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Everyone would be very happy to have a sidekick like Jack. Short and sweet example of great characterization.
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Hi Drew! Glad to see nothing has change while I was away. Congratulations on the new kitty.
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It's the end of the rainy season, but approaching the dry season. The weather is still hot and muggy meaning we get a lot of lightning storms, but usually rain overnight. Partially cloudy most other times. I am doing well. Aod and I are closer in many ways and still very much in love.
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Hi Bucket! It's nice to be back. How are you doing? Staying warm?
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Hi All! It maybe a good evening here, but.......
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Hi Krista, Just to let you know that I enjoyed reading Ridley the second time as much as I did the first.
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What a wonderful dialogue between Gabe and Ridley. It highlighted Gabe's focus on Ridley and Gabe's determination to fight past Ridley's defences. It also clarified Ridley's approach to life and his confusion about his own motivations for behaving as he does. The dialogue was written with few words, but efficiently conveyed powerful emotions. Well done, Krista!
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This chapter focused on Ridley's family, but also developed Gabe's character. He is an observant, thoughtful person. His careful analysis of Ridley demonstrated his skills as a newspaper writer and also his feelings for Ridley. Excellent chapter!
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I stand by these comments. I think you would enjoy some of the excellent essays on writing tips written by folks on GA. I especially recommend those by Comicality. He wrote one on Small Moments that apply to the comments you and I exchanged on this chapter. You can see this and more in the GA blog "Writing World" Here's a link to that essay.
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I still agree with this comment I made three years ago. I am happy to say I don't remember one bit of this story, so I can enjoy it and still be surprised by the events in the plot.
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Your poems painted beautiful images of summer and gently touched my heart. Thanks Albert.
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Hawaii is a beautiful place, and your poem made me feel the same feelings I had when I first went there. Great poem!
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This is a very excellent poem that reminded me of the weeks I spent there. Awesome!
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This is a reward that you most definitely have deserved. Your work and talent have produced many of my favourite stories on GA and other sites online. BRAVO!
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Another great chapter as the danger increases for them. The Great Pyramid is a great monument. A photo of the two lovers standing before it was a great souvenir. They are going to treasure that for the rest of their lives.
