CincyKris
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I am guessing that there are traitors in Haven, perhaps connected to some of the court fops Dalen's mother associates with? I hope for Dalen and his father's sake, his mother is not involved.
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This is my introduction to this story, and to the Valdemar universe, but not to other other stories by this author. Fantastic start, I have an idea of the history, without being overwhelmed by details. I think the mother will be a villian, or at least a problem!
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It feels like we are circling round to a cataclysmic event in Felicity's life. I so hope she makes it out ok.
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Lovely end to this story, can't wait till the next one!
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I loved Essell's confidence, and Garjah is secure enough to not take over! It's sad to think that there will be politicians forever and amongst all species.
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Great start! Your usual wonderful writing has painted a picture as descriptive and complex as any movie.
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Priority one is getting the shapeshifter embedded. Two is finding the "new facility", which is in the U.S. Three is following the money. This is one of the best shifter-romance-mystery-adventure stories I've ever read (I think we need a new tag)!
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So happy to catch up with the hunky grands! I have no doubt that the ambassador has witnessed and heard enough gossip to know that Northman is being a big jealous baby. I totally got the shyness vibe from Lupe. She is acting like almost all little girls everywhere, unless they have CJ's DNA.
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Great writing! I could feel her bone-tired exhaustion.
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The ending was an unexpected surprise! What's Darren up to??? What did the water goddess do all those years ago, and what is she going to do now?
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I guess Lucy redeemed herself, but I still don't care for her personality! That's ok, not everyone on a team has to like each other, they just have to work well together to be successful. It looks like it's going to be a showdown between Michael, Mordred, the elder and our merry band of heroes
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I liked the tension and pace of this chapter. All the different scenes were like the outside spokes of a wheel. The different characters were involved in adventures with no contact or knowledge of each other. But all that action is moving inwards towards the center of the wheel where everyone will interact. Fantastic!
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I need to remember that the Conclave finding all the pieces of Fear was foreseen, but seriously Lucy! You injected yourself into this whole excursion (that you saw as some Disneyesque adventure), you find the item the bad guys needed to resurrect their god to destroy humanity!!! Girl, you need to check yourself! On the plus side, Torsten has what he needs to become the new seer, Sebby is not dead, Araziah is a great kisser, and we're getting set-up for a colossal showdown.
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This melancholic chapter is exactly what makes this story so real and so good. Eric is not just living in the past, we see that he was conditioned by his parents to do so. I wonder if his life would have been very different if he had been straight, possibly not? He might have been an out of date old man desperately afraid of approaching or being with women. His mother did quite a job on his psyche. He may feel more out of touch now because he knows what he doesn't know, before he was just ignorant of what existed. Before meeting his young men, I think Eric would have given up and retreated at this threshold. But now, he will keep going forward, perhaps clumsily, grumpy, and in starts and stops, but forward.
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Wow! A lot happened in this chapter. Does the Order have a mole? The Gray Prince and the Ash Sisters knew where to find Araziah. What big thing is Celeste finding out? What's up with that kiss? While I don't see their relationship as familial or incestuous, I don't get a romantic vibe from Torsten and Araziah. I'm irritated (yet again) by Lucy. Maybe I'm letting my personal aversion to obnoxious, hyper, full-on types cloud my judgement, but her self-absorbed interest in "watching over" her best friend is a little too much for me. While I'm at it, I am glad that Theo is dead. I don't miss him. The more love that other readers heaped on him, the less I liked him.
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I feel that Kent may be important in CJ's future political career. Jurgen???? I bet the stick up his ass was coordinated with his outfit!
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I'm hoping that Essell's parents (more likely his mom) don't cause problems because they have been usurped by Essell. He is suddenly more important than she ever hoped to be.
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I appreciated the background, but I am glad we received it now and not earlier. One of the things I enjoy most in your writing is the complex building of characters and suspense. I have never been the type who peeks at the end of a book, what's the fun in that? I also like authors to inject some ambiguity into their characters; I enjoy liking, disliking, loving, and hating the same character throughout a story. Well done!
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None of the the other commenters have mentioned the troubling issue that the baby dragon/teen boy has red coloring and breathes fire, which appears to be a sign of the bad guys! I agree that Theo is probably a dragon, also. But, is our angsty, conflicted teen going to be a hero or a villain? You certainly don't write black and white stories!
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Ohhh, thanks for the clarification!
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Compulsion And Resistance
CincyKris commented on Stellar's story chapter in Compulsion And Resistance
I love Mr. Crawley, I knew from his first appearance and it was reinforced with his second. I'm pretty sure that Nero, Theo, and Darren are bad (3 different people??? or not?) and the boss man (the one who ordered the theft) are bad. Torsten, Lucy, Mr. Crawley, and the awesome baby dragon are good. I'm greatly enjoying the start of this story! -
Northman's douchery is starting to be noticed by a lot more people. CJ's fan club is picking up members like a snowball rolling down a hill. Hopefully it will land on Northman!
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I'm all caught up! I loved the answers (and questions!) that we were given. I'm more concerned with Hartley fooling around with aqumi than the Herald looming overhead. I haven't forgotten that he and/or Quan murdered all the individuals of certain families (to end their DNA from replicating?), before escaping earth. I wonder when this will return to the storyline?
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I don't think that Iskandar was wounded by the alien, but he was in contact with infected blood, is he the first carrier? I can't say I have any sympathy for him, but he is about to infiltrate the Brotherhood. I wonder how many "enemies" would risk their lives to protect someone they hate?
