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Excellent chapter! The fallout over the battle between the team and Azaziel leading to returning him to the light has made the Archangels realize how wrong they were in tampering with the team and their knowledge of their Avatars. They’ve come to realize that they are unable to understand how the team could bring one of the fallen back into the light as if they had never chosen the darkness. Raphael was the most responsible for their betrayal and is suffering from guilt at his choices. The capture of the elders of the order by the master and their execution would cause the mantle to be lost, when the team intervened in letting the master destroy the elders souls they allowed the souls to go to the light and the mantle to be passed to the Doc. Luke interfering with the Doc’s plan to transfer the mantle to Thomin requires that Thomin place the Doc into the vault to prevent Luke from taking the mantle. The team now needs to figure out where the Doc is and rescue him. This won’t be an easy task with Luke actively involved. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Amazing chapter! Simply Amazing, the Team keeps moving forward and defeating the enemy at every encounter. The details and depth of emotions in this chapter and story were brilliantly written, I felt everything that the characters felt. You have a fabulous gift for storytelling and character development. This should be a published book. It’s ashamed that the world still cannot accept that we are as dynamic and driven to succeed as they are. Thank you! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The trip to Penn State for parents day to see Noah, his roommate, friends and their families was awkward at the start. The group dinner on Saturday turned out to be very successful as all of the other parents wanted to make donations for the care of other children. Danny, Brandon and Noah were surprised by their reactions. Danny got his first taste of the kids being fine when he and Brandon aren’t there. The sadness of the boys when the puppies were taken to the vet was amusing. Children and dogs are like cereal and milk, they just go so well together. The responsibility shown by all of the boys proves that this was a truly great idea. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! This was an exceptionally difficult chapter to read. Drew’s kidnapping, Henry’s shooting, Liz’s death and the horrible orphanage where the children were being abused and used as prostitutes. The overwhelming despair and anger is taking a toll on the team. It’s difficult to know how much help they should provide in a world where nearly everyone is broken and in need of help. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😢❤️
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Letting Go, Moving Forward
flesco commented on Mac Rountree's story chapter in Letting Go, Moving Forward
Outstanding chapter! You’ve brought a complex and beautiful story to a close. The complexities of the story and characters was extraordinary. I’ve grown to love these characters and look forward to seeing them again soon! Thanks Mac for an incredible trip through history and bigotry and bringing us through unscathed. You are a very talented story teller. I am definitely looking forward to the next book! 😃❤️ -
Excellent chapter! After a whirlwind trip to Paris and Vienna, Brussels was a peaceful respite for the guys. The family apartment is beautiful and full of the artwork that their family had collected over the years. The grandfathers best friend and his family protected the property and assets that are the legacy of the family members who died. Matan was overwhelmed by the scale of artwork and the painting of his grandparents. The trip to their flight back to the USA was full of scary moments but ultimately safe. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding Chapter! Wow I feel like I just ran a marathon. The intensity, action and drama have really been amped up. The complexities and dynamics of this story and it’s characters are mind boggling. I am unsure if the Archangels are trustworthy, their plans within plans while being completely blind to what the enemy is actually doing is suspicious. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Yuri the self appointed Tsar of Russia is delusional, self absorbed and homicidal. He’s apparently planning to ensure that he becomes king of the world by administering the freedom from disease benefits to all of the people. It’s a nice thought but he’s a monster and his rule would make Stalin look like a saint. The team is up against a madman who has extensive military training and unlimited resources. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! More birthdays, more haunted house preparations and a small wrinkle of tonsillitis affecting Wyatt. The fact that there’s a pediatrician in the house certainly helps. The twins visit with Julie was nice when they were telling her about their birthday party and their gift of laptops for each for doing their homework and research. Julie is more assured of the rightness of her decision with each week that passes. Her children are all doing well and are well adjusted to their new family better than she ever hoped for. The trip to see Noah at Penn State should be nice. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! Lots of haunted house discussions and a serious disagreement over who got to wear the new masks. More birthdays and parties, the Harry Potter party was a major hit with the younger boys and their friends. The adults put together a really imaginative set of props, gifts and a very well thought out game that tied everyone into every part of the party. Hayden and Hunter were really enthusiastic about the books that their new fathers are reading to them nightly. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Schools are back in session, most of the birthdays have happened and now it’s time to get the haunted house updated and ready for tours. Another moment of normalcy in a unique and very special family. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The battle between the enemy and the order has escalated in Australia and Canada. Trenton Ashmore the leader in Australia was extremely powerful with an amulet that was given to him by the master gathering power from music which was provided by a Nephilim. Luke is actively interfering on earth and the Archangels seem unable to see what he’s doing. The war is growing fiercer with more casualties. The death toll in the battle of Australia was overwhelming and the team is suffering from the cost of killing so many. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Yonatan and Matan were remarkably calm during their morning ablutions. The showed courage and maturity beyond their years when speaking to Herbert and Judy. The discussion at dinner about Max during the nazi occupation were very sad at the loss of his beloved Hans. After dinner Yonatan showed his diplomacy skills when he discussed the foundations and there ongoing purposes. He fitted all of their friends and associates into different jobs within the foundations. His pointed conversation with Ayal led to Yonatan offering Ayal the position of executive of family holdings. Yonatan is growing more confident and sure of his choices. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! They’re in the thick of it now. A vampire tzar certainly would be a horrible idea for the entire world. Devon’s bad feeling turned out to be the trap that John led them into. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
