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Okayyyyyyyyyyy, you did good Vet....very, very good!!!! This is the chapter I've kinda been waiting for...the confrontation between CJ and his delusional, selfish excuse of a mother!! It was brilliantly handled...loved the way he put her in check!!! A great depiction of the difference in what he was and what he's become...you rocked this one!!
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Very nice story you've got going here...very sad, but well written and quite descriptive!!! Each chapter has had me in tears at the inhumanity and cruelty of some humans towards others! Looking forward to the next chapter...thanks for sharing!
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Marvelous chapter, so nice how you are so adept at describing and walking us through these beautiful cities, giving us the feeling of being there, feeling the cold, watching the people, riding the subways...it's amazing!! I think Patrick has been bullied a little more than he's letting on, but we'll see... I think the CJ/Chipper scenario is going to have a fabulous impact on Walls..not sure if they're ready for this duo!! All in all, another 'homer'....and alas... now the wait begins... ...
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Beautiful love story with just the right amount of intrigue, danger, and sensual sex interwoven!!
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Nice, relaxing chapter...kinda think it's preparing us for confusion, conflict, and confrontations to come!!!! But I will never try and predict what happens next, with you, Vet...it's too fabulous to just wait (patiently.. ) for the next chapter!! And I must say that I'm very happy that Rash is growing up and evolving...maybe he'll leave King in the dust and try something new and safe but not boring... All in all, a very enjoyable chapter, that's setting us up very nicely for whatever that brilliant, lil coniving mind of yours has in store for us next!!! We'll be waiting....
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PERFECT...absolutely perfect story, told in your usual fabulous fashion!!!!
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Great job on displaying how we as parents can so nicely role out the 'red carpet of hypocrisy' so fast and forget the glass house we all live in!!! Love how CJ put things in perspective for him..lol Any whooooooooo...marvelous job from our favorite, talented 'veteran'... Another one out the park...
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Brilliantly written chapter...just made the emotions run the gammit...tears, anger, happiness, shock, love, anxious....you hit them all!!!
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Very nice chapter, love the descriptions and history of the museums and architecture of Chi-Town!!!! And love the way you've introduced CJ to his first 'real sex'...splendid! Now...getting down to this 2 chapters in one week...how dare you...I'm appalled!!! Psssst...could you maybe make it 3 and we'll call it a day...and rename me "ESTATIC"!!!!! don't want you to think I'm too happy or anything...LOL
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How awesome can this story get!!??? This chapter is amazing as is all of your work!!!!
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Carlos, Carlos...again you blow me away with the way you've constructed this chapter...you've endeavored to tie up any lose ends that we might have had questions about, brilliantly!!! You've kept us updated on what's happening in every place at the same time, as well as nicely incorporating new characters and giving us insight into them! And still...you've allowed CJ to expand his horizons while still maintaining the values his dad's are so proud of him for!! Loved this chapter...can't wait to see the interaction between CJ, Bradley, and Chipper.. Also, I'm very curious as to how the cheater is going to react to his son showing Matt what a son's love is like...karma may smack his butt!! Great chapter...
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An absolutely spine tingling, nail biting, fabulously written chapter!! This was sickkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk...could barely wait to read the next line...eagerly awaiting the next chapter!!
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EXCELLENT!!!!!!
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Fabulous as usual, with all of your stories!!!
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Very nice...loving the interactions between CJ and his new aces...loving even more, the lessons he's teaching others about being better human beings, lessons he's picked up thankfully from his many mentoring 'uncles'! Just goes to show, if you've seen what real love is and does...it's easier for you to show it to others!! Last but not least...love the way you've introduced us to the Harley character...he's 'sickkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk'!! How could anyone not love that kid! Your character development is awsome, given the fact, that at the end of the day, you've made sure we either love 'em or strongly 'dislike' them. But, like CJ, we're left aching to turn the next page.....
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Thoroughly enjoyed this lovely tale of love!! Well done... for sharing!!!!
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Again, I find myself smiling as I read your intriguing, exciting story...so well done!! Love the characters!!
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Very nice plot twist!! Now we have to wonder if it's going to cause a delay in their departure from Earth and Dillon's douche of a 'sperm donor father'!! Would hate for him to cause even more trouble.... In any case, wonderful chapter!!
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Love the cliffhanger....very nicely done!!
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Totally awesome chapter...loving the way that you are incorporating peers of CJ's age into the mix now...especially capitvated by 'Chatty Harley' and his enthusiastic energy level...another bonus to this story you've given us!! Also, it's amazing how your characters' generosity towards people that they come in contact with, just pops out and makes the reader want to be a part of such loving, caring people!!! As usual, CJ handles all situations with honesty, integrity, and loads of COMMON SENSE, while still managing to teach others the same!! Very nice, Carlos!!
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This is an awesome story!!! Imaginative, interesting, exciting and very well written!! Fabulous!!
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Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
You...frikin rocked this love filled chapter!! You showed the contrast of what settling for whatever, means versus waiting for the real...with Michael and Kendall as role models, Jeremy will wait for the 'right' and keep bypassing the 'wrongs'...fabulously illustrated, Sir Gary!!! And can I say that subtely introducing us to Kendall's next 'project' (Jeremy!!), was handled with the Gary touch...and...you're still batting a thousand!!! Big thanks as usual... -
Major chapter of wrapping up a few things like (my favorite), Tommy's wife realizing that he is not the pariah in her son's lives, but their selfish grandparents are! This is a start to new beginnings for this family and as usual, you handled all the emotions with beauty and dignity! His sons will be the benefit of all the love that surrounds Tommy and the loyal gang of 'uncles'!
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Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
The two words you used in this chapter, just says it all in a nutshell...'respect and kindness'!!!!! Beautiful chapter, love the way Kendall is slowly and subtley giving Candy Craze life lessons...hmm, before you know it, she may find herself being a real life, caring human being..'I said MAY'.. Another, Kendall In Charge moment...would that he could teach us all...'RESPECT AND KINDNESS'!! Marvelous, Gary.. So, I'm just going to sit patiently in the corner and wait for the next hit..oops I mean chapter... Thanks for sharing the talent..as always!
