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Timmy's Journal - 6. Lyric Poems, A Free Verse and a Tanka oops and a Haiku

A few poems that need a home. And a bit of waffle from me.

Welcome. Well this week was a weird one. I'm glad it's Friday.

This week I was working on Lyric Poems. I've posted 2 here. They both are untitled. They aren't too difficult to write, but well I admit I am terrible at counting syllables. Horrors! So hopefully these are ok. They are 8-6-8-6 8-6-8-6.

Lyric Poems 1

We slumber – two peas in a pod
Gentle lover, my own
Strong arms encircle my body
With breath sweet, he warms me

Kisses feather soft on my neck
Fuel my desire - my want
The love in his eyes, clear as day
I drown in pools of blue

 

Lyric Poems 2

Alone I walk in the morning
under the fading moon
silent trees watch me from afar
I pine for my true love

For far from me he's gone roaming
may never to return
no more will his arms embrace me
my love forever gone

 

This free verse just came to me. I'm not sure but sometimes I think this is what readers and/or writers feel. Or only I do and you can just ignore my weird ideas.

Free Verse

Writer

I cannot touch you
I cannot hear you
But the love I feel sings in my heart
My soul wanders reaching for yours
Words speak volumes
Written gently on the page

I say I love you and you see
But you cannot know how it shines in my eyes.

 

Here's a little Haiku to keep my hand in.

icy teeth on eaves
they melt; glisten - in sun's rays
children's dripping swords

 

And heres a Tanka just because I like to torture myself. Actually this one flowed a little bit better than the first ones I wrote. I may have to admit that this form is growing on me.

a Tanka

Skyward – steely gray
clouds floating, moisture laden
Wet now, I look up
soft rain rinses bitter tears
now, warm sun brightens, I smile

 

I keep notebooks in my bedside table drawer, in my back pack and on my desk at work. This morning I woke up at 4:45am with words in my head. In all, it was 12 lines about a valley and miners. I don't know why. I'm not reading anything about them nor have I seen anything on T.V. lately. I'm going to go and read them again and see if they will turn into a poem of some sort.

I write down all those kinds of thoughts, if I don't immediately, they just keep on going and I lose them forever. So, keep a notebook to write down all your ramblings and odd thoughts. You never know what gems you'll find in there.

Thanks again for reading.

tim

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Hey Tim
I absolutely loved Lyric #1 and the Tanka.
The love expressed in L1 was evident from start to finish. It is sweet, gentle and kind. It is also all encompassing and truly felt down to the soul.
As for the Tanka, it is saying a lot in few words. The endless days of grey skies have been washed away by a gentle storm leaving sunshine in its wake. It's always better to live in warm sunshine...
Lyric #2 and the Writer leave me perplexed. I'm not sure what they are saying...ideas are swirling in my mind but none of them have anchored. Let's just leave it that I am still contemplating the meaning of two beautifully written poems.
I understand now, the true importance of the notebooks. These poems are too good to have been left to chance.
As always, I am amazed at your skill with words. Well done. :)

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On 10/17/2015 09:48 AM, Reader1810 said:

Hey Tim

I absolutely loved Lyric #1 and the Tanka.

The love expressed in L1 was evident from start to finish. It is sweet, gentle and kind. It is also all encompassing and truly felt down to the soul.

As for the Tanka, it is saying a lot in few words. The endless days of grey skies have been washed away by a gentle storm leaving sunshine in its wake. It's always better to live in warm sunshine...

Lyric #2 and the Writer leave me perplexed. I'm not sure what they are saying...ideas are swirling in my mind but none of them have anchored. Let's just leave it that I am still contemplating the meaning of two beautifully written poems.

I understand now, the true importance of the notebooks. These poems are too good to have been left to chance.

As always, I am amazed at your skill with words. Well done. :)

hi 1810, lyric 2, tbh is not a remotely personal thing except the first two lines, i thought of the as i walked to the bus stop at 5:30 am. the rest just came. Writer is about words on a page and how they affect you and what the other the writer or reader thinks. Don't over think what they are. I'm glad you enjoyed the poems.

 

Thank you for your comments and review.

 

tim

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Your writing always has so much power... there is a clarity that can be searing, and unsettling. Lyric poem 1, I find heartbreakingly beautiful, and your haiku and tanka are as evocative as they should be. I love the perception of icicles as children's swords... cheers... Gary...

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On 10/20/2015 02:53 AM, Headstall said:

Your writing always has so much power... there is a clarity that can be searing, and unsettling. Lyric poem 1, I find heartbreakingly beautiful, and your haiku and tanka are as evocative as they should be. I love the perception of icicles as children's swords... cheers... Gary...

Gary, thanks so much. These are somewhat harder than I thought, but it's a bit more fulfilling writing them I'm finding. I always appreciate your input and support. My brother and I always used icicles as swords, lol.

tim

 

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