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Pacing in a story is very important. I've read a lot about story arcs. Especially in a short story like this, and yes it's a Wednesday Brief story, I have to be really careful how I present the story. Cooper and Owen have a lot of passion built up with their online friendship and consequent relationship in person. I love those beginnings; the emotions are so very explosive and consuming! It makes for good story material. I'm not going to tell who Pete is before next week though. Sorry!! LOL Thanks so much for the review Cannd!

Once a long distance relationship, which they sort of had, is over any time apart is too hard! Yeah, Pete was a wrench I threw at readers with no explanation this week. Darn 1k limit! More will be coming next week; thanks for reviewing Lisa.

I was asking in chat the other day to see if wending was too obscure for the average person. I'm a giant geek who likes to read dictionaries, so I'm always wondering if I'm letting my brainiac side show too much. LOL Thanks for reading Carrie; I'm glad you like where the story is headed!

Nope, you didn't miss it. Pete is a mystery! You'll find out next week though.

"What do you mean you have to go back?" My hands lower my camera from my face slowly. I'd been staring at a decaying cherub fountain, walking around it to get a good angle to show the curve of the cheek along with the slowly consuming moss. I turn to stare at Cooper. He has his hands jammed into the pockets of my windbreaker. He scuffs one shoe through the damp grass. "Well, I have to pack up my apartment and I should explain to my family exactly why I'm not coming back home. My parents know

Nah, that's just what I do for kicks and giggles!

Gotta love the female character. She's great with the comedic effect to break up the histronics. Lots of drama here, which is good and bad. Relationships are crazy, especially in the beginning and you add in outing and such, but remember to keep this all in proportion. Honestly, I'd like to see a bit more of Ogre and LM's lives beyond the drama. More on the art, especially. I think Ogre'd be a lot happier if he was able to pursue something he loves (beyond LM) like his art.

Must not let this day pass unnoticed!! Happy Birthday Rush! For all the support and care you give to others, I hope it's returned ten fold, especially on your birthday! Have a great day hun!

Chiraptophobia aka fear of being touched. I can tolerate it without flipping out from my loved ones but I quite often jerk away from strangers, especially if the contact is unexpected. This was almost exclusively related to adults, as I grew up, and now is limited there (thankfully since I like kids and have tons of nieces and nephews to play with). There are only a few adults I will touch willingly. The second is directly related to the first, called Enocholophobia aka fear of being in a crowd. I've never gone to a concert, I only go to the theater if we go in very early and either leave before anyone else or after everyone else leaves and I don't have to sit next to anyone I don't know, and the few times I've tried to Black Friday shop? Niiiightmares. Literally.

Great tips Cassie!

Of course! Owen so should have asked!! But he is a man and they're sort of maschostic it that way. LOL Thanks for the review Lisa.

Yeah, they can be. Talking about emotions, riiiiight! I will have more Carthera stories in the future; I'm just swamped with projects. I'll get back to them, sometime, I swear! Thanks so much for reading, and for commenting, Carrie!

Thanks! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story!

I hope that your mom gets better Cassie! With symptoms like that I would wonder if she didn't have some sort of imbalance. I'm sure they'll do all the tests that she needs. My sister had similar symptoms to those and kept passing out, and it turned out to be thyroid problems.

Congratulations honey!!!

Drama, drama, drama. Great emotional arc in this chapter. I like the hook up girl; she was a cool character. Hot sex scene, though I'm not sure if I liked the bitch comment afterward, nor Ogre saying he'd do whatever it takes. It almost made it seem as if bottoming would be a bad thing still, even though he really enjoyed it, cause LM made sure of that. It lessened the scene imo, made their connection and make-up still a bit of a punishment, not an act of showing that Ogre is LM's and truly is acknowledging he's gay inside. Somehow I see complications coming with Eric later in the story though.

Awww, seriously, my eyes were stinging as I read the last part of that chapter and I had a hold of my accent pillow in a death grip. Great flow, I loved the emotion here. The scene with Eric in the morning was hilarious, you show us the emotional ups and downs LM aka Clay went through (and I liked the art class scene too) and then wham! hit us with a doozy at the end.

Good. If it makes you happy, do it!

Perfidy! Slander! Nuh-uh!!! Actually, GA Stories seems to add words. If you looked at this chapter in word, even with the *** mark to indicate a bit of a scene break, this has 999 words. I was up til 11:30 paring things down to make sure of it last night, lol. (Okay, I had to double check this, I was tired last night!!) I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter Mann! Thanks for reviewing. Don't get busted at work, lol, as much as I enjoy the fact that you're reading my stuff.

Well I don't know I missed this! I'm so glad you liked the chapter and that I managed to do what you didn't expect. Thanks for commenting hun! I do so like to add more than a bit of intrigue to my stories, lol. It's no wonder that Yaseke didn't want to tell Dade though; he already admitted to the therapist thing. More will be coming much sooner than last time, promise! Thanks for commenting, Daddydavek.

Pale yellow light is seeping in through the window when I wake up. Owen said he was planning on sleeping in but he's not in bed beside me, he's standing by the window. I slip from the bed and pad up behind him. Rubbing my face against his shoulder, I give him a tight hug. "Why don't you tell me what's bothering you?" The urge to hold my breath is hard to overcome as I wait. I start to let him go. His hands come up, trapping mine. "Stay." His voice is rough and his hands are hard against my wr

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The Captain's shield isn't mythical, it was originally a triangular shielf made of bulletproof alloy. Comic franchise issues occured, switching it to the round one. The whole 'the shield is a special vibrational metal that only comes from another planet' bit came way way way later than the original comics, and the movies. But I'm letting my geek show. Anyway, I don't think that we have to make our heroes be the 'guy next door' in order to make them appeal to readers. We simply have to make them 'human'. Consider the varying qualities about each character that prevents them from being 'too perfect'. Clark Kent - Superman's mild mannered disguise - is a bit clumsy and hopelessly shy. Bruce Banner obviously struggles with repressed anger issues, yet is a gentle giant at heart. Batman has a vendetta in his heart over his parent's murders and can act irrationally in that regard. Iron Man's Tony Stark is a irresponsible playboy, until it really matters. In my own stories, I have a male character that is a tech genius that freelances for the government that swoops in to help my main character get out of a very bad situation. Yet, I had an ex of his show up early on and point out how very very bad this guy was at relationships, due to his work and personal failures to connect with his date/partner. (Double Down, if anyone's interested in which story I mean) In Nephy's Face in the Window, Haze swoops in to help Ace from the abuse he's experiencing and the way his family treats him like he is a helpless child, yet Haze has his own very real and damaging temper issues due to a past trauma that affects his own family. In Andy's Premium story, Chosen of Honorus, Farrell, the wizard who is supposed to save the world, is a horrible slob and a more than a bit impatient. No matter what genre, age, or type of character, the common thread through all of these is that no matter how powerful, smart, or good they are, they have very human qualities we can relate to. Everyone might say they want the perfect man, but really, how boring would that be? I want to see the flaws and the struggles to overcome challenges by my heroes in stories, because that way I feel I can root alongside them as they gain their deserved happily ever after moment.

Hey hun! Happy Birthday!

Happy Birthday dear!! Big hugs!!!!