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The only downside to this chapter is the very last word "-END-". Thank you for all the work and TLC that you put into your story. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Another superb chapter!
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Truth be told, I have become rather jaded on sex scenes in stories — that is, until now! The opening paragraphs of this chapter were fantastic!
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Stick with you? Like Crazy Glue. You are a fantastic storyteller and you have my trust as a reader!
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This is without reservation one of the best stories I have read on any of the sites I frequent. Having said that, I have reread the last scene trying to make sense of it in the context of the rest of the story. IMO, it just is not supported by what preceded it. There is no suggestion that Gianni has had so much to drink that he would forget himself so dangerously nor, despite his feelings for Angelo, is there any real narrative that would support him dropping his defenses in this way. I look forward to see what you do with this just as I look forward to anything else you may write in the future. I really do appreciate your craftsmanship.
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Did not realize how tense I got while reading this -- yes, lancing the boil is a good title. Superb chapter.
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This just gets better and better.
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This story continues to be a delight.
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Letters to Mom and Dad -- a smart device. And your powers of description are excellent. I am enjoying this!
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Just started reading this today — so far, a delight. Please keep the story coming.
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I really liked the underlying story (especially the "problems" paragraph) but your use of dialect came across as inauthentic. It seemed inconsistent with the vocabulary you attributed to your main character. I would love to reread this without the dialect.
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Glad to hear Mark is okay and to restart this saga. Any chance of getting a synopsis or a cast of characters and an update on the important ones so that we can fully appreciate what is happening now?
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Good to have you back and to catch up with “old friends.”
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Jimbo and the Doctor Visit
starboardtack commented on Mac Rountree's story chapter in Jimbo and the Doctor Visit
Or are you relying on J ames. ro BER t as gever? -
Jimbo and the Doctor Visit
starboardtack commented on Mac Rountree's story chapter in Jimbo and the Doctor Visit
When you say that Jimbo in Hebrew refers to someone who is fearless are you deriving that from “gever” or “gibor” (JI m ro BER t) or another word? -
A Story I Was Told Last Christmas
starboardtack commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in A Story I Was Told Last Christmas
That last line pulled everything together so beautifully. Without it, it would have been just another story, a good one but one of many. The last line made it special. -
Looking forward to reading this as you add to these first three chapters.
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Did not see that coming. Good chapter!
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Hope, Loss, and Tears
starboardtack commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Hope, Loss, and Tears
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Wonderful story in every way,
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This is pretty damned intriguing!!!! (And that is a good thing LOL).
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This looks like a hard read. That is not a bad thing at all. Hard work, good fruit. Interested in seeing what comes next.
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Great two chapters. I love your ability to convey both internal and external turmoil. Can’t wait to see what’s next. (Btw, there is just something about Charles that I really like. He may seem to be a secondary character but he has the potential to play a major role in the lives of these two men. I hope you find one for him.)
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You ar e a consummate storyteller -- and your descriptions bring it all to life.
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Chapter 1 - Riding the Beast
starboardtack commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Chapter 1 - Riding the Beast
Holy sh#! -- totally unexpected and hot.!
