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I seem to have been making a mistake passing by these various and sundry poetry contributions. Today I stopped and it was as if I opened a canvas bag and out tumbled jewels of every color and description. Mistake corrected! Thank you for your contribution — these are wonderful.
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Love the dialect — reading it and figuring it out help keep my mind agile and helps me appreciate the cultural diversity both within the story and between the story and me.
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There is a touch of Piers Anthony (Crewel Lye: A Caustic Yarn) and a whiff of Woody Allen (The Whore of Mensa) along with a huge dose of your originality in this retelling. Nice.
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Dad’s I Found A Brother!
starboardtack commented on Dahawk's story chapter in Dad’s I Found A Brother!
It is great to have this story back! This is a whirlwind of a start and I am having the same problem I had at the close of the previous book. You have so many characters and relationships that it would be helpful to have a cast of characters or genogram of some sort to help us (well me) concentrate on the story rather that constantly try to remember who is who, who is related to who and who is doing who (sorry about that last one.) Whether you provide that or not, you have a follower here. -
I started thinking that I would read a chapter or two, it would become formulaic and predictable, and I would quit. Just the opposite has happened— I am utterly hooked. This is a jewel, an unexpected delight! Each scene is fresh, crisp, and intriguing. The twists and turns are brilliant. Great imagination and great writing.
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Happily Ever After, Ltd
starboardtack commented on Richie Tennyson's story chapter in Happily Ever After, Ltd
There is a touch of Piers Anthony’s “Crewel Lye — A Caustic Yarn” about this: The way the frames are reshaped, cracked or fractured. This is fun. -
Great — love how it is all unraveling
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Goodbye and... Hello??
starboardtack commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Goodbye and... Hello??
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I sense an interesting back story here for Hank. How long are you going to make us wait. LOL
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A soap within a soap withing a .... Hysterical
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Good as far as it went but It is going to take more to each chapter to keep me coming back.
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Discovery and Moving On
starboardtack commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Discovery and Moving On
It seems there still is one more shoe to drop, so to speak: Ethan and Conner -- the south Florida boys Simon was watching. Any surprises in store there? -
I. Hate. Cliffhangers. LOL. ❤️
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I loved the dialogue in the chapter. Sharp, witty, with a good rhythm.
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One hell of a start! Looking forward to seeing what you do with this.
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As always, another chapter very worth the wait.
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Enjoying this vicarious stroll through my parents’ lives, or at least what I imagine them to be.
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After starting Geist, I decided to read some of you other pieces as well. What really jumped out at me was the exquisite rhythm in your writing.
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Epilogue and Author's Note
starboardtack commented on kbois's story chapter in Epilogue and Author's Note
Thank you for an absolutely wonderful excursion. And thank you for committing to the story -- I, too, hate it when authors leave stories hanging though I am well aware that life is full of exigencies. Be well, heal well. Come back as soon as you are able. -
The scene where Liam talks to Julia’s picture brought tears to my eyes. Great great story.
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Mesmerizing! Great story.
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This is a well paced, intelligently written story.
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Moral of the story" Never bring a knife to a gun fight," or "never start a knife fight with a guy holding a gun." LMAO -- great chapter.
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The story is interesting but you need to do some vert careful editing. There are a couple of places where the story or the dialogue does not follow. Try reading it aloud to yourself.
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Jonathan Roven is Lost
starboardtack commented on Drew Payne's story chapter in Jonathan Roven is Lost
So incredibly painful -- a realistic portrayal of the madness and the pain.
