[Duncan Ryder] How the Light Gets In

[Duncan Ryder]

it!

 

So... when can we expect the next chapter?

 

Maybe this weekend.... it's close...

[Duncan Ryder]

Scott was perhaps the most important part of EW that first person was perfect. Seeing things from his point of view was absolutely right for EW. Now that we know how Scott sees things and we understand him you needed to back off a bit and let us see things from a broader perspective. Hence the switch from first to third person was ideal for HtLGI. I haven't sensed any loss of the strong emotions that drove EW. If anything those emotions are even more intense because we're not limited to seeing them as Scott see them. Josh jumping at Scott's unexpected touch still felt as powerful and painful as if Scott had related what happened. Luc's sense of disappointment at not hearing from Josh was quite obvious. You're off to a great start Duncan. Once again thank you for giving so willingly of yourself for your fans.

 

thanks Gary. I hope I carry it through.

 

D.

[steph]

Maybe this weekend.... it's close...

YAY!!

[sat8997]

Ok, you're forgiven, lol.

 

By the way, do you know who said that bit about women having to do things twice as well as a man? Charlotte Whitten. Mayor of Ottawa. (that's the capital of Canada, for those of you geographically challenged...)

Wise woman.

[GaryK]

By the way, do you know who said that bit about women having to do things twice as well as a man? Charlotte Whitten. Mayor of Ottawa. (that's the capital of Canada, for those of you geographically challenged...)

Wise woman.

Editors never get a day off, do they?

[Former Member]

Any ideas on when can we expect the next chapter?

[Cynical Romantic]

I discovered EW belatedly and read it in one sitting. Wow. Wow wow wow. I absolutely loved that story, from start to finish, every word. The characters were vividly drawn, the emotions so poignantly expressed... I literally couldn't bring myself to stop reading until the end.

 

I gave it a day before I read chapter 1 of this sequel, and I'm just as impressed if not more. Let me put in another vote for someone who thinks you did the right thing switching the point of view from first-person to third-person. EW works well in first-person because - with the exception of Josh's flashback scene - we're basically kept guessing in the same way Scott is. We don't know anything he doesn't know until he finds out, and it's a great way to introduce the key characters and plot elements.

 

The person who made the comparison to DomLuka's The Long Way and In The Fish Bowl was pretty dead-on. Third-person POV offers so much more opportunity for the writing itself to mature. I mean, we're no longer stuck in the head of a college kid, but we're able to see things that the poor characters are oblivious to. It makes sense, what you did, and it's a perfect progression.

 

*Warning* I'm about to get a nitpicky:

 

The opening scene, where Luc is in Montreal... there are a few small details that jumped out at me as having missed the mark:

 

1) Starbucks at Crescent and Ste-Catherine is more likely to be packed full of Concordia students than McGill students. There's a Starbucks on McGill College and one at Place de la Cathedrale that will attract more students from McGill. I mean, it's not far, but it's not right next door either. Certainly in the cold of January, it isn't that likely that Luc would've walked from McGill all the way there just to have a coffee. Not when there are hundreds of closer places.

 

2) A lone student listening to an ipod at a cafe in Montreal isn't likely to attract much curiosity or attention, positive or negative. It's not so much that people are cold or unfriendly here - though outsiders often feel that way - it's just that people are a bit more reserved here. You know, the fake banter that passes for civility in the rest of the world is met with a bit of skepticism here. And it's a very normal thing for people to go to a coffee shop and sit by themselves - reading or working on a laptop or just being. You see it every day. I doubt anyone would've batted an eyelash at Luc.

 

Okay, enough nitpicking. Sorry for being so anal-retentive... just thought you might like to know. Besides, I love your writing so much, I'm betting you're the type who strives for 100% accuracy... right?

 

Can't wait to read the next chapter! Keep 'em coming!

[Duncan Ryder]

Any ideas on when can we expect the next chapter?

 

It's done. Being proofread right now. So soon. very soon.

 

And 3 will be faster. It's already half done. Last month was just very very busy....

