[Andrew_Q_Gordon] Second Shot

[mattgtf]

Andy-

I just started reading this last week, and fell in love with the story.

 

I've gotten through Chapter 17, and when I came back to read Chapter 18 and 19, they're gone

 

I hope you're continuing on with this story, it's definitely a favorite.

 

-Matt

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Okay, at the risk of seeming a tad too egotistical, I am ready to start posting this again - and completing it too. I went back and edited most of the original chapters I posted. I toyed with posting a new chapter - 20 in this case - then posting the old ones, but that would probably be a problem if folks wanted to go back see what happened before to understand what is happening now. I promise to make the effort to get these old 19 up as quickly as I can, so that I can get the new ones up.

 

One thing I decided was I am going to make the chapters shorter but post them faster going forward. That should get things up and done sooner than later. Unfortunately, the new system will put a halt to things while I transfer the old chapters first but hopefully that will go quickly.

 

 

Any comments let me know.

 

Andy

[Philippe]

I love your story and hope you're able to get it quickly edited and re-posted; so you can concentrate on NEW CHAPTERS! lol Sincerely though, I really enjoy this story and wish you the best of luck with the time management, hope to see your continued postings soon.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

I love your story and hope you're able to get it quickly edited and re-posted; so you can concentrate on NEW CHAPTERS! lol Sincerely though, I really enjoy this story and wish you the best of luck with the time management, hope to see your continued postings soon.

 

Thanks Philippe,

 

My goal is to edit a new chapter a day and post 2-3 old ones. That way I will have about 10-12 new chapters ready to post once the old ones are back up. I have 4 new ones ready 1 almost ready and one getting ready lol. Like I said in my status update, I have two other project I want to work on so I want to finish this sooner than later and move on. I am not good at working on multiple projects.

 

Andy

[Frostina]

Jason is BACK with Polished and shiny soccer cleats....

And Peter with is Starched and polished Gi!!!

 

Soccer boy and Karate kid...

 

YAY!!!

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Okay five up 14 to go. I still hope to get this posted by the end of the week, but don't hold me to it. After that I will post the new chapters, hopefully two a week until it is done, maybe more toward the end. I want to get back to reading stuff instead of spending all my free time editing and formatting.

 

Andy

[Kavrik]

Okay five up 14 to go. I still hope to get this posted by the end of the week, but don't hold me to it. After that I will post the new chapters, hopefully two a week until it is done, maybe more toward the end. I want to get back to reading stuff instead of spending all my free time editing and formatting.

 

Andy

 

 

This story is awesome...it's so filled with angst that I feel I'm really there with all of their emotions in my head lol

[Andrew Q Gordon]

This story is awesome...it's so filled with angst that I feel I'm really there with all of their emotions in my head lol

 

 

Thanks for the encouragement, but I should give credit where it is due, Anyta has pushed me to put more feeling and emotions in, clearly she had a good point

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Okay, two more chapters up, that is 7 of the old 19. I will try for one more tonight, but no promises. Next week for sure new chapter(s) will be up.

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter's 8 & 9 are up, not getting as many posted as I had hoped, but will try to speed things up. Am almost halfway there. 10 more to go. Still shooting for finishing by the weekend and start posting the new chapters by next week.

 

Andy

 

Update: In light of the new system very likely being up and running next week, the rest of the chapters are being put on hold, I will try to get everything up next week including new chapters. if the new system is as easy as it sounds, I should be able to do that easy enough -- sorry for the new delay.

Edited December 8, 2010 by Quonus10

[Andrew Q Gordon]

1-9 from the Old eFiction are on the new GA Stories.

 

I also posted 10-12.

 

I should have 13-19 up by the end of the weekend which means Monday I will start posting new chapters - one never before seen - expect by my Beta Reader and Editor

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

1-19 are up, these were the one's that have all been posted before. If I don't fall asleep I will post chapter 20 - a new chapter tonight. After that, I will do at least one a week, more if I can keep up. Hope to have this all posted sooner than later.

 

As always, i enjoy the feed back.

 

Andy

 

 

Okay, I just got Chapter 20 up. Chapter 20 link Not the longest chapter, but then this way I can post more often.

Edited December 18, 2010 by Quonus10

[Benji]

1-19 are up, these were the one's that have all been posted before. If I don't fall asleep I will post chapter 20 - a new chapter tonight. After that, I will do at least one a week, more if I can keep up. Hope to have this all posted sooner than later.

 

As always, i enjoy the feed back.

 

Andy

 

 

Okay, I just got Chapter 20 up. Chapter 20 link Not the longest chapter, but then this way I can post more often.

