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Timmy's Journal - 47. Emi's Challenge Response and Something Funnier and Sunnier

These were already posted the Live Poets Forum, so if you reviewed them there don't feel the need to do it here too. Well unless you want to practice your copy and paste skills!! (that's a joke, son!)

1. Emi's Challenge and my response. Emi gave us the first line and asked us to write something for it.

 

My Youth, my youth is for you—Just for you;

I never had a choice.

You stole my soul and sold me on

To those who crossed your palm with gold

 

I carry scars for the world to see

No matter how I try to hide

They remind of your each caress

When I used to pray to die

 

And though my life is good now

I can never put to rest

The past I mourn; a childhood lost

No never can I forget

 

 

2. And now for something funnier and sunnier:

 

The words are stuck! My hands can’t write!

Whatever’s to be done?

I don’t believe in muses much

The page is simply white

 

I want it full of characters! People I create!

Hmm you say, what’s up with you?

You’re not usually this way

I pray this ain’t my fate

 

My thoughts are a waterfall. Usually, but not today!

Can poetry just leave your head?

It’s gone and wandered off somewhere

To frolic in the sun, and play

Thanks to Emi for the challenge and to the rest of you who read my words.
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It bears repetition: Emi's Response is a master work. Only a reader utterly and completely numb or pathologically unable to connect could be unmoved by this poem. Funnier and Sunnier is both playful and cute; a perfect scherzo foil for the earlier poem. Kudos and hugs for both of these!

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Hey tim
Tough choice that first one knowing who you would be missing out on if you'd had the choice of an easier path. I wish you could have had both. :hug:
As for the other one, I did read it in the Poet's forum and liked it then too. Subsequently, I've watched an old episode of Bones in which Cindy Lauper guest starred as a psychic. She was pretty normal looking - not like her younger days when I used to listen to her music - but reading #2 has me thinking of her again - fun, flighty, but full of heart and determination.
...yeah, I know, my mind goes weird places..
As always, nicely done :)

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The first one... well, it's a tim poem... and it resonates, though it clobbers too. It should. The words are honest and stark... the pain... the loss... beautifully expressed... kudos
Second one? Muse on vacay... he'll be back, and he'll goose you when you least expect it, so be prepared... you're right... it's sunshiny... cheers, my friend... Gary xo

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Poor tim, museless and stuck staring at a blank page. From what I hear you are not the only one to suffer from this fate. Your muse will return from holiday don't fret... I will ignore the irony of complaining about the lack of muse when you have submitted two poems :P

 

Of course it goes without saying that the first poem was as open and honest as always. From a purely selfish perspective I like that I get reminded that my youth was pretty darn good. Then when I look at you, I see a strength of character I can only admire.

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I am glad and happy that you took the challenge and given this beautiful and heart melting poem. I loved it then and I loved it reading again and again. It gives some vibes every time I read it.

 

And the second one, as everyone said funny and I can see all of you in it. So as I said before you just didn't see the muse. Or now you have seen it. :P

 

They both are lovely poems tim... :)

 

~Emi.

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On 09/22/2016 06:37 AM, Parker Owens said:

It bears repetition: Emi's Response is a master work. Only a reader utterly and completely numb or pathologically unable to connect could be unmoved by this poem. Funnier and Sunnier is both playful and cute; a perfect scherzo foil for the earlier poem. Kudos and hugs for both of these!

Thank you again, Parker! Appreciate the double!!

 

tim xo

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On 09/22/2016 06:45 AM, Reader1810 said:

Hey tim

Tough choice that first one knowing who you would be missing out on if you'd had the choice of an easier path. I wish you could have had both. :hug:

As for the other one, I did read it in the Poet's forum and liked it then too. Subsequently, I've watched an old episode of Bones in which Cindy Lauper guest starred as a psychic. She was pretty normal looking - not like her younger days when I used to listen to her music - but reading #2 has me thinking of her again - fun, flighty, but full of heart and determination.

...yeah, I know, my mind goes weird places..

As always, nicely done :)

True Reader. Someone asked me if I think about Jeff and that time a lot still. Truth is I don't really. Just the first line made me think of where my youth went. If I had the choice but knew I'd lose Michael, I wouldn't do it. Thanks for reading both of these xoxo

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On 09/22/2016 06:57 AM, Headstall said:

The first one... well, it's a tim poem... and it resonates, though it clobbers too. It should. The words are honest and stark... the pain... the loss... beautifully expressed... kudos

Second one? Muse on vacay... he'll be back, and he'll goose you when you least expect it, so be prepared... you're right... it's sunshiny... cheers, my friend... Gary xo

Thank Gary. I don't believe in muses. I know who's a fault if I'm not writing ... and I try not to worry too much. But sometimes I ticks me off! Thanks for reading these... I appreciate it.

xo

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On 09/22/2016 10:58 AM, Bucket1 said:

Poor tim, museless and stuck staring at a blank page. From what I hear you are not the only one to suffer from this fate. Your muse will return from holiday don't fret... I will ignore the irony of complaining about the lack of muse when you have submitted two poems :P

 

Of course it goes without saying that the first poem was as open and honest as always. From a purely selfish perspective I like that I get reminded that my youth was pretty darn good. Then when I look at you, I see a strength of character I can only admire.

I find that complaining i cant write, and writing about it usually works for me. Glad your youth was pretty good..just like it should be. hugz B xo

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On 09/22/2016 01:01 PM, Emi GS said:

I am glad and happy that you took the challenge and given this beautiful and heart melting poem. I loved it then and I loved it reading again and again. It gives some vibes every time I read it.

 

And the second one, as everyone said funny and I can see all of you in it. So as I said before you just didn't see the muse. Or now you have seen it. :P

 

They both are lovely poems tim... :)

 

~Emi.

Was a good challenge Emi!! Thank you. And thanks for you kind review. Glad the second one gave you a smile!!

 

xoxxo tim

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I don't know at first that is has been written for Jeff. The circumstances may have made him betray you, but from your words I can see that he became an alley to you, when there is no road to continue your journey. A trustworthy guy from darkness. At least the guy who cared about you, even it was so little.

 

But the pain, the hurt can't be forgotten that easily. And you said you carry the imprints of that life, which made you to not forget it. I know my words are going to hurt you and remind you the pain, I am sorry for that. But what do you have right now is so important to you too. It's time to let them go, I hope you had done it way before in past. We all care about you. 

 

Thank You for taking the chance as Isabella said. Thank you for giving the chance to Mike. Thank you for believing and sharing everything with us. We love you. That's what matter.

 

~Emi. 

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