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scoopny Novice Scribe

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What I liked about this story was how matter of fact you treated Alex getting pregnant. It was like no big deal, you didn't have to provide some big explanation on how it was possible, everyone just accepted it as normal. I also found it funny how clueless Jessie was over the pregnancy, he was constantly unsure how to handle it all, just like most dads are, they just do what they're told. All in all a very cute little tale.

 

Perhaps a sequel? Maybe about Dakota and Shea's kid? hehe....

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What I liked about this story was how matter of fact you treated Alex getting pregnant. It was like no big deal, you didn't have to provide some big explanation on how it was possible, everyone just accepted it as normal. I also found it funny how clueless Jessie was over the pregnancy, he was constantly unsure how to handle it all, just like most dads are, they just do what they're told. All in all a very cute little tale.

 

Perhaps a sequel? Maybe about Dakota and Shea's kid? hehe....

This was a great story. I really liked it.

 

I have to agree that it was nice you didn't go into deep detail or explanation of how Alex got pregnant. It was like it was a everyday occurence, like when straight couples get pregnant. It was cute how the story was told from the child's view.

 

I liked the wedding scene at the end. I liked when Alex demanded an epidural, or some marijauna. Had me cracking up. Found it cute and endearing that Dakota was so confident about changing the tire, but then broke his arm. Even though Dakota and Shea were secondary characters, I liked seeing them argue, because it was a realistic exchange between couples.

 

A sequel is not a bad idea.... :D

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Tiff Journeyman Scribe

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I loved it!

 

I too was waiting for an explanation, but when none came, I thought, what the hell? It must me Normal!! :lol:

 

A beautiful tale and I loved the barbecue chicken thing.... :P

 

Nice writing style..

 

BeaStKid :devil:

Oh, I forgot all about the barbecue chicken thing....that was a good scene---a bit of misdirection. :D Makes a story fun.

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Tiff Journeyman Scribe

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yup it does... one moment I was like, WTF? And the other I was like WTF!

BK, you're so funny! :P That was the reaction I had, too! I was reading that scene and going, OH MY GOD, WTF are they talking about?!?! And then a bit later, I start laughing and go, WTF, barbecue CHICKEN???

 

Great stuff :D

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What I liked about this story was how matter of fact you treated Alex getting pregnant. I

 

Perhaps a sequel? Maybe about Dakota and Shea's kid? hehe....

 

It goes with the absurdity of the text,, that's why I made it seems "normal". Also that way I could play easier with the comedy of the situation.

 

B) ....That was different! I was waiting for "how was this pregnancy possible" scenerio to be played out, but the non-answer was perfect. Yeah a sequel? about Dakota and Shea's kid? :P

 

Yes, it is indeed very different, and unique... That's why I was worrying a little about what the reaction would be. It could be either good or people could simply don't "get" it or take it more seriously.

 

This was a great story. I really liked it.

 

I have to agree that it was nice you didn't go into deep detail or explanation of how Alex got pregnant. It was like it was a everyday occurence, like when straight couples get pregnant. It was cute how the story was told from the child's view.

 

I liked the wedding scene at the end. I liked when Alex demanded an epidural, or some marijauna. Had me cracking up. Found it cute and endearing that Dakota was so confident about changing the tire, but then broke his arm. Even though Dakota and Shea were secondary characters, I liked seeing them argue, because it was a realistic exchange between couples.

 

A sequel is not a bad idea.... :D

 

The wedding scene did bring the sweetness in the story all together. The braking the arm part,, well I wanted to get the funniest,, and since he said how it would be easy,,, :P

 

About the sequel,, it seems like most of you ask for it, :P:) I made the opening at the end for the sequel just in case I'd need it. But I won't make one just for the fun of it,, if I write one it will be cause it will be just as fun/weird as the original one. But I do have an idea in the working

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BK, you're so funny! :P That was the reaction I had, too! I was reading that scene and going, OH MY GOD, WTF are they talking about?!?! And then a bit later, I start laughing and go, WTF, barbecue CHICKEN???

 

Great stuff :D

 

The chicken/sex scene was honestly sooooo fun to write, :P I kept thinking,, oki this thing is going a little too far, but still I was like,, one more.. LOL

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GaryK Initiate Scribe

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I'm finally getting around to reading stories from more authors. I enjoyed this one, Sacha. I disagree about any explanation being needed. Sometimes a willing suspension of disbelief is enough; no other explanation is necessary. For a more thorough critique you can look at the review I did. :)

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I want to publicly apologize to Sacha.

 

My initial review of this story included things I should have sent via PM. Chalk it up to being new here and not fully appreciating proper etiquette when it comes to making comments that should be made privately.

 

I deleted my initial review and posted a new one.

 

I truly did love this story and anything else I have to say about it has been said to Sacha via PM.

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Sasha, I loved it! Sorry it took me so long to read it, I've had a very hectic couple of weeks.

 

I loved the humor, and the portrayal of a guy getting another guy pregnanat as an everyday event was both hilarious and poignant.

 

CJ :)

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A good idea and it was well worked out to be a good joke. I liked it but I did notice a typo or two. For example:

 

off their coat

I have go to tell

tried to reassured his

Jessie made his best to appear happy

to diffuse the tension

Dakota said his words became slurred

a long deep kiss. It didn

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FrenchCanadian Journeyman Scribe

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A good idea and it was well worked out to be a good joke. I liked it but I did notice a typo or two. For example:

 

off their coat

I have go to tell

tried to reassured his

Jessie made his best to appear happy

to diffuse the tension

Dakota said his words became slurred

a long deep kiss. It didn

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