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Well written, but too tedious and repetitive, to make the character sympathetic or likable after 31 chapters of being slighted, abused, misused, and behaving so cowardly...
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Who is playing with our money?
Onim commented on garfwiz's story chapter in Who is playing with our money?
I'm hoping Bjorn is more careful and doesn't end up a tragedy...I'd hate to see his wife go ballistic on whomever would try to harm him!🤭 Tala and Jay need more security while traveling, just in case they're met with more Dalton's with disruptive intentions. I also think they need to check in on Tobias more, to make sure he's ok, with that huge target on his back. I'm also a bit fearful of their stroll onto Alligator Blvd, too easy to go MIA and end up as a gator snack! Love this story...the characters and the writing!!💯 -
I'm with ya 'Spanky'...patiently(well, patiently might be a tad bit over stating), but you got the face and fingers right!! This was written beautifully...love how Cyn so effortlessly charms the pack and is growing by leaps and bounds; really loving the Arric budding love(saw that one coming); and loved the 'when predator becomes prey' lesson, just before leaving us hanging on the ole cliff by the finger!!!! Well done, you can spike the ball and 'end zone' dance on this one!
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Scratch the second ending for me, please! This has been one long tragedy after another for both guys, this story needs at least ONE hero...two's not so bad!!
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Chapter 24: Regret Recognized
Onim commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 24: Regret Recognized
Congrats on the new job...Be safe for you and yours...and us! 🌟 -
Chapter 24: Regret Recognized
Onim commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 24: Regret Recognized
Smooth chapter, giving us incite into the players being assembled (albeit subtly) for the upcoming battle!! Love this! Stuerm's arrogance has jettisoned his arse into some deep 'boo-boo' and I can't wait to see Ty 'light' it up properly...soooo, going to sit back and watch the Southern Fireworks now! Do what you do best...we'll wait...'patiently'.. -
Patrick is turning into a real sociopath, my empathy for this spoiled little 'blame my crap life on everyone else', just went out the window! Right about now, cheating Ford should be running away, instead of sneaking around...either way, their relationship is toxic and headed for deadly!
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One of the best, MsG has done it again, master storyteller, checking all the boxes, with beautiful characters showcasing their strengths, flaws, vulnerabilities, with LOVE being the ultimate conqueror!! Loved from beginning to end...a couple of times!
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This is definitely worth a double read, great plot twists and turns, just the right amount of humor, some tragic moments (eliciting anger and tears), a fair amount of steamy Kyle/Jett sex (beautifully done), cute scene-stealing scenes by the pups, and an ending that was like leaning over a cliff with no railing!!! A must read...TWICE!
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Mom is a delusional, beast of a busy-body...talk about pot calling kettle black, what if she were pitched into just a smidgeon of poverty? Meaning well, does not always translate to doing well...🤷♂️
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Chapter 22 Bonus Snippet and Author's Note
Onim commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 22 Bonus Snippet and Author's Note
Lovedddddddddddddd it!! Next story...Bruce Trains Rosie and Tater...with a side of Bo and Noah???? Ok, sue me for wishing for another spin off of this wonderful story...geeezzzzzzzz😇- 41 comments
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Late hearing this...so very sorry...RIP Comicfan, you were truly appreciated and loved!
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Fantastic story from beginning to end! It'd be difficult to choose the best of your stories, since they are all superbly written, so I'll just place this one up there at the top...with the rest!! Thanks for sharing...
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A fabulously written tale of love, adventure, intrigue...this one had it all, and MORE!! Can hardly wait for the 'shorty's' to start, whenever you're ready...we will always be ready for any updates to the wonderful saga "SILVER SHORE FOR EVER"! 💯 BTW, so glad Nisa didn't get to live and soooo hope Revi is headed for the same fate. 😇
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Geezzzzzz, hanging off this cliff is excruciating, exciting, exhilarating, and just EXtra darn nerve wracking!!! BTW, that's my wish for Marc Greene's head!!!Thanks for an exceptionally well done chapter!! 💯 And NOOOOO I don't need anger management...😇
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I'd like to say this was a good chapter...it wasn't; I'd like to say this was a feel good chapter...it wasn't! This was FABULOUS, FEEL GOOD ALL OVER chapter! Found myself throwing my 'Werk it Cyn' fist up in the air...looking around hoping no one was coming to cart me off to LILM(Looney Institute of Lost Marbles)!! Kinda forgot I wasn't at home...so sue me.😅 Thanks for this one...
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Ah-Mazzzzzzzzzzz-Inggggggggg chapter...and amazing grace will be needed for Corey!! Poor Zeke surrounded by deceit and dishonesty most of his life...hope he can restore Tyler and go Beast on Corey's arse!!
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Oh darn...I only suggested we take him outside...for some much needed sun and fun...for his 'health', you know! Afterall, when does he get outside??
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Just another little 'suppose'...suppose we slice G up, as he did Ty, wipe his memory, and take him outside to a 'not' so safe house! Just a pleasant supposition
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Tala has got to start using his gifts more!!! With all the greed and deception around him and Jay, they're going to need every advantage they can get...and use them forcefully, i.e. "bug crushing" Nice, informative, but secretive chapter!
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What a unique, fabulous little body-switch story! This was so nice...and I agree with travlbug, PROM could be an excellent series...thanks for this one Brian. 💯
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Epilogue - 4 Years Later in Mexico
Onim commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Epilogue - 4 Years Later in Mexico
I actually thought that Tied Up In Knots was THE best 💯...you proved me wrong, once again!!! This...Boss-Nanny, this right here is THE BEST!!🥂 There are 3 or 4 authors on here that grace us with their writings that could be commercial successes without a doubt, if they chose to be, you are definitely in that group!! We are so fortunate...just know that your characters with their hilarious, oft sorrowful, romantic dramas are loved and appreciated! So...thank you for Moose, Matt, AidoPotato, Jay, Loe, Kas, Hil, Scott, Will and the anchor Brad...characters not easily forgotten...- 79 comments
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Highly recommend this delightful, oft times hilarious, sometimes steamy, drama! These characters will NOT be forgotten, I just want to scream “please don’t take away my Aido Potato, my Moose, my MATT….”!!😫 This was a fantastic tale…
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Very beautiful, Gary...amazing how you were able to take us through the "track of tears"...first the empathy tears (slow moving down the cheeks), then the sympathy tears (rivers down the cheeks, including the old runny mucous); the anger tears (accompanied with angry swipes of the eyes); to the final joyous tears (with smiles and hope, and the old nose-blowing)!! And all of this in one chapter...a whole new level of awesome from you, my friend...Thank you!! 💖
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Would love to see Mike arrogantly headed off to be Bubba's "CFT" , but, as Mawgrim said, he's probably managed to get away with his crimes...seems to be par for the course nowadays! This has been a fantastic, mesmerizing story, just as all your others..THANK YOU!! 💖💯
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