Headstall's Poetry Prompts - 18. Chapter 18-Poetry prompt 4 and 5- Melancholia

This one was sad . You did a wonderful job describing the weight of melancholy and sadness as it threatens to drown you. I think we have all been to that place a time or two.

I envy your ability to catch your feelings so well in words. Feelings that I recognize very well. When in such a mood the certainty that "the blessed dawn won't be long" is what keeps you going. Another beautiful poem, Gary.

On 10/17/2015 06:59 AM, LitLover said:

This one was sad . You did a wonderful job describing the weight of melancholy and sadness as it threatens to drown you. I think we have all been to that place a time or two.

Thanks, Lit... this may be an every man's(and woman's)poem. Sometimes you have to fight real hard to get out of it, when depression hits. I've had some struggles lately, and sleep is a temperamental mistress. Thanks for the review... it means a lot... cheers... Gary...

On 10/17/2015 07:02 AM, J.HunterDunn said:

I envy your ability to catch your feelings so well in words. Feelings that I recognize very well. When in such a mood the certainty that "the blessed dawn won't be long" is what keeps you going. Another beautiful poem, Gary.

Thank you, Peter. I'm pleased you could relate, and feel the words. I think I've told you before how much this form of expression, poetry, has come to mean to me. I couldn't stop writing it now if I tried. Your kind words are encouraging ones... thanks for reviewing... cheers... Gary...

Hi Gary.
Okay this one gave me goosebumps as I read it. It was dark. It was moments alone, when you're tired and upset or afraid. It's fear. It's please for god's sake let it end.
And it does when. Dawn is coming and your know you've survived another night in your own personal hell.
Nice job.
tim

On 10/17/2015 07:34 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Hi Gary.

Okay this one gave me goosebumps as I read it. It was dark. It was moments alone, when you're tired and upset or afraid. It's fear. It's please for god's sake let it end.

And it does when. Dawn is coming and your know you've survived another night in your own personal hell.

Nice job.

tim

Thanks, tim. It's been a rough few weeks, and I needed to do some more purging. It's the nighttime that is a challenge, no distractions to prevent your mind from dwelling... I think we all feel this from time to time... like a cycle... a part of life. Thanks for getting it, and thanks for the review. Cheers, my friend... Gary...

I feel it's a very emotional poem, and you've found power for that sorrow in the way the couples rhyme. I'm not sure why, but I kept thinking there's a certain timelessness about this poem…reminds me somehow of John Donne (who wrote the line 'No man is an island')…don’t quite know why, but it's an impressive feeling to have.

I particularly like the second to last couplet:

"It’s a fight to the death, at all costs win
Caving is tempting, letting go is a sin"

Thanks for posting this!

On 10/17/2015 11:21 AM, AC Benus said:

I feel it's a very emotional poem, and you've found power for that sorrow in the way the couples rhyme. I'm not sure why, but I kept thinking there's a certain timelessness about this poem…reminds me somehow of John Donne (who wrote the line 'No man is an island')…don’t quite know why, but it's an impressive feeling to have.

 

I particularly like the second to last couplet:

 

"It’s a fight to the death, at all costs win

Caving is tempting, letting go is a sin"

 

 

Thanks for posting this!

Thanks, AC. It is an emotional poem... it's been a tough few weeks... I don't know exactly why, but my favorite couplet is:

At times the assault of it shuts me down

Sorcerer dancing, black shroud for a gown

Thanks for letting me know which one you liked, and I appreciate the kind words and the review... cheers... Gary

A poem that hits me right in the heart. It tells me you've battled this before, which is sad, but also hopeful since you now know dawn is coming. I hope it's here.

On 10/17/2015 04:34 PM, Puppilull said:

A poem that hits me right in the heart. It tells me you've battled this before, which is sad, but also hopeful since you now know dawn is coming. I hope it's here.

Thanks, Puppilull. I am one of the lucky ones. I am a very resilient man. I can get down and depressed like anyone else, but I conquered my demons a long time ago. I like who I am, and that's the most important thing. There was a time when I didn't want to accept who I was, and those were some dark days, with my children a part of the equation. When I get down now it's usually worry for someone else. Dawn came years ago for me, but you never forget the anguish you've suffered. This was me purging... thanks for getting this one. It means a lot... cheers... Gary...

On 10/18/2015 03:28 AM, Reader1810 said:

Full of a lot of angst, this one is. But I also see a soul who refuses to give in and give up.

The desire to come out on top is strong. The darkness cannot win.

 

Emotional words Gary and, as always, beautifully written.

Thank you, Reader. So glad you saw it the way you did. It was about winning, no matter what depths you are in... it's that human spirit to fight adversity, and not give up. As bad as it gets, and as shredded we can be, there is always a new day coming. You get that. Much appreciated...cheers, my friend...Gary...