Cia

I know everyone thinks Kismet is sweet and funny and great... but I'm a Taloric fan honestly. He's got that hot, protective, yet strangely vulnerable vibe going on. I also think that the boys are all getting into some interesting relationships. Puck and Kismet seem to have hooked up with influential aliens and the Bobby/Brianna/Amberly marriage is just as interesting. I really can't wait for all of these stories to come together. I think the culmination is going to set their universe on it's edge!!

Well I know where the bubble wrap comments come in but it's sooo apt! As short and light-hearted as this is I know how much work you put into really getting the characters right and making the story fun. It's really well written and I have to say, a cute bumbling guy in soft skin-tight leather??? He can bump into me any day!!

Pain and anger can sometimes overwhelm everything else. I can remember breaking down in tears and just screaming because I was so injured I couldn't even go from lying down to sitting up by myself. I didn't have the same injuries as Wes but I definitely wrote a lot of my emotions into the story with this one. The one thing I toned down was Doug's comments in regards to the c-collar Wes was so uncomfortable with after the surgery; my dad made that one in real life and he used cuss words I won't repeat, lol. Thanks so much for taking the time to let me know your thoughts on the story!!

Awwww. Thanks hun! lol, I'm thanking someone who called me an evil wench. *shakes head* Then again Nephy called me a bitch so I guess that's a step up, yes?? Thanks for reading, aww, almost cried , and reviewing but you'll have to keep on doing it if you want to convince me you read them.

Awww... I said he managed to move his feet. I don't think much could stop Wes once he got started. The dry bit in the hospital was a bit intended. I remember just being in shock and having all this technical information thrown at me and being just blank. The tears and the real anger didn't come until they got me off the morphine and sent me home. That's when I really had the situation hammered home of how badly things had gone and could have been worse. I wrote what I knew but I could see how that would seem a little less emotional than one would expect the scenes to be. Thanks so much for the review, I'm really glad that the story was so well received!!

Well... for the realism, I had excellent fodder. I've been through this, though I only shattered one leg and didn't hurt my back like they thought I did. I made Wes' injuries much more severe. I have to say, I'm a sucker for a happy ending so I just couldn't leave it any other way. Besides, most of mine came up alright in the end, I had to share that relief with Wes. Thanks so much for the review hun!!

The story itself; great. Mike's abusive and neglected childhood, finding someone to provide the lack of guidance from home, and finding someone to encourage him to step outside of the eventual destructive path he was on was done very well. I could really feel the emotion he was going through. The style you used had me lost for most of it. You used a dramatic monologue in the guise of a journal entry and a stream of consciousness, we only got the character's thoughts, memories, and experiences. It's hard to write a story without dialgoue, isn't it? My difficulty was not so much that, which I think you managed to do, but your order of writing. I had a hard time really figuring out where the story was going or linking the different time periods you have Mike recalling because you jumped all over. A late teen, a sixteen year old, a ten year old, a late teen... even when you went back into his memories you weren't on a steady timeline that kept the arc of his life in a this event to that event to a further event. I did understand the intricacies of the story by the end but I think if we saw the events in a more structured style the story would have a better flow and also be easier to read.

I knew the ending was coming, some sort of dare from Sean to Derrick to get physical. I love how you show the progression of a teenager through the childhood pranks to the ones involving drunken parties and kissing girls to deciding that doing some things just won't make you the person you know you are, even if it's hard. A wonderful morality tale that made me laugh and shake my head at the memory of stupid choices I made myself without feeling like a goody goody lecture. Great job!

This story was written with your very signature easy to read style. It may have been a longer 'short' story but it did not feel that way. I was caught up in the emotions of Nick from the beginning and you began to hint at the twists you then threw in and those kept me reading as fast as my eyes could move. This was a fascinating story that definitely has me wishing you were ready to start posting more further. I'm involved in Nick and Alex and Trevor now, I want more!! Your dedication was very sweet but I think the worry about your quality is ridiculous, you silly man. Definitely a lovely story all around.

Happy Birthday Vic! I hope you have a wonderful day!!

Awww, I think you need those most of all. I remember that when I moved way back when. I lived alone 5 days of the week and 2 days with Josh when he came home. I knew no one and went from a town of 600 where my main activity was taking walks along the river and just being alone in the quiet country to a city where I was scared ans hell and didn't have a friend in the world. All I can say is give it time. That's all you can do. More cause you can never have too many.

I hope you have a lovely day with your family and enjoy your birthday. Hugs!!

Hi Sylphic/Kaityln! GA is a well of great knowledge when it comes to writing. There are writers and editors and betas and tips and hints and flat out rule giving topics to read to make your own stories become just that much better. I felt much the same as you did when I joined and I'm always here to answer any questions you have or steer you toward those who could help you instead. Welcome to the site!!

Well said Eon!! I'm part of the generation that has begun to benefit from the more openminded views yet am still old enough to remember the stereotypical views of things like AIDS before Ryan White and the definition of hate crime before Matthew Shepard. I've never really worried about being bi but even I haven't told people like my very redneck father and I'm almost 30. Finding GA and the fact I'm accepted even though I'm a woman who likes to read and write m/m fiction is definitely something I am grateful for. I try to pass it along and remind my kids that it's okay to be your own person no matter what and to accept others differences without prejudice. If one or both of them were to end up bi or gay I'd want them to find a site like this (or this one) when they are older and people like those I've found here to help them realize that we are all just people.

