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I am definitely not a runner. Bad feet. But your poem captures what I would imagine a runner feels. Your third stanza saddened me. I know the feeling of missing a beloved companion. Thank you.
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If this chapter is any indication, it's going to be an uphill battle for these two. I feel badly for Don. He has been through a lot and has a lot of adjusting to do. However, I am in Louis' corner at the moment. I don't understand Don's attitude, which seems to be all or nothing. I can't wait to see how things progress. Thanks.
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If a person is having a bad day, they should read a chapter or two of this story. The love and support and fun shared by these characters always puts me in a better mood. Thank you.
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And I for one am glad you did.
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I think Declan and Bailey have turned a corner. Together. I am certain they are not out of the woods yet, but this is a move in the right direction for both. Thank you for more good story. Jeff
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My feelings after reading this are all over the map. After deleting a paragraph long ramble I just want to say your writing always moves me. Although I am not responsible for your time on the streets, reading about it makes me want to give you a hug or bake you a cake or something. Thank you for sharing. Jeff
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Loved the grandparents; Anna not so much. Thanks for more good story!
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Two people interested in each other, but not talking about it and feeling miserable is a frequent plot device in gay romances. Probably in many romance stories. The trick for the author, I imagine, is to keep the drama interesting long enough, but not so long that your readers turn into an angry mob with axes and pitchforks (sorry, I borrowed the comparison from a comment I read for another story). I am not looking for my pitchfork, yet. Your story is too good! My guess is the cousins will try for revenge, Hayden will be hurt, Troy will realise how he's feeling, and "the talk" will happen. Can't wait for more! Thanks.
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As others have commented, the contrast between public and private is well done. A very sad poem, but also powerful! Thank you.
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You are certainly a master of understatement. 😉
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OMG! What a chapter! I am a bit surprised Davey wasn't quick to react to Mark's comments. Maybe he was surprised, or maybe Cal was quicker. I am proud Cal decided to speak truthfully. Lies have a way of catching up with us. And I respect his not wanting to make Davey lie to his friends. I can't wait to see how Kati reacts when Mark tells her. And I am certain he will. The biggest surprise was Simon's support. This story just keeps getting better.
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Since the cousins are out on bail, shouldn't the police be concerned about their witness? On a positive note, maybe Troy has made some steps forward in his recovery. More good story. Thanks.
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More fun with this lovely family and their "extended family" (they are more than just friends). I really liked what Will said to his cousin about not being typical teens. Gotta love this bunch! Thanks!
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Two steps forward; one step back. I am glad the guys are trying to communicate and are seeking help. You write conversations that feel real. I can imagine the flow of conversation happening exactly as you have written it. Thanks. I always reread the end of the previous chapter and the comments before starting the new chapter. You mentioned a recipe for fresh orange cake last time. I bake for fun and would like to try the recipe. What will be the easiest way for me to get it from you?
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I don't exactly know what to say. As hard as it was to read this, your writing made it very readable. I'm sure the abuse was much more than you described. I think you found a middle ground that worked. I can hardly believe adults would have fantasies about sexually abusing their child or would treat a young guy that way. It makes me sad that this was a part of your life and thankful I didn't have to take this path. Thank you for your writing.
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Well that went about as well as I suspected considering Troy's behavior so far. I tend to agree with some of the other comments: it is time for Troy to quit taking out his anger on everyone. And yet, he has experienced a traumatic event. I don't know what a recovery time line should look like. And poor Jayden. One of his big fears just came true. Thanks for more good story!
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Hey Lit! I was having "Choices" withdrawals and was looking over your story list. I saw this and decided I needed a quick read. It was just as enjoyable the second time around! Sweet, no pun intended, and I mean sweet in the best way. Thank you.
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The proposal made for a weepy, but perfect, ending for me. Dinner with Mama was good. Your dialogue felt real, and the evening was about what I would expect with a parent trying to come to terms with their child's sexuality. In Mama's defense, she does come from a time and place where being gay is a sin. That doesn't excuse her feelings, but it does explain them. It looks like her love for Alex will help her change. I am going to miss these guys, and I look forward to a Bryce and Nathan story in the future. Now about that vampire story. Vampire meets guy, falls in love, bites him, HEA. Story over. So let's get busy on that Bryce story. 😜 Seriously, I will be watching for your next story. Thank you for sharing this one.
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I think I need to have a chat with Tim. He threw out the suggestion to you to try a poetry prompt. You have taken the ball and really run with it! I'm tempted to say Tim created a monster, 😉 but your poems keep getting better and better! I love this short poem about the new foal. It creates a vivid picture on my head. And the postscript was a nice extra touch. Thanks, Wolf.
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Of course we knew Ian and Adam would connect eventually, but I am glad it finally happened. I really get a kick out of Payne and the way she razzes Adam. It was not nice to leave us without a definite response from Mom to Adam's announcement. Good chapter! Can't wait for more.
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Of course we knew Ian and Adam would connect eventually, but I am glad it finally happened. I really get a kick out of Payne and the way she razzes Adam. It was not nice to leave us without a definite response from Mom to Adam's announcement. Good chapter! Can't wait for more.
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This makes me sad for your past and for the countless number of people for whom this is a ongoing reality. Thank you for sharing.
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Hey Jim, I think you have done a great job transforming this from a short story to its present form! And I think Your saga idea sounds good. Keep up the good work!
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Your dialogue is terrific! I liked the conversation between Cal and Ben. I hope they do become friends. Cal could use someone besides Davey and Jen to support him. I loved the conversation between Davey and Cal in bed, especially Cal repeating Davey's comment "You talk too much you know." LOL! I especially like the dialogue you write when Cal is talking to himself in his head! We learn about his past and how he is feeling. Thanks.
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Thank you for more of this wonderful story! I have not been in a life changing accident nor can I think of someone I know who has been in one, but the emotions, reactions, and conversations all seem very real to me. I am anxious to see what happens when Troy learns about Jayden's relation to his attackers. It seems readers and characters are all holding their breaths for that event. After a rather emotional chapter, it made me chuckle to have Troy ask if Jayden is cute!
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