CincyKris
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I wonder how many of the Pinnacle Hold inhabitants are like Jevikel and Kemi, they know that things are better in other holds, but they have no way to get there. It's a soul-sucking place, after a while you just give up hoping and give in to the drudgery. I'm wondering how close we are to Thread, seems like Dragon activity is increasing.
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I breathed a sigh of relief at the end of the chapter. I’m glad that Andy is so empathetic and has learned patience with Eric. I understand Rob’s viewpoint, and with a normal person it would be completely valid. But this is not an average person, or even an abnormally shy person. This is Eric. He has never had a sexual experience in his life. He has never even had any guilt-free thoughts of sex. He is completely lacking in social self confidence. But how is Rob supposed to know this, he is not a mind reader.
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Let's hope Sonez never undergoes the same procedure as Essell. Can you imagine how handsy he would be with 4 of them!
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A nice glimpse into their private time. I agree that dear old mom would not be appropriate as an ambassador. But then I think of the saying "better the enemy you know, than the one you don't". Plus, looming in the back is the little fact that they are basically fugitives from the Kardoval!
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I have a strong feeling he will not! I'm hoping the dream was not a premonition. I think I would check out that ladder, just in case.
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Dawn and I don’t usually get along! I get up at 6:00 am only because I have to! Sunset and I are buddies.
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Aaand, Liebe steals the show ....... again.
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If you have a Dynasty-style cat fight, can Sergey please be in it? 😍
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Great, now I'm craving mac & cheese and whiskey!
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It's obvious I'm going to do a lot of rereading with this story! Ok, so Castle is the thousands-year-old Arexian, who has not had a peaceful slumber. I’m Meredith Langley, the Chief Director of The Agency’s North Ameridian Sweepers. We have the last known Arexian in this facility, held in cryostasis, since the First Contact Wars. We need you to bring him back…because you’re the only one who can. And because…he knows you.” How is Captain/Agent Devan Black this ancient man's husband? Which memories are real and which are false? Who are the Arexians, who are the Builders, who is The Agency???? So many questions, I'm hooked!
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So true!!! I still have the finale on my brain! Sorry Aaron.
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I agree with @drpaladin, my first thought after the kiss was how sad that Alec responded internally with self doubt, instead of joy. Most of the homeschooled kids I've known have had social awkwardness, if not outright social anxiety. I was impressed that Alec made the first step, pretty brave.
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Great juggling of characters! It didn't even hit me until the end that we had a chapter devoid of Seb-Rye! Not that I want you to make a habit of it, but you have enough engaging characters to carry a chapter. Now I'm craving homemade mac & cheese!
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Eric has had so many steps forward, he was bound to have a few steps back. The old Eric would now retreat forever into himself. I think the new Eric will struggle through this and come out stronger. Again, I wish his mom hadn't done such a thorough job of destroying his sexual psyche.
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Human sacrifice! Poor Peter pushed from the precipice.
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I would say there is not just a lack of joy, there is a black hole of joy! On the good side, we meet Jevikel's future mate. I fear he is in for a rude awakening.
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Apparently there has been some changing around or chapters after comments were made, so now the comments not only don't match up, they are all spoilers. I'm out.
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I can't read mom without picturing her as a character from a Jane Austen novel! One of those snobby, perfectly dressed, perfectly coiffed women concerned only with getting their daughters attached to a man of good standing.
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What story are you reading? Has this chapter been edited dramatically?
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It's going to be tough getting info from all the prickly personalities at the cinema (except for Silvia, she's about as far from prickly as you can get). We are learning more about the departed Colin. He was kind of a jerk.
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So we have two clueless teens, one with severe anxiety issues, the other afraid to admit and/or express same sex attraction. We have to hope River can negotiate some sort of communication, it seems doubtful our heroes can work this out on their own.
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I agree with the above, that Finn made no effort to find Alec, which either doesn't make sense, or means he's really not into Alec as much as he seems. That being said, this was my favorite chapter so far. I felt that Alec was a real kid with anxiety, not just an angsty stereotype. I also liked getting to know River more.
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Why present a knowingly attention getting facade, then freak out when you get attention? This is a real question. I have often wondered why people do this, it doesn't make sense. If you want to fade into the background, it is impossible to do with purple hair in a tiny town. I also don't understand how Alec grew up in this town without meeting any other kids, even if he was homeschooled. Did he never leave his house? I agree with another commenter, his parents are beyond horrible and should not be parents.
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There is angst, and there is unlikable, self-important, stereotype. For me, this character was a little too close to the latter. Your writing, however, will keep me reading to see if my opinion changes.
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There is a fine line between challenging your readers and completely baffling them. I'm intrigued enough to continue because your writing is excellent. This chapter was more cohesive than the last, which was a bit schizophrenic.