[Duncan Ryder]

I discovered EW belatedly and read it in one sitting. Wow. Wow wow wow. I absolutely loved that story, from start to finish, every word. The characters were vividly drawn, the emotions so poignantly expressed... I literally couldn't bring myself to stop reading until the end.

 

I gave it a day before I read chapter 1 of this sequel, and I'm just as impressed if not more. Let me put in another vote for someone who thinks you did the right thing switching the point of view from first-person to third-person. EW works well in first-person because - with the exception of Josh's flashback scene - we're basically kept guessing in the same way Scott is. We don't know anything he doesn't know until he finds out, and it's a great way to introduce the key characters and plot elements.

 

The person who made the comparison to DomLuka's The Long Way and In The Fish Bowl was pretty dead-on. Third-person POV offers so much more opportunity for the writing itself to mature. I mean, we're no longer stuck in the head of a college kid, but we're able to see things that the poor characters are oblivious to. It makes sense, what you did, and it's a perfect progression.

 

*Warning* I'm about to get a nitpicky:

 

The opening scene, where Luc is in Montreal... there are a few small details that jumped out at me as having missed the mark:

 

1) Starbucks at Crescent and Ste-Catherine is more likely to be packed full of Concordia students than McGill students. There's a Starbucks on McGill College and one at Place de la Cathedrale that will attract more students from McGill. I mean, it's not far, but it's not right next door either. Certainly in the cold of January, it isn't that likely that Luc would've walked from McGill all the way there just to have a coffee. Not when there are hundreds of closer places.

 

2) A lone student listening to an ipod at a cafe in Montreal isn't likely to attract much curiosity or attention, positive or negative. It's not so much that people are cold or unfriendly here - though outsiders often feel that way - it's just that people are a bit more reserved here. You know, the fake banter that passes for civility in the rest of the world is met with a bit of skepticism here. And it's a very normal thing for people to go to a coffee shop and sit by themselves - reading or working on a laptop or just being. You see it every day. I doubt anyone would've batted an eyelash at Luc.

 

Okay, enough nitpicking. Sorry for being so anal-retentive... just thought you might like to know. Besides, I love your writing so much, I'm betting you're the type who strives for 100% accuracy... right?

 

Can't wait to read the next chapter! Keep 'em coming!

 

Thanks.

 

And I gather you're a Montrealer and so I believe you about that Starbucks... I don't get to spend a lot of time in Montreal (though it happens that I'm there right now...). Thing is...I actually wrote that scene sitting at that table in that Starbucks surrounded by McGill students (I was evesdropping) ... so....maybe it was an odd day.... but there it was.

 

(And they're looking at Luc like that not because he's alone but because Luc is...Luc. He's special!!!!!)

[Cynical Romantic]

Thanks.

 

And I gather you're a Montrealer and so I believe you about that Starbucks... I don't get to spend a lot of time in Montreal (though it happens that I'm there right now...). Thing is...I actually wrote that scene sitting at that table in that Starbucks surrounded by McGill students (I was evesdropping) ... so....maybe it was an odd day.... but there it was.

 

(And they're looking at Luc like that not because he's alone but because Luc is...Luc. He's special!!!!!)

Heh. I believe you. And it's not as though there are never students in a coffee shop. (Students drinking coffee? What a concept!) I just found it a little odd because you'd gone to the trouble in the story of pinpointing the exact location of the Starbucks, so I figured I'd mention it.

 

Can't argue with you about Luc being special, though. If he's as hot as you describe him, I probably would've been among those looking... or, at least I would've been a few years ago. Hell, maybe I still would. I just hope the poor guy can get past his demons.

 

Excited for Chapter 2 here... bring it on!

[HGC2659]

Not to seem like an idiot or anything but, it's going on ONE year since the last post of this story. Is this story really going to get finished ? After this story now I don't like investiing time in new authors if there isn't a finished product. This story is the 2nd time i read a story and it got so far and then just stopped abruptly with no notice at all saying whether or not it was going to finish. I would be more understanding if there was a reason given for the ONE year delay, but since there's no reason then I just will keep the other comments what I was going to say.