You do so well at weaving fantasy worlds. Without having to pedantically list every detail and magical 'rule' you give us a quick clue of the character's abilities, personalities, and interactions. I can 'see' the more pastoral, medieval setting as I read in vivid detail. I loved the way you had the fight between the warrior and magic assassins and Marcus and Kenard occur. I assumed that Kenard was really himself because of the amulet even while wondering how he managed to manipulate the magic as it never occured to me that Marcus would have created dual amulets. That was a great twist. The ending was great. Marcus isn't nearly as nice as he seems with that geas, which he just had to know would cause Geldin a whole lot of pain because honestly that man's a giant ass who will want to think of getting back at them often. The fact that they fleeced him of his money just to let him live made me chuckle since they couldn't really kill him anyway. Goes to show rich and connected really isn't smart!! There is one visual that keeps bothering me though. In the beginning you mention that Marcus points his black wood staff with 'the' platinum capped end at the guards. Then later, during the fight with the wizards, he has the staff (again mentioning 'the' metal end when he first brings it out) yet later he twists the staff into 2 pieces, both ends now have metal on them. It's a simple enough fix to just the 'the' in those places to 'a' to imply that both ends have the caps which would then leave both pieces with one when the staff is in two pieces. I just kept trying to picture that and couldn't. All in all, great short story. I'd love to see what else you could do with these characters and this world.

I think Julie is going to get a bit of a hard time but c'mon, it has to be a compliment that she called Mr. Reeds that. I think that Charlie is in for the hardest time of them all though and is going to be very confused before things begin to clear up. Btw, I loved the little dig man hungry Sam tried to get in. I'd have been insulted if I was Charlie even if he didn't know she was just doing it to get to the hot book store man. Maybe he learned something from Mr. Reed already, handling her so smoothly. Now, I've finished all the chapters you have I'd fallen behind on. You're not going to keep ME waiting are you? need more!!

LOL! I know Charlie has no idea who the 'customer' was but I do wonder if Mr. Reeds does. If not both of their reactions will be hilarious once they get together with Charlie's family. I really liked this chapter. So tell me... have you come across many of those man hunting women yourself You have quite the character going there in Sam. I do like the sound of Mr. Reeds revenge though!

Yay! A Charlie/Mr. Reeds face to face. Finally! I might have had to hurt you if they had another near miss!! Plus they now have to meet up at least 3 more times. Sweet!! Can't wait to read more. Oh, and find out how badly Barbara flays Rick Sr. alive and then kicks Rick Jr. in the butt to make him stop stalling in how he feels.

I think when Charlie gets to hear his own advice thrown back at him he's going to feel like a dolt. That is, unless you are all throwing us for a loop with Mr. Reed. Hm... reading on to find out!! I wonder what Barbara was getting up to with her 'thank you note'.

Good heavens, so many emotions in this chapter. It is very well written, though there were a few moments of huh? It took me a few minutes until I remember that Charlie was so young, lol.

Ooh, I like this chapter! I love well introduced sub characters. You added quite a few with this chapter and let us see more of 'super mom' Barbara. They seemed very real and at no time did I feel confused because you gave us just enough info to make them individuals. I did get one laugh. You have done what I've seen my whole life happen with my dad and uncle being twins, as well as a set of my brothers. So many people make them into a single entity and you did it with one line in this chapter, The twins were his favorite of all his nieces. That should read favorites since twins are 2 people, not a set so to speak.

Ahhh, mother's intuition. You really made his mom a 'real' character most of could relate too. She is wonderful. I have my kids convinced I have eyes in the back of my head literally. Creeps them out, ha ha ha. I would caution you on how much detail you use. The initial part of the chapter where his making his breakfast you give a step by step account and that is a tad tedious to read when it comes to something so mundane like making a bowl of cereal. That level of detail is typically something I'd use for an action that most people wouldn't do and so need more help visualizing. I did have one other quibble. You say his mother had pictures in her cameo but wouldn't that be a locket? I suppose it could be both but I've never seen one so it confused me for a minute.

Sweat trickled down his sides. Grunting, he shifted his legs. I can do this. I can! Wes shifted his grip, his eyes focused straight forward, then pulled. “Yes, yes, yes! That’s it. Not just with your arms now, lock your knees. Lock them!” Lake stood beside him and his assistant, Bailey, moved the wheelchair back a foot or two to give Wes room to move. She stayed ready to push his chair under him if it looked like he was going to fall. But Wes wasn’t going to fall. He stared at Doug who

Fear and pain surround Wes. His journey is witnessed and shared by the one person who will never give up on him. He just has to take that first step.

My dad and uncle are incredibly close and have spent most of their lives living just 10-15 minutes apart, if not actually together. My twin brothers don't seem to be able to go more than a few months living apart either, though they're trying to go into the army so that will probably happen for the first time in their lives here soon. They twin bonds in my family seem to be incredibly close to each other but to die on the same day? I don't know about that. I think I am glad not to be a twin, the relationship seems stifling to me but to those who are twins it's all you know so you are probably used to it.