 

..............Semi-sweet dinner with Pete's family, the semi being how Jason had compared his own mother to Peters. Hmmmm, will the coach let him go? Not sure on that one, coaches can be pricky at the beginning of the season. Looking forward to more!!! Nice chapter!

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter 21 is up - here is the link Chapter 21

 

Thanks to everyone who has taken the time to read and comment. I appreciate both.

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Not that folks are reading these discussion threads so much anymore, but what the hey, will post here anyway.

 

Sent the latest chapter to be reviewed so I figure as long as I can keep a constant stream of ready chapters, I will keep posting sooner than later.

 

So here is Chapter 22 - comments not required but welcome nevertheless.

 

Andy

 

Chapter 22 -

[Kavrik]

Not that folks are reading these discussion threads so much anymore, but what the hey, will post here anyway.

 

 

The nerd in me senses through the Force that Andy requires attention... (breaks out water pitcher and carefully hydrates said dehydrated plant in the middle of the desert).

 

And by the way...I love reading what you write.

 

Related to Second Shot ===> You state that this story is based off of real life experiences. Well your hot main character is in the locker room a lot. I demand pictures of these particulars from your real life posted in this thread for my viewing pleasure.

 

That is all

 

I leave you with this informative video that you may need in a few days my friend:

 

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Related to Second Shot ===> You state that this story is based off of real life experiences. Well your hot main character is in the locker room a lot. I demand pictures of these particulars from your real life posted in this thread for my viewing pleasure.

Actually I said it was NOT autobiographical but that it drew on some things in my life - well yes soccer was one of them but I was a total closet case when I played so this might be a dream come true but is totally not what I experienced - too bad it would have been more fun I suspect.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Chapter 23 is up: Chapter 23

 

Things are about to take a turn for the worse - there won't be a lot happy times for Jason or Peter after this.

[Kavrik]

Chapter 23 is up: Chapter 23

 

Things are about to take a turn for the worse - there won't be a lot happy times for Jason or Peter after this.

 

I don't like turns for the worse. I want Jason and Peter to have a happy ending. /sigh. (And yes I really do like stories with happy endings).

[Andrew Q Gordon]

I don't like turns for the worse. I want Jason and Peter to have a happy ending. /sigh. (And yes I really do like stories with happy endings).

 

Kavrik,

 

Well sadly life often takes a turn for the worse, so I don't want to write that everything is always woo hoo wonderful. The ending of this is already writing, I'm just editing and filling in a few places - so I won't be changing things. I am also a sucker for happy endings, but I also like to try different things, I have always wanted to write something where the ending isn't the happy couple walking off hand in hand. Not saying this is that story, not saying it isn't. Only two people know the ending, and hopefully neither of them will tell.

[Caedus]

Kavrik,

 

Well sadly life often takes a turn for the worse, so I don't want to write that everything is always woo hoo wonderful. The ending of this is already writing, I'm just editing and filling in a few places - so I won't be changing things. I am also a sucker for happy endings, but I also like to try different things, I have always wanted to write something where the ending isn't the happy couple walking off hand in hand. Not saying this is that story, not saying it isn't. Only two people know the ending, and hopefully neither of them will tell.

 

Maybe it's been reading all those Disney fairytale stories when were young, but it seems like in some cases people feel a bit entitled to their happy endings, whether it be in real life or in their stories. Some differences and circumstances are too great to overcome. And it's not just cheating or other horrible acts that lead to bad endings. Sometimes people are just incompatible for each other in one way or another and it doesn't work out. Relationships are not nearly as easy as the stories would lead you to believe, and sometimes compromising either won't work, or is sometimes impossible. Love by itself doesn't seem to be enough to keep a relationship alive and happy. That's why I'm glad authors like you are out there Andy to show us this - sometimes bitter - dose of reality.

 

While it may be depressing and hard to swallow, it doesn't mean that because those relationship may not have worked out, that they are complete failures. It's inevitable that in finding out what you want in a relationship, understanding yourself and what you want for yourself in a LTR that there will be failure, quite a bit of it. But the experiences you have, and what you learn from them may make up for it. That why I like reading bittersweet stories because they reflect that process and you learn something reading them, though you could learn something as well seeing the struggles and triumphs in successful LTRs.

 

Anywho, before I keep rambling, I've enjoyed reading Second Shot so far, and I think I have a bit of a grasp in the dynamics of some of the characters, why they act they way that they do. Like St. Barbara and Royce and Pete and Jason, even Jordan. And while as a reader a may not necessarily approve of it, I'm excited to get that little glimpse inside the heads of these characters when you read the chapters, it makes me even more curious to see what you'll end up doing with them.

