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Timmy's Journal - 34. Haiku #2 - Poetry Prompt 11
So if I understand the prompt (#11) correctly this type of Haiku is more personal. More about how I feel, what I see, rather than the objective view of a reporter. Hopefully I got it right in these two. Still found it hard to write, however here we are.
my dying dogs eyes
speak bluntly and so loudly
my breaking heart hears
So after some discussion and suggestion by AC, I decided to post the change below. I like them both but think the second is more effective.
my dying dog's eyes
speak bluntly and so loudly
my deaf heart can hear
sparrow looking in
sitting on the windowsill
does he pity me?
Thanks AC for your suggestions!!
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