of my favorites to write, there were and will be a few others I like as well, but this was rather easy to write. I have always liked old cars, not that I ever had the money to collect them. But I remember once going to an antique car auction with my uncle - he on the other hand has the money to indulge. My cousin and I were about 13 when we went. However, I have zero idea how realistic the auction scene is, or the 'pretender' Ernie Smith. No idea if what I wrote happens or not, so no flames on how it is not realistic if I am wrong.

 

Andy

[Benji]

Chapter 19 is up.

 

This one and the last chapter were two of my favorites to write, there were and will be a few others I like as well, but this was rather easy to write. I have always liked old cars, not that I ever had the money to collect them. But I remember once going to an antique car auction with my uncle - he on the other hand has the money to indulge. My cousin and I were about 13 when we went. However, I have zero idea how realistic the auction scene is, or the 'pretender' Ernie Smith. No idea if what I wrote happens or not, so no flames on how it is not realistic if I am wrong.

 

Andy

 

..........Ah great Andy, this chapter shows the love between Grandpa and grandson here clearly, it is a bond not willing to be broken. The encounter with Ernie Smith was not significant, but telling, the guy is brewing to best his grandfather after being embarrassed. (Again I play the great grandparents saga) The rest of the chapter leaves no clues into the future, except the dinner date with the prospective in-laws, should be interesting! Great Chapter!!

[Andrew Q Gordon]

..........Ah great Andy, this chapter shows the love between Grandpa and grandson here clearly, it is a bond not willing to be broken. The encounter with Ernie Smith was not significant, but telling, the guy is brewing to best his grandfather after being embarrassed. (Again I play the great grandparents saga) The rest of the chapter leaves no clues into the future, except the dinner date with the prospective in-laws, should be interesting! Great Chapter!!

 

I will have you know Benjamin J. Moderator, that because of all your grandparent comments, I had to revise a part of what is to come - because all that you said made sense and what I wrote did not. LOL I won't tell you when and where but if you spot it, raise your hand and shout out

 

I wanted to make the next chapter, 19a but I gave Anyta crap about how there are 'a' chapters so I can't do that, so I thought, maybe 19b, 'b' as in bonus, but same problem. Then I figured I could name it dinner for schmucks but that was taken.

 

I think what I am going to do is break up the mammoth chapters I write, most tend to be over 7-8k words, and post twice a week instead of once. This chapter was actually 8400 but I broke it up so expect the Dinner with the in-laws later this week -

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing, you are my most faithful commenter [maybe reader but I can't track that.]

 

Andy

[AnytaSunday]

I will have you know Benjamin J. Moderator, that because of all your grandparent comments, I had to revise a part of what is to come - because all that you said made sense and what I wrote did not. LOL I won't tell you when and where but if you spot it, raise your hand and shout out

 

I wanted to make the next chapter, 19a but I gave Anyta crap about how there are 'a' chapters so I can't do that, so I thought, maybe 19b, 'b' as in bonus, but same problem. Then I figured I could name it dinner for schmucks but that was taken.

 

I think what I am going to do is break up the mammoth chapters I write, most tend to be over 7-8k words, and post twice a week instead of once. This chapter was actually 8400 but I broke it up so expect the Dinner with the in-laws later this week -

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing, you are my most faithful commenter [maybe reader but I can't track that.]

 

Andy

 

Haha, I could have a couple of responses to that...hmmm like: Go ahead, do it, be great to dish a little back at ya, lol, jk. But perhaps I should just pat myself on the shoulder for the invention and say, Great minds, eh???!

 

Sweet, I'm super curious what part you've revised. Looking forward to reading it.

 

As for posting twice a week with half the chapter size--this is a good idea. You'll keep your readers feeling like the story is alway coming up and keep their minds fresh on it. ALSO, your writing will support it, because you do put in scene breaks in the chapters anyway, so I think it'll work!

 

What else? Oh yeeeah, you rock!

 

Have a great one.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Haha, I could have a couple of responses to that...hmmm like: Go ahead, do it, be great to dish a little back at ya, lol, jk. But perhaps I should just pat myself on the shoulder for the invention and say, Great minds, eh???!

 

Sweet, I'm super curious what part you've revised. Looking forward to reading it.

 

As for posting twice a week with half the chapter size--this is a good idea. You'll keep your readers feeling like the story is alway coming up and keep their minds fresh on it. ALSO, your writing will support it, because you do put in scene breaks in the chapters anyway, so I think it'll work!

 

What else? Oh yeeeah, you rock!

 

Have a great one.

 

Anyta,

 

I almost decided to title it 19 and 19.5 but that didn't do much to get around the whole issue either. Not sure you would recognize the revision because I didn't send it to you for beta yet. But there will be a part that addresses Benji's persistent comments on how the Grandparents will be the white Knight ridding to his rescue in their white 1948 Bentley Classic car

 

Hope Date night was fun.

 

Andy

[Benji]

Anyta,

 

I almost decided to title it 19 and 19.5 but that didn't do much to get around the whole issue either. Not sure you would recognize the revision because I didn't send it to you for beta yet. But there will be a part that addresses Benji's persistent comments on how the Grandparents will be the white Knight ridding to his rescue in their white 1948 Bentley Classic car

 

Hope Date night was fun.

 

Andy

 

.............Why not call it 19 - part one and 19 - part 2?

[Andrew Q Gordon]

.............Why not call it 19 - part one and 19 - part 2?

 

Actually I pulled the entire story from the site. So not a problem anymore.

 

[No I am not getting published, much as I wish]

 

 

Andy

[Caedus]

Wait, so are you just re-posting Chapter 19 part 1 today? Or tomorrow? This will be worth the wait if your going to go into detail about cars. Oddly enough I never really got into classic cars, except the exteriors and how the are such a great influence on newer model cars. XD

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Wait, so are you just re-posting Chapter 19 part 1 today? Or tomorrow? This will be worth the wait if your going to go into detail about cars. Oddly enough I never really got into classic cars, except the exteriors and how the are such a great influence on newer model cars. XD

 

No sorry, I wasn't clear, I removed everything from the site, this story and all my others. Waiting for the new site to re-post. Anyone who missed 19, let me know and I will email it.