[Benji]

.................So great to see another chapter, So the suffrage queen has cast out the life of Jason into a turmoil decision (WAFB) And dad agrees rather then fight her? I know that this happened in real life sometime last year to a med student back east somewhere, he was over 18, and the parents demanded he enter a 'camp' or lose his money for school. Sadly, I have not heard his outcome which should have been in August -September this year. Jason's mother is talking about 'classes' but could this be a set-up for a camp? Either way, it will only be detrimental to Jason, will his grandparents get wind of this before any damage is done to Jason? I'm very disappointed in his dad, sounds like he got tired of his wife and crumbled without a 2nd thought to his son. I see bad days ahead, I see Jason signing something he does not know will afford him ill-will. His family will break apart over this.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Maybe it's been reading all those Disney fairytale stories when were young, but it seems like in some cases people feel a bit entitled to their happy endings, whether it be in real life or in their stories. Some differences and circumstances are too great to overcome. And it's not just cheating or other horrible acts that lead to bad endings. Sometimes people are just incompatible for each other in one way or another and it doesn't work out. Relationships are not nearly as easy as the stories would lead you to believe, and sometimes compromising either won't work, or is sometimes impossible. Love by itself doesn't seem to be enough to keep a relationship alive and happy. That's why I'm glad authors like you are out there Andy to show us this - sometimes bitter - dose of reality.

 

While it may be depressing and hard to swallow, it doesn't mean that because those relationship may not have worked out, that they are complete failures. It's inevitable that in finding out what you want in a relationship, understanding yourself and what you want for yourself in a LTR that there will be failure, quite a bit of it. But the experiences you have, and what you learn from them may make up for it. That why I like reading bittersweet stories because they reflect that process and you learn something reading them, though you could learn something as well seeing the struggles and triumphs in successful LTRs.

 

Anywho, before I keep rambling, I've enjoyed reading Second Shot so far, and I think I have a bit of a grasp in the dynamics of some of the characters, why they act they way that they do. Like St. Barbara and Royce and Pete and Jason, even Jordan. And while as a reader a may not necessarily approve of it, I'm excited to get that little glimpse inside the heads of these characters when you read the chapters, it makes me even more curious to see what you'll end up doing with them.

 

Imo,

 

Wow - I wanted to just leave it at that - but well I guess i need to be a bit more articulate given all the effort you put into that post.

 

First, I can't say if it will end badly or not - well i can, but I won't. Your assessment of just because it ends, doesn't mean it failed, is true, but it usually takes the heart a VERY long time to see it that way - that I can say from experience.

 

I always try to give credit where it is due - Anyta has pushed me to be better at giving every more emotion, more feeling from the characters. If you feel like you know the characters, that is in no small part thanks to her.

 

Thanks for the feed back - and well 24 is now up, so find out what happened.

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

.................So great to see another chapter, So the suffrage queen has cast out the life of Jason into a turmoil decision (WAFB) And dad agrees rather then fight her? I know that this happened in real life sometime last year to a med student back east somewhere, he was over 18, and the parents demanded he enter a 'camp' or lose his money for school. Sadly, I have not heard his outcome which should have been in August -September this year. Jason's mother is talking about 'classes' but could this be a set-up for a camp? Either way, it will only be detrimental to Jason, will his grandparents get wind of this before any damage is done to Jason? I'm very disappointed in his dad, sounds like he got tired of his wife and crumbled without a 2nd thought to his son. I see bad days ahead, I see Jason signing something he does not know will afford him ill-will. His family will break apart over this.

 

Benji,

 

I am torn regarding Royce. I feel that he is really looking for a way to fix this without destroying his relationship with either his wife or his son. I don't see it so much as without a 2nd thought, but more without really understanding what he is asking and more importantly how it will affect Jason's relationship with Peter. Royce has very little understanding of what goes on in the classes and as such thinks nothing of saying go and pretend - now I know that i was forced to go to church as a kid and even through college when I was home - and I know more than a few people who went did nothing more than pay lip service to the service. That is Royce, he goes to church but isn't the pillar of the congregation type and sees his son going as no big deal.

 

BUT since you were late to the game - enjoying your holiday I hope - chapter 24 is up - so you can find out what happened.

 

Thanks as always for commenting. You might actually even see something included that was inspired by you: I will leave a spoiler with the answer in the chapter announcement I will make in a moment.

 

Andy

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Ok Chapter 24 is up and I stole a page from Cia and Nephy - there is a tiny cliff here and maybe, just maybe someone is hanging from that cliff.

 

Here is the link:

 

Chapter 24

 

Benji, As I mentioned in my response to your comments about chapter 23 there is a part that you inspired me to write - if you can't see or guess what it is, open the spoiler and find out.

 

 

 

 

Since you are always suggestion the grandparents will help - I addressed them and why Jason did or did not go to them. See feed back IS helpful, I realized I need to deal with this or else folks would wonder.

 

 

Andy