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Timmy's Journal - 12. Poetry Prompt 15 - Free Verse - poem 2, Freedom

My response to the Bathing Scene from Room With A View, for Poetry Prompt 15

Poetry Prompt 15 - Free Verse

This is the response to the second scene, The Bathing Scene from Room With A View.
My syllable count is 8-6-9 8-6-9 6-7-9. In this case, it's my perspective as a bather with my friends.

 

Freedom

The coolness of water calls us

Calls to our free nature

Our world demands we demurely, be

 

But here, alone with each other

Our bodies simply free

Clothing is a shield we do not need

 

There is no urge to hide

But I feel an attraction

To you, there - wet and warm before me

 

 


 

Enjoyed this prompt very much.
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Tim - lovely, evocative poem. It really paints the scene beautifully. My only sorrow is that it is getting too cold outside to swim today! Thank you for this new chapter.

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On 11/08/2015 04:14 AM, Parker Owens said:

Tim - lovely, evocative poem. It really paints the scene beautifully. My only sorrow is that it is getting too cold outside to swim today! Thank you for this new chapter.

Hi Parker, thank you. Oh I'm not taking my clothes off to swim anywhere today. Maybe after I like the shower warm the bathroom up! It's cold!!

 

Glad the poem worked for you. It reminds of the scene from A to Z... the boys swimming.. now that I think about it!!!

 

tim

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Such lovely imagery in this poem. The freedom of that swim, knowing society would frown on you would be exciting. The idea of a warm beautiful body with you doesn't hurt either ;)

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On 11/08/2015 04:37 AM, LitLover said:

Such lovely imagery in this poem. The freedom of that swim, knowing society would frown on you would be exciting. The idea of a warm beautiful body with you doesn't hurt either ;)

Hi LL.. thanks for the review and your comments. Glad this worked and you could see it. And well.. having a warm body around anytime is pretty nice...

 

tim

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Hey Tim
I remember that seen what I was thinking as I watched that scene. You have captured the sentiment quite well, I do believe.
They certainly threw caution to the wind and had fun... :gikkle:
As always, you do have a way with words. :)

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It's a lovely poem, tim. I need to watch the clips, but they aren't needed to appreciate the words and sentiment expressed here... cheers... Gary...

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An inspired creation from the prompt Tim!
The scene is a touch lighter than your poem, but I liked your take better.
Poetry is sooo out of my realm. Someday I might attempt, perhaps in 20 years, or 30, or 40, or...

 

You are good.

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On 11/08/2015 05:09 AM, Reader1810 said:

Hey Tim

I remember that seen what I was thinking as I watched that scene. You have captured the sentiment quite well, I do believe.

They certainly threw caution to the wind and had fun... :gikkle:

As always, you do have a way with words. :)

Thank you Reader! I appreciate your comments. It was a fun scene. Thank you for reading and your comments.

 

tim

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On 11/08/2015 07:05 AM, Headstall said:

It's a lovely poem, tim. I need to watch the clips, but they aren't needed to appreciate the words and sentiment expressed here... cheers... Gary...

Hi Gary, thank you so much for reading and for your comments. I've enjoyed the prompt. I need to go back and work on the ones that came before.

 

tim

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On 11/08/2015 08:52 AM, skinnydragon said:

An inspired creation from the prompt Tim!

The scene is a touch lighter than your poem, but I liked your take better.

Poetry is sooo out of my realm. Someday I might attempt, perhaps in 20 years, or 30, or 40, or...

 

You are good.

Hi SK, thank you very much. I'm honoured you think so. I hope you'll try poetry. I love your comedic vignettes and I think you could do the same with poetry. Why not? Give it a try!!

 

tim

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Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge, Tim! I love how sensual this poem is, and yet that 'sensuality' (the perception of the physical), is tempered and made stronger by mental processes making it defiant.

 

I think you have a real balance here, and I like it a lot!

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On 11/09/2015 07:30 AM, AC Benus said:

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge, Tim! I love how sensual this poem is, and yet that 'sensuality' (the perception of the physical), is tempered and made stronger by mental processes making it defiant.

 

I think you have a real balance here, and I like it a lot!

AC, thank you very much. I appreciate your comments. I like this free verse prompt.. I still plan to go back and finish the others as well.. I've learned a lot from the ones I've done. Thanks for your support. I really appreciate it.

 

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