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Goodbye and... Hello??
starboardtack commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Goodbye and... Hello??
HOT! With a twist lol! -
I sense an interesting back story here for Hank. How long are you going to make us wait. LOL
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A soap within a soap withing a .... Hysterical
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Good as far as it went but It is going to take more to each chapter to keep me coming back.
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Discovery and Moving On
starboardtack commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Discovery and Moving On
It seems there still is one more shoe to drop, so to speak: Ethan and Conner -- the south Florida boys Simon was watching. Any surprises in store there? -
I. Hate. Cliffhangers. LOL. ❤️
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I loved the dialogue in the chapter. Sharp, witty, with a good rhythm.
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One hell of a start! Looking forward to seeing what you do with this.
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As always, another chapter very worth the wait.
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Enjoying this vicarious stroll through my parents’ lives, or at least what I imagine them to be.
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After starting Geist, I decided to read some of you other pieces as well. What really jumped out at me was the exquisite rhythm in your writing.
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Epilogue and Author's Note
starboardtack commented on kbois's story chapter in Epilogue and Author's Note
Thank you for an absolutely wonderful excursion. And thank you for committing to the story -- I, too, hate it when authors leave stories hanging though I am well aware that life is full of exigencies. Be well, heal well. Come back as soon as you are able. -
The scene where Liam talks to Julia’s picture brought tears to my eyes. Great great story.
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Mesmerizing! Great story.
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Love all the twists and turns but the looming catastrophe is making me anxious lol.
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This is a well paced, intelligently written story.
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Moral of the story" Never bring a knife to a gun fight," or "never start a knife fight with a guy holding a gun." LMAO -- great chapter.
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The story is interesting but you need to do some vert careful editing. There are a couple of places where the story or the dialogue does not follow. Try reading it aloud to yourself.
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Jonathan Roven is Lost
starboardtack commented on Drew Payne's story chapter in Jonathan Roven is Lost
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The prologue and first two chapters bode well for the rest of the story. I am looking forward to reading this.
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Epilogue was GREAT. Took me by surprise!
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Overall a good story, one that I enjoyed. Personal preference — the end was a bit sweet and predictable and I would really have liked more development of the Peggy—Jack story. But you really did accomplish a lot in a short space and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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I am not sure .... still waiting for the other shoe to drop
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A good, solid chapter in a great story. Doing good!
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I did not plan to read this as the story theme did not interest me. I have passed it up each time a chapter has been added. But out of boredom today I started reading it and find I am enjoying it. The quality of the storytelling and the writing skills are keeping me hooked. I am curious to see where you go with this and how you avoid the many cliches that could be used as short cuts. Keep up the good work. I am in for the long haul.