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Excellent chapter! major Harrison aka asshat and his boss general Forsythe are in for a rude awakening when asshat gets back to Kelvedon Hatch. Finn has jumped right in and is willing to be fourth in command. The funeral for George was sad but touching when Alex spoke at the gravesite. Noah answering Alex’s direct question about being boyfriends with a yes, you’re the man of my dreams was long overdue. They didn’t have time to react to the statement when they were called back to the quarantine ward finding Nate becoming conscious and Toby being hugged by Mac. I sincerely hope that Toby has come out of his coma along with Nate, not that he’s passed away. I really don’t like cliffhangers, but I know that you live for them. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
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A truly amazing story with dynamic characters and plenty of twists and turns which will have the readers living through the emotional turmoil of the characters. I sincerely recommend this story! 😃❤️
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Just Another Day at the Mall
flesco commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Just Another Day at the Mall
Amazing chapter! Simply Amazing, Nate recorded Matty’s promposal on his phone and it went viral. He’s definitely not the twerp any longer. This family is definitely in for a wild ride now that Good Morning America wants to interview them live in New York. There’s going to be an amazing amount of support from the public and unfortunately a severe backlash from the self righteous right wing evangelical churches and their fanatical supporters. This could turn very ugly very fast in today’s polarized world. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️ -
Outstanding chapter! The team got a welcome break from the stress and war. They were able to strengthen their bodies and bonds to prepare themselves for the next battle to come. When they released their grandparents from the lockets they were able to determine through Bill’s avatar who was behind their betrayal and the Nephilim executed the traitor and began the hunt for his fellow conspirators. The war is going on around the team and they’ve now met the evil one who still believes that he can use them for his evil plans. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The master’s been identified. The war has included the first innocent death amongst the friends, family and associates related to the team. Greg was a good guy that didn’t deserve to be killed, and now Tony the owner of the gym where Brad used to work out is the victim of the master’s plan to make everyone the team knows or knew suffer painfully. My guess is that the evil one will take out the master prior to his defeat to prevent the curse being broken. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😢❤️
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Outstanding chapter! Loy and Rick were the latest couple to face the master, the level of evil used to try and trap them was horrifying. All of those innocent animals sacrificed is appalling. The master lost again and I truly enjoyed Lane’s choice of song announcing that the team had arrived to stop the attack on Loy and Rick and that he’d lost again. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😢❤️
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Excellent chapter! The twins were telling their mother that they and Holly had been offered adoption and she told them that she knew and was very happy for them. Ryan’s birthday request is something every teenage boy wants on his 16th birthday. The new and improved haunted house is well underway. Lots of birthdays in the next few weeks. Danny’s treatment of the twins having trouble with their homework and wanting someone else do it for them, was handled perfectly and then after the chapter was read, he advised them that they would need to complete their homework earlier especially if they were having problems or they would not get to have a chapter read to them that night. Brandon advised them all not to test them because the boys would lose. Danny & Brandon and Dion & Trey learned from the best on how to raise boys. Josh was and is a genius on dealing with boys and teenagers. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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The Transformation of Eddie Hamilton
flesco commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in The Transformation of Eddie Hamilton
Outstanding chapter! The visit to the lake house for spring break was beneficial for all four boys. They had the opportunity to explore and enjoy their new relationships and experiment with each other. Eddie’s conversation with his father, then the conversation with Donald was touching in that he’s thinking more about someone else rather than himself. Unfortunately most District Attorney officials don’t take the opinions of the victims into consideration about charges and sentencing. The only hope Donald has is Eddie’s victim impact statement to the court. Judges are the only ones who have the limited ability to decide on sentences that don’t have minimum sentencing guidelines. I’m not certain whether Eddie will be successful in trying to have the charges lessened.Donald does have mitigating circumstances which might be very helpful in getting his charges reduced. He’s living his life as a Christian and is taking forgiveness seriously. Yes, Donald needs to be punished, but does he deserve a life sentence for being an abused teenager driven to violence by his father? Clearly probation is not appropriate, there must be prison time to show that he committed a very serious crime, however he should be provided with counseling and rehabilitation services to hopefully change the course of his life. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️ -
Outstanding chapter! The entire rescue team has finally arrived and as they are preparing the plan, John goes into the stronghold on his own because his patience ran out. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Outstanding chapter! The ordeal for Bryan and Lane ended successfully, Lane sacrificing himself to save Bryan was heartbreaking. Thankfully the Archangel Uriel was unable to take Lane’s soul to heaven due to the fact that his soul wasn’t complete. The Archangels admitted that they were their grandparents. The master is in trouble with the dark one. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😃❤️
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Excellent chapter! The final awakening ceremony along with the confrontation between Michael and Ken was powerful and enlightening. The slip by Michael that they are family wasn’t picked up by anyone yet. The trees being seedlings of the tree of life are providing security and safety for the couples. Taliesin’s trap for Bryan and Lane will hopefully backfire and he’ll suffer the righteous wrath of Lane. I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter! 😳❤️
