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Just read chapters one through four this morning in an effort to catch up. I love your writing style, your dialogue, and most of your characters. However your main character is very unlikeable. I am curious to see if the other characters will be able to get him to change.
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Hooray for Olivia! I'm glad she pushed the guys into having some fun by themselves. It's good Jackson remembered Luke's list. Maybe this can be their first official date.
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Your writing really captures your characters feelings, and I feel like I'm there with them. I think I like Jackson's mom even more after the closing lines of this chapter. Jackson was kind of in denial, but I've suspected Mom knew for a while. More good story! Thanks. Jeff
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I have never been to a swim meet, but your writing put me there. I enjoyed Jackson's emotions! Between the meet and Luke being there, they were all over the place. However you really made me understand what he was feeling. I especially loved Luke's new spirit of rebellion! Maybe these two can finally start to have more of a relationship. A side note: I lost touch with this story, just found it again, and binged. This is my first new chapter the second time around, and I am excited to read more! Thank you. Jeff
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This was a very enjoyable story! Thank you. Jeff
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How can you not love this family? I think I want to be adopted! Aside from the assault more fun! I especially enjoyed Lee's shopping trip. Thanks. Jeff
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I enjoyed reading about their first sexual encounter. Nicely written! And next a chance to meet the folks.
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I read it twice and got a little teary-eyed both times. I know, it's just summer vacation, and the guys will be back in the fall. I was so pleased CJ had a moment with Chatri and Helen at graduation. Chatri was present as CJ began the DC part of his life. He was the first friend close to CJ's age (Summer ch. 9). And here he is at the close of the high school part of CJ's life. As always, I want to thank you for these characters and their stories. Reading your stories about CJ is always a pleasure. Jeff
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This story has so many possibilities! It makes me think of several real world connections. Rajneesh and Jim Jones quickly came to mind. Or is there some Christian tie in with the Son, Satan, and the Prophet? There is also the astrology connection referred to in the title and elsewhere. Wow! I double checked and there is a "complete" label at the beginning. If this is complete, you've given me some things to think about, and it was a good read. I do hope this is only an introduction as other commentators seem to think, because it has the potential to expand into a terrific story! Thanks. Jeff
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Thank you Declan for really stepping up, even if it was spur of the moment. As others have commented, this will really stir up a lot of people. I imagine Bailey will be mad, but I'm guessing at this school behaviors like Chris's will not be swept under the rug because he is a football player. I am hoping Bailey will be able to forgive Declan and realize he spoke to the Dean out of compassion (love?).
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Thinking back things have been mostly good for Will and Liam. This will be pretty traumatic for the extended family. Trying to remember if I should have a hint about who did this to Liam. Can't think of who it might be. I'll just have to be patient. Write fast!
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I am sorry to see Chris's story come to an end. Your writing is first rate, and the journal style you used for this story was a good choice. I was happy to see Chris redeemed at the end. I especially liked reading about Chris's letters to members of his old pack. It was nice they wrote back and forgave him. You wrapped things up well and chose a good place to end. Like the other reviewers I would be happy for a book three. Thanks for this most enjoyable story. Jeff
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I'm not certain how many times I've read this story, but I just finished rereading it, and I enjoyed it almost as much as the first time! Thanks for this good story and these great characters!
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This Alek make me remember when we met him in the last story. He was so caring and attentive to Liam. It was amazing to hear him stand up to his dad and defend Liam. I know it happens, but I don't understand parents that are willing to give up their children for whatever reason. Maybe with Alek out of the closet, things between he and Liam will progress toward HEA like they should have the first time.
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I am always amazed at how much you pack in to several scenes under the umbrella of a one month chapter! I don't know why. You do it every chapter. I should be used to it by now. In this chapter I think you touched base with over half of the cast! It's very clever how much information you manage to give us in a single phone call! Special moments for me were the phone call from Aba (made me tear up a bit), hearing Harley describe CJ's new bike (I know nothing about motorcycles, but his typical enthusiasm had me chuckling), and his conversation with Brad. One more chapter and then hiatus. Guess I'll have to head back to the first story and plan a summer readthrough to get my CJ fix. Thanks for your great writing and these wonderful stories.
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This story is great fun! And as they say, the plot thickens! Thanks for more good story. Jeff
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I haven't commented in a while, but I still think this story is great! You have created this big group of characters that feel real. In spite of the ups and downs in their lives, they care about and love each other. I like that they don't think twice about adding new people to their extended family. Keep up the good work! Jeff
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What a great time with Both families! It was good to have the Enforcer be so supportive of both boys and their relationship. Looks like things may work out for Chris after all. Thanks. Jeff
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It is good to have another chapter to enjoy. As we learn more about the boys, it seems to me their lives are even more complicated than I thought. I am anxious to meet the potential new brother.
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I enjoyed the guys getting to know and enjoy each other. It was good to learn more about Paddy's past. Thanks. Jeff
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A most satisfying chapter! This is another big step forward for Chris, and he has more good people to support him and reinforce his new attitudes. Thanks. Jeff
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I liked your characters, and I liked the set up. I look forward to reading more.
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Teddy's dad is a fun character! It makes me laugh the way he is so ga-ga over Ryder. Teddy and the lacrosse match was interesting to read. It let us see more of Teddy interacting with schoolmates. I am glad Ryder is getting more comfortable with Teddy and his dad. Ryder is still a pretty big mystery. It must be time to give us a little more background.
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Losing a spouse unexpectedly is not something you recover from quickly. It affects just about everything in your life. Mine passed ten years ago, and there are still times when those feelings come back. Try not to be too hard on Michelle. She has made mistakes with Bailey, but Bailey has also closed himself off from almost everyone. It is a bit of a catch 22. I hope by the end of the story they both can get on with their lives.
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I like seeing Declan changing into what I like to think of as his former self. I like seeing his protective attitude toward Bailey. I hope at some point Bailey will let him in, and Declan can help Bailey put aside some of his demons.
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