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  1. Happy Birthday!
  2. I read this story some time ago and now read it again. It is as good as I remembered. Matt is such a caring son who wants his dad to be happy. Michael seems very nice, just what Eli needs in his life.
  3. Two days of constant rain and very cold weather https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jAgFR_wmLiY
  4. That sounds very familiar, I did the same Welcome!
  5. Very touching scene at the beginning with Button and Sarah playing for their dads Brent and Andy seem like a good couple as do Mirabelle and Button. Although I got an impression that Button wasn´t entirely sure he wanted Mirabelle as girlfriend, but we´ll see. Great party and a great chapter
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    Chapter 1

    I could never live in a place like that, but Ryan seemed to like it. And why not, he found Adam there and I´m convinced they had their happy ever after. I could have read more but this was a lovely little story.
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    Chapter 18

    The whistle goes, and the game begins. That´s not where you end a chapter All the tension and all the excitement and no game Oh well, I´m sure Luke can bring his team to win and I just have to wait and see what happens n the next chapter. Great chapter You really have created some fabulous characters.
  8. This has been a truly amazing story and I´ve really enjoyed reading it, one of those stories I know I´ll be reading again. Thank you
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    Chapter 1

    Looks like an interesting story. Nice to see someone changing from a bully into a good person, too bad Steven learned nothing from the earlier incident with Hector. At the beginning you had JROTC and BFD, I have no idea what they mean. I know I could have googled them, but decided just to ignore them.
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    Chapter 3

    Brilliant story
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    Chapter 2

    First day at a new school and they´ve met some nice people and the school bullies. Seven months of fighting and disliking each other, turning that into trust and love can´t be easy.
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    Chapter 1

    Great chapter. After all the bickering Damien and Dallas found something in common. Looking forward finding out how the parents will react.
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    Zugzwang

    Lovely story, I´m glad Sam and Paul ended up together. And yes, you should write about Mark
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    Sweet Sixteen

    Mirabelle coming back was a nice surprise, especially as it meant getting rid of Carmel, who really wasn´t good enough to be Button´s girlfriend. Great chapter
  15. Welcome, Angeleyez!
  16. Happy Birthday!
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    My Demons

    I agree with Lisa, this is a very dark and powerful poem. And I hope that at least some of your poems will be more hopeful and happier.
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    Chapter 17

    You know how to create great characters, Erin and Luke are obviously very adorable. And the doctor was an absolute opposite, hate to see a doctor like that, but as a character in a story, just brilliant. Wonderful chapter
  19. Absolutely wonderful chapter. Asher and Michael are back together, and Allen´s found guilty and now he´s also penniless. Just perfect
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    Trying to be Me

    Yours is the first poem I´ve read here I liked it but also found it very sad. World can be a very tough and cruel place filled with ignorant people. Wish no-one had to deal with all that.
  21. There´s one thing wrong with the prompts, they always end too soon. This was a sweet little story.
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    Chapter 15

    Wonderful that Colby and Jake are getting along so well and now they are moving together
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    Chapter 14

    As you said, sweet and short. I´m glad they had a great day with no trouble from the family or anyone else.
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    Chapter 1

    Nice beginning. Eli shy and insecure, Greg supportive and caring. They´d make a lovely couple if this isn´t just a one night stand. Looking forward reading more. At the beginning when Dawn and Eli meet, there´s sentence you might want to look into “I know,” I said. “You like exactly the same.